Tears on the keyboard
The reason why15 total reviews
Comment from l.raven
HI Waves, this is one of your best...I love the way you worded it...it seems like the good people are the ones that get hurt...and die...but I do believe that God only takes the best...soooooooo very well written my sweet friend...it could be a song...love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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HI Waves, this is one of your best...I love the way you worded it...it seems like the good people are the ones that get hurt...and die...but I do believe that God only takes the best...soooooooo very well written my sweet friend...it could be a song...love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 01-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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Wow I am humbled and honoured you feel this way. You always lift my spirits with your beautiful positive reviews
dip
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your so welcome Waves...I loved it...keep them coming...love xxoo
Comment from Teri7
This is another very well written poem/song. Every time I read one of these types it makes me think that you just lost your wife. I hope that is not so. Very good wording and would do well for a song! Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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This is another very well written poem/song. Every time I read one of these types it makes me think that you just lost your wife. I hope that is not so. Very good wording and would do well for a song! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 01-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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No everything is sweet Teri they are just poems that come to me though I have many friends that fall in these categories unfortunately
thanks so much as always
dip
Comment from Asem.inspirations
This is a very beautifully worded poem DIP. It really shows another side of you. The pictures that you use are always so amazing also. This poem tugs at the heart strings with relatable expressions. Many people feel this way from one time or the other. Below are my favorite lines, so very precious.
Tears on the keyboard,
My eyes are a river
Please tell me oh dear Lord,
Why you're a taker not a giver?
I sit here bewildered,
Teardrops wet my fingers
Wonder why people hurt most
Are the carers and givers
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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This is a very beautifully worded poem DIP. It really shows another side of you. The pictures that you use are always so amazing also. This poem tugs at the heart strings with relatable expressions. Many people feel this way from one time or the other. Below are my favorite lines, so very precious.
Tears on the keyboard,
My eyes are a river
Please tell me oh dear Lord,
Why you're a taker not a giver?
I sit here bewildered,
Teardrops wet my fingers
Wonder why people hurt most
Are the carers and givers
Comment Written 01-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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Thanks again Tier glad you like it
dip
Comment from Gloria ....
I didn't know you were a musician too dip! That's terrific and this is a lovely song to express sorrow.
One wee nit:
And I feel it's insiduous (insidious)
Thank you for sharing my friend. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
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I didn't know you were a musician too dip! That's terrific and this is a lovely song to express sorrow.
One wee nit:
And I feel it's insiduous (insidious)
Thank you for sharing my friend. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 31-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
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Thanks Gloria fixed the spag. Yeah sometimes I dabble with a song lyric or two I have been revisiting my poetry and adding a chorus here and there on the ones that could work. I have enough for 2000 songs lol
Thanks as always for commenting
dip
Comment from country ranch writer
Some times people are takers and not givers because they don't know how to give of ones self to another. It is sad but true. Don't know the real reasons why.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
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Some times people are takers and not givers because they don't know how to give of ones self to another. It is sad but true. Don't know the real reasons why.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
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Thankyou so much Mom yeah I know exactly what you mean
dip
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Comment from TAB_that's me
Indeed the carers and givers always hurt the most - we wear our hearts on our sleeves.
I love your poem/song lyrics. They ring true with me.
Teresa
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
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Indeed the carers and givers always hurt the most - we wear our hearts on our sleeves.
I love your poem/song lyrics. They ring true with me.
Teresa
Comment Written 31-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
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Thank you so much Teresa much appreciated
Thankyou so much for the 6 stars you made my day
dip
Comment from Pantygynt
I like this and I too can feel the song, perhaps, because it is a song, that first line should work like a refrain, and appear at the head of each verse, a hook into the title. The lost lines resulting can I feel sure be worked around with a little effort.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
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I like this and I too can feel the song, perhaps, because it is a song, that first line should work like a refrain, and appear at the head of each verse, a hook into the title. The lost lines resulting can I feel sure be worked around with a little effort.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
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You know I was feeling the same. I initially didn't write it with song lyrics in mind until one reviewer suggested it. I like your idea Panty
Thanks for reviewing as always
dip
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Hello my friend this is well written you don't have to be a believer to have feelings my friend there is so much going on in the world today nobody truly knows there destiny well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
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Hello my friend this is well written you don't have to be a believer to have feelings my friend there is so much going on in the world today nobody truly knows there destiny well done regards Jill
Comment Written 31-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
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Thanks so much Jill much appreciated
dip
Comment from damommy
I know there's lot of this feeling going on right now in the face of such tragedy. But I never question God.
Your poem is sad. We never know why these things happen. Natural disasters occur all the time.
I like the use of 'levy.' A word you don't see often.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
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I know there's lot of this feeling going on right now in the face of such tragedy. But I never question God.
Your poem is sad. We never know why these things happen. Natural disasters occur all the time.
I like the use of 'levy.' A word you don't see often.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
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Thankyou so much Yvonne all ways appreciate your input
xdip
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
Hi Dip
Really enjoyed this solemn poem, which flowed effortlessly,
lovely rhythm and rhyme throughout with some probing questions within.
I particularly enjoyed the last stanza which completed this excellent poem tremendously well.
Mitchell.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
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Hi Dip
Really enjoyed this solemn poem, which flowed effortlessly,
lovely rhythm and rhyme throughout with some probing questions within.
I particularly enjoyed the last stanza which completed this excellent poem tremendously well.
Mitchell.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2017
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Thanks so much Mitchell your reviews are always uplifting for me
dip
