Free Verse Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Slack-Jawed Tide"A collection of free verse poems
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Comment from Pearl Edwards
I'm glad you put the glossary up Tony it means I wouldn't be the only one to learn new words with this reading. Great free verse and love the play on words with the sting in the tail.Your descriptions of the sea really put us up there on the landing walking with him. Very nice
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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I'm glad you put the glossary up Tony it means I wouldn't be the only one to learn new words with this reading. Great free verse and love the play on words with the sting in the tail.Your descriptions of the sea really put us up there on the landing walking with him. Very nice
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 25-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Very many thanks for your kind words, Valda. Always appreciated. Tony
Comment from smileycloud
very beautiful poetic language
the tail on this piece is really effective
due to the sea theme of the poem
I was reminded of a stingray shape with your whole poem layout
very nice
have a smiley day
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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very beautiful poetic language
the tail on this piece is really effective
due to the sea theme of the poem
I was reminded of a stingray shape with your whole poem layout
very nice
have a smiley day
Comment Written 25-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Many thanks, Smiley. I appreciate your review. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from LIJ Red
"where ignorant armies clash by night." Great free verse. Jellyfish are the yellow jackets of the ocean. My favorite subtropical beach was where these reverse lemmings came to sting and die, and dead sharks wash up and rot in the sun...
sad to think I'll never see another sea...unless global warming comes faster than we think...artwork's excellent also.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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"where ignorant armies clash by night." Great free verse. Jellyfish are the yellow jackets of the ocean. My favorite subtropical beach was where these reverse lemmings came to sting and die, and dead sharks wash up and rot in the sun...
sad to think I'll never see another sea...unless global warming comes faster than we think...artwork's excellent also.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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It's a very long time since I read "Dover Beach". Thank you for reminding me of it. Thanks, too, for your kind words about my free verse poem. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from c_lucas
The sea has a reputation of mixed behavior. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery and writing.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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The sea has a reputation of mixed behavior. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery and writing.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Many thanks, Charlie. I appreciate your review. Best wishes, Tony
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You're welcome, Charlie
Comment from kiwigirl2821
This is awesome Tony. You know you're using the language of "JAWS" lol. I think it's that exact assumption that there is some lethal something or another lurking ready to take our toes that keeps many a person on the sidelines. Great imagery. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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This is awesome Tony. You know you're using the language of "JAWS" lol. I think it's that exact assumption that there is some lethal something or another lurking ready to take our toes that keeps many a person on the sidelines. Great imagery. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 24-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Many thanks, Kiwi. I appreciate your review. I keep my toes out of the water unless I can clearly see the sand below! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Yes, I am well acquainted with the bluebottle. Pete use to be officer in charge of the ambulance at Maroochydore. The centre was not far from the beach and at bluebottle time he was busy relieving stings for many people, lots of kids too. You have an ingenious collection of words, nice to learn a few new ones this time around,It is a great shape to with the bluebottle sting hanging down, Giddy Giddy
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Yes, I am well acquainted with the bluebottle. Pete use to be officer in charge of the ambulance at Maroochydore. The centre was not far from the beach and at bluebottle time he was busy relieving stings for many people, lots of kids too. You have an ingenious collection of words, nice to learn a few new ones this time around,It is a great shape to with the bluebottle sting hanging down, Giddy Giddy
Comment Written 24-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Many thanks, Giddy. I appreciate your review. I sometimes used to slop vinegar over children's legs after swimming in the sea, but lesser stings than the bluebottle. I don't think we have them here. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from nancyjam
wow! what wonderful descriptive language.
Great use of alliteration throughout.
amazing word choice.
Doubt if I would ever want to enter these
waters, especially with that man-o'-war
lurking beneath the silver sea!
Great free verse.
Nancy
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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wow! what wonderful descriptive language.
Great use of alliteration throughout.
amazing word choice.
Doubt if I would ever want to enter these
waters, especially with that man-o'-war
lurking beneath the silver sea!
Great free verse.
Nancy
Comment Written 24-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Many thanks, Nancy. I appreciate your review. You're right - the water's best avoided during the man-of-war season! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and presentation.
-Author notes appreciated.
-Effective imagery and alliteration.
-This is like a short story in poem
form about this man-o'-war.
-I wouldn't want to be in its path!
-A great ending, Tony.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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-Nice image and presentation.
-Author notes appreciated.
-Effective imagery and alliteration.
-This is like a short story in poem
form about this man-o'-war.
-I wouldn't want to be in its path!
-A great ending, Tony.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Many thanks, Pam. I appreciate your review. You're right - they are best avoided! Best wishes, Tony
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You are welcome, Tony. Have a good weekend coming up.
Comment from rspoet
A wonderful free verse poem
with excellent imagery of the sea and tide
I guess we have different imaginations, though
the image dead men drifting in the tide
would ruin the scene for me
but it is consistent with the Physalia's lethal sting
Beautifully stream of thought
RS
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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A wonderful free verse poem
with excellent imagery of the sea and tide
I guess we have different imaginations, though
the image dead men drifting in the tide
would ruin the scene for me
but it is consistent with the Physalia's lethal sting
Beautifully stream of thought
RS
Comment Written 24-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Very many thanks for your kind words, RS. Always appreciated. Tony
Comment from Susanjohn
My goodness Tony! Your creeping me out!..I already have an over-active imagination..and this little piece has my mind whirling. WOW to the splendid imagery! GEEZZZZ..this is good!....except those dead men...lol WOW :-)
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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My goodness Tony! Your creeping me out!..I already have an over-active imagination..and this little piece has my mind whirling. WOW to the splendid imagery! GEEZZZZ..this is good!....except those dead men...lol WOW :-)
Comment Written 24-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Very many thanks for your review, Susan, and the six star award. Much appreciated! I shall make my next post less creepy! Tony
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LOL you're welcome Tony. Creepy or not, I'm sure I will enjoy it! :-)