The Little Dog That Wouldn't Let Go
Viewing comments for Chapter 49 "A Major Curve In Our Lives' Roads-2"Subtitle: God Never Lets Go!
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Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very nice of you to write of your travail. Yes, God is good.
Your piece, though, could use some work.
our brothers and Sisters - no cap for sisters
I can't drive in the dark something to do with night blindness - needs a comma after 'dark'
thanks to her lovely brother Sam and her dad was involved, - This whole sentence should be rewritten, maybe into 2 sentences.
She was a nurse there and she had been a pathology collector here in our home a long time ago, now she was also very pregnant, Louise said. - You should begin a new sentence at 'Now she'
It seemed there was a possibility - The paragraph that begins with these words has 3 sentences . It should be rewritten with 4 or 5.
in Dishwashing - No cap for dishwashing
Best wishes.
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reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Very nice of you to write of your travail. Yes, God is good.
Your piece, though, could use some work.
our brothers and Sisters - no cap for sisters
I can't drive in the dark something to do with night blindness - needs a comma after 'dark'
thanks to her lovely brother Sam and her dad was involved, - This whole sentence should be rewritten, maybe into 2 sentences.
She was a nurse there and she had been a pathology collector here in our home a long time ago, now she was also very pregnant, Louise said. - You should begin a new sentence at 'Now she'
It seemed there was a possibility - The paragraph that begins with these words has 3 sentences . It should be rewritten with 4 or 5.
in Dishwashing - No cap for dishwashing
Best wishes.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Thanks very much. I hope I can fix this and get you back to up the "ante" on the score, later. Appreciate your advice. This is actually a converted Facebook discussion for the benefit of all the friends who were praying for us and I admit a bit messy in the translation to prose.
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That'll do it.
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Thanks, I'll work on it and let you know.
Comment from tfawcus
Interesting reading, as always, Geoffrey. A nicely balanced account of the trials and tribulations offset by the professionalism displayed by the medical staff and the support of friends and family. Your faith, too, has been is a defining strength to help carry you through the hard times.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Interesting reading, as always, Geoffrey. A nicely balanced account of the trials and tribulations offset by the professionalism displayed by the medical staff and the support of friends and family. Your faith, too, has been is a defining strength to help carry you through the hard times.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Thanks, mate, I presume we can't take it you are back on your story again? Appreciate the lovely review.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Wow, three months in the hospital would've been awful.
Also, the lay there three weeks to heal would add to that.
Why couldn't she be at home during that time. You did a
greet job sharing this part of your story. I'm happy you had
such caring neighbors.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Wow, three months in the hospital would've been awful.
Also, the lay there three weeks to heal would add to that.
Why couldn't she be at home during that time. You did a
greet job sharing this part of your story. I'm happy you had
such caring neighbors.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 13-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Thanks Jannypan I promise I am back to new writing real soon. Sadly, she is now wheelchair bound or in bed. No more driving for either of us these days. She could drive it is just getting her in and out of the car is a problem, now. Some more to come yet.
Comment from judiverse
This is written in such a nice, conversational style. It's like the reader can hear you speaking. I enjoyed the way you had to tackle those chores like doing the laundry and the dishes. You also show how wonderful the neighbors to bring you food while Louse was in the hospital. We have a fairly new hospital where I live, and all the rooms are private. That takes care of the patients who are noisy and make it hard for others to rest. It is difficult when recovery takes so long, as it did in Louise's case. judi
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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This is written in such a nice, conversational style. It's like the reader can hear you speaking. I enjoyed the way you had to tackle those chores like doing the laundry and the dishes. You also show how wonderful the neighbors to bring you food while Louse was in the hospital. We have a fairly new hospital where I live, and all the rooms are private. That takes care of the patients who are noisy and make it hard for others to rest. It is difficult when recovery takes so long, as it did in Louise's case. judi
Comment Written 12-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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Thanks, Judi, I felt like I had to get these out for one last round as I know newer fans and members would have missed them, way back in 2016 when they first got up, as someone realized I was writing these while she was still in hospital in some cases. Actually, the conversational style happened because these were transferred and edited from Facebook at the time.
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You're welcome. I've read some of your past posts, but I did miss this one. judi
Comment from BethShelby
That was a major curve in your life and it wasn't that long ago. I guess your wrote this about the time it was happening because it seems like it was still happening when you were writing. The Lord did bless you with good people to help when you needed help. My husband died in 2017 so wasn't on fan story then. I got back on in 2019.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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That was a major curve in your life and it wasn't that long ago. I guess your wrote this about the time it was happening because it seems like it was still happening when you were writing. The Lord did bless you with good people to help when you needed help. My husband died in 2017 so wasn't on fan story then. I got back on in 2019.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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So glad you get to read this now. Yes, I was probably writing this as I missed my sweetheart in the hospital at the time. A couple more chapters and it is all finished...except for the Rambles that carry on more to day today stuff still going on.
Comment from Sally Law
A six for being such a wonderful husband to Louise. My, what a trial. You are an overcomer! Looks like you had many angels around you both. I dislodged my should and tore my rotator cuff. Besides having a baby, I never knew such pain. I had surgery and six months of intense physical therapy to regain my arm.
Sending you both my best today as always,
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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A six for being such a wonderful husband to Louise. My, what a trial. You are an overcomer! Looks like you had many angels around you both. I dislodged my should and tore my rotator cuff. Besides having a baby, I never knew such pain. I had surgery and six months of intense physical therapy to regain my arm.
Sending you both my best today as always,
Sal XOs
Comment Written 12-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2022
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They wanted to operate but Louise so dependent on her arms back then still on crutches...not now for a long time. Thanks for the lovely review.
Comment from Ricky1024
As I recently been released from an 8-day stay in the hospital with supposed Mercer and four other previously ventures until I had to have an operation this hits kind of deep to me Marie wonderfully written of course with no grammar issues thanks.
Dr. Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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As I recently been released from an 8-day stay in the hospital with supposed Mercer and four other previously ventures until I had to have an operation this hits kind of deep to me Marie wonderfully written of course with no grammar issues thanks.
Dr. Ricky 1024
Comment Written 17-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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Thanks very much. Glad some are still around to review one more time, as we bring this book to a close. We were all set to finish it when my wife suffered the injury we write of here. Hence these last additional chapters. Stick around ok.
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As older writers and artists we need to stick around to teach the kids exactly how to do it!
Rick
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AMEN just sorry one oldie is on his way out real soon, mate. Keep trying to leave and keep meeting new folks. Still have not found out who is actually on Tom's "Committee" and still not happy about all the "goings on" in this place. David Malouf an eminent writer and poet here in Australia says "we can't call ourselves an author till we get a couple of books under our belt." While I do have five completerd or almost completed works in here I am still unpublished sadly. This one is supposed to be "first cab off the rank." I forget where you are sorry.
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From the gift of pure tragedy a lesson to be learned from a loss of a son of a teen and then in the suicide of a 20 year marriage I've recreated myself in the past 16 years with my writings and competed over the United States with trophies and plaques recognized by to virtual who's who's for my ability of writing no more or no less 700 never publish personally myself but published with my works of course for others to make money I think I my gift is from the writing from the mind and heart and soul as C Lucas tells me when he started reviewing me you're preaching to the choir here at fanstorycom she said he used to do another older writer poet my like 8 year career here has been miffed with poor reviews of our misunderstandings about the gift of life in Oregon transmission through an 18 year old son who say for Life 16 years ago in three still moving on if I do promote that I expect respect not to me as much as my son and if I don't get it for whatever reasons whether it's grammar or misunderstanding I attack violently back I've done it four times and kicked off the site by Tom he's cruel and always goes with the lesser when it comes to the tormentor instead of the greater when it comes to those who subjected to this torment I tried to explain these poor reviews graciously that their Young writers here that don't need to be pulled down just because they messed up the grammar of one word and you take a full star away or even more and average it out is a three-star review when the content is quite beautiful needing three more.
Rick
Comment from smbau
Like your story for it tells of your and your wife's experiences in the Geriatric Ward and all wonderful people who came to assist. Indeed, God is good, faithful and always provides for our needs. You are witness and have a first hand experience to share the goodness of God in your and your wife's life and thought all the people the Lord exposed you to when you needed them most.
Optional suggestions
" had spoken to Louise on the phone a little while after I got home." vs "Meanwhile, after I got home, I spoke to Louise on the phone a little."
"...were lovely people, particularly, Dr. Josh..."
"...sub-Continent..." vs "subcontinent"
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2017
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Like your story for it tells of your and your wife's experiences in the Geriatric Ward and all wonderful people who came to assist. Indeed, God is good, faithful and always provides for our needs. You are witness and have a first hand experience to share the goodness of God in your and your wife's life and thought all the people the Lord exposed you to when you needed them most.
Optional suggestions
" had spoken to Louise on the phone a little while after I got home." vs "Meanwhile, after I got home, I spoke to Louise on the phone a little."
"...were lovely people, particularly, Dr. Josh..."
"...sub-Continent..." vs "subcontinent"
Comment Written 02-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2017
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Hi New friend thanks for the suggestions. Not sure if we have met before. There are two more chapters on this. I am thankful for someone else who does not mind Life stories.I am thinking we might do another chapter now Louise is home. Appreciate the great review.
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You are welcomed!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am enjoying this step by step journey you have gone through and my prayers remain with you.
We then needed our brothers and Sisters in the Lord's prayers. (lower case 's' on sisters)
I had permission from Louise to sleep in the next morning. (following morning, do to definition)
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2017
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I am enjoying this step by step journey you have gone through and my prayers remain with you.
We then needed our brothers and Sisters in the Lord's prayers. (lower case 's' on sisters)
I had permission from Louise to sleep in the next morning. (following morning, do to definition)
Comment Written 02-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2017
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Thanks Barbara so good of you coming through. Will work on the spags. I should confess a lot of this is converted Face book dialogue where I have changed the tenses..hard sometimes trying to reverse to looking back hehe.
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Geoff.
"and she DID NOT WANT MALE ones assisting. As was her right, of course." (I don't blame her.)
" I had been doing really well visiting her every day even at 14 km's each way travel. I could not see myself able to visit Louise every day as I have been, at (as we thought back then) twice the distance. It got worse later!" (I simply do not understand how, in this day and age, they can't make it easier for you...Sheesh!)
"Good News! Louise got a Rehab bed sooner than we had hoped! Your prayers were appreciated. God is good! Yay!" (Fantastic. Our prayers were answered.)
"She was now in contact online, thanks to her lovely brother Sam who bought her an IPAD Tablet." (Good old Aussie team work, mate.)
"left the headlights on the whole day, at the hospital." (Bugger.)
Well, that was a good out come and so was this chapter, with it's pag free content.
Great job, cobber.
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2017
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G'day Geoff.
"and she DID NOT WANT MALE ones assisting. As was her right, of course." (I don't blame her.)
" I had been doing really well visiting her every day even at 14 km's each way travel. I could not see myself able to visit Louise every day as I have been, at (as we thought back then) twice the distance. It got worse later!" (I simply do not understand how, in this day and age, they can't make it easier for you...Sheesh!)
"Good News! Louise got a Rehab bed sooner than we had hoped! Your prayers were appreciated. God is good! Yay!" (Fantastic. Our prayers were answered.)
"She was now in contact online, thanks to her lovely brother Sam who bought her an IPAD Tablet." (Good old Aussie team work, mate.)
"left the headlights on the whole day, at the hospital." (Bugger.)
Well, that was a good out come and so was this chapter, with it's pag free content.
Great job, cobber.
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 02-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2017
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Thanks buddy so appreciate you sticking with me. I feel like we might need another chapter now she has been home for a month.