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Viewing comments for Chapter 56 "Mole World 8"Animal poetry and short stories
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Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes my friend I liked this I can forgive the deliberate spelling mistakes without them it wouldn't be the same well done my friend regards Jill
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2017
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Yes my friend I liked this I can forgive the deliberate spelling mistakes without them it wouldn't be the same well done my friend regards Jill
Comment Written 26-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2017
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Thank you, Jill
Comment from Teri7
Bill, This is very cute what you have penned. I saw the misspellings, but thought my glassed needed cleaning. You used very good wording and very good imagery. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2017
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Bill, This is very cute what you have penned. I saw the misspellings, but thought my glassed needed cleaning. You used very good wording and very good imagery. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 25-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2017
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Thanks, Teri
Comment from Possummagic
Loved your imagery! At first I thought that you had accidentally spelt mustard incorrectly but then I realised that you don't spell anything incorrectly. The German ones were fillled with French mustard and the British Kitchener buns were fun of jam.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Loved your imagery! At first I thought that you had accidentally spelt mustard incorrectly but then I realised that you don't spell anything incorrectly. The German ones were fillled with French mustard and the British Kitchener buns were fun of jam.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Thanks, PM, for giving this a look. Bill
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You're welcome.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Umm...no thanks. I'll stick to donuts with cream filling. (LOL)
One nit in an otherwise fun-filled, mole adventure poem. It's not a sonnet. It has 14 lines, that's true... Even something close to a volta... (*giggling*) But Bill, uh-uh. :))
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017
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Umm...no thanks. I'll stick to donuts with cream filling. (LOL)
One nit in an otherwise fun-filled, mole adventure poem. It's not a sonnet. It has 14 lines, that's true... Even something close to a volta... (*giggling*) But Bill, uh-uh. :))
Comment Written 24-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017
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I did identify it as a "sonnet-form" which means it wouldn't pass the smell test for a perfect sonnet.
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Hahahaha - oops. My bad... ?
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
Hi Bill,
After all mustard does look a little like custard...
Or does it rhyme like custard... yeh that must be it...
Cute poem, forces one to keep reading...
I thought sure Kermit would be a frog...
Nicely done...
:-) Carolyn
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017
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Hi Bill,
After all mustard does look a little like custard...
Or does it rhyme like custard... yeh that must be it...
Cute poem, forces one to keep reading...
I thought sure Kermit would be a frog...
Nicely done...
:-) Carolyn
Comment Written 24-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017
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Thanks, notes
Comment from BOO ghost
Mt cats slaughter moles by the dozens in front of my apartment. Used to see lots of dirt dug up until the cat clan showed up. favorite words: Mickey McMole took the subway to wark
on Mondays he would stop for a dernut
special one day was a cream-filled bismarck
he could share with his new buddy Kermit
Well done, mate.
BOO-tastic!
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017
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Mt cats slaughter moles by the dozens in front of my apartment. Used to see lots of dirt dug up until the cat clan showed up. favorite words: Mickey McMole took the subway to wark
on Mondays he would stop for a dernut
special one day was a cream-filled bismarck
he could share with his new buddy Kermit
Well done, mate.
BOO-tastic!
Comment Written 24-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017
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Thanks, BOO
Comment from nomi338
Wow! I can't believe you went there. I don't know if there are any cops on the site, if there are you had better drive carefully for a while. You just might have to answer for that swipe at the well known love affair between cops and donuts.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017
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Wow! I can't believe you went there. I don't know if there are any cops on the site, if there are you had better drive carefully for a while. You just might have to answer for that swipe at the well known love affair between cops and donuts.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017
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After I had a mole buying mustard donuts, I guess I needed the stability of this well-known association.
Comment from frogbook
Very clever with it's interesting rhyming and great sense of humor. I laughed when the "prices were hiked," especially. Another one-of-a-kind piece that will stick in my head.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017
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Very clever with it's interesting rhyming and great sense of humor. I laughed when the "prices were hiked," especially. Another one-of-a-kind piece that will stick in my head.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017
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Thank you, FB, for giving this a look. Bill
Comment from loismddavis
well Kermit certainly has unusual tastes--I just can't imagine a mustard filled donut. A nice poem told with humor and really rhythmic rhyming when one reads it aloud. The dialect is perfectly suited to this poem
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017
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well Kermit certainly has unusual tastes--I just can't imagine a mustard filled donut. A nice poem told with humor and really rhythmic rhyming when one reads it aloud. The dialect is perfectly suited to this poem
Comment Written 24-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017
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Thank you, Lois