Robin's Return
Poem on Spring2 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
What a lovely Spring poem. I love the picture too. I didn't know Robin's eggs were blue in colour, aren't they lovely. Your 5-7-5 poem is spot on for the contest, and very well written. Good luck! :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2017
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What a lovely Spring poem. I love the picture too. I didn't know Robin's eggs were blue in colour, aren't they lovely. Your 5-7-5 poem is spot on for the contest, and very well written. Good luck! :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 02-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2017
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Thank you for your kind consideration!
Comment from dragonpoet
This haiku is a good contest entry. I think the second line sounds off though
Maybe it could be "nature's herald returns". I feel the nest of blue eggs lets us know it is a robin's nest. Or if you want to keep robin in the poem the first line could be
'robin's blue treasure'.
Good luck and keep writing.
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2017
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This haiku is a good contest entry. I think the second line sounds off though
Maybe it could be "nature's herald returns". I feel the nest of blue eggs lets us know it is a robin's nest. Or if you want to keep robin in the poem the first line could be
'robin's blue treasure'.
Good luck and keep writing.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 02-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2017
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Thanks for the helpful hints. I knew it was a bit off and just needed an outside opinion. Appreciate the review.
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You're welcome. Glad I could help.
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You're welcome. Glad I could help.
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