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Comment from Wshannon
The Map
It is only a prelude to the solitude of longitudes
This arrow straight through the heart of adopted zero
The meridian of human existence
Is but a misshapen circle of life pumping love Â
Often marked by the latitude
Between open arms closing for a hug
From the left  to the right
An arc of  invisible Light
Either the negative or the positive
Both a moment frozen free of time
A zone without Distance
An echo without Rhyme Â
The ethereal pole of affections
True north of that place unbound
The most expensive of all luxuries
With the cheapest ticket price around
Despite the ease of departure
And the low initial cost
Ever a difficult expedition
Where many an intrepid soul
Has gotten profoundly lost
Even though equipped
With an age old legend
marked by an archaic reference
And a continuously updated source
Ultimately it is the map itself
That remains hopelessly unsound
Still we individually persist to chart the journey
And attempt to plot the proper course
To a destination that is rarely, ever, truly found
With a terrain of multitude nuances
To obscure, confuse and astound
As we attempt to avoid the pitfalls
And the precipices that so completely surround Â
Trekking our way ever forward in the hope to meet someday
On that most sacred of all common ground
William E. Shannon
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2017
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The Map
It is only a prelude to the solitude of longitudes
This arrow straight through the heart of adopted zero
The meridian of human existence
Is but a misshapen circle of life pumping love Â
Often marked by the latitude
Between open arms closing for a hug
From the left  to the right
An arc of  invisible Light
Either the negative or the positive
Both a moment frozen free of time
A zone without Distance
An echo without Rhyme Â
The ethereal pole of affections
True north of that place unbound
The most expensive of all luxuries
With the cheapest ticket price around
Despite the ease of departure
And the low initial cost
Ever a difficult expedition
Where many an intrepid soul
Has gotten profoundly lost
Even though equipped
With an age old legend
marked by an archaic reference
And a continuously updated source
Ultimately it is the map itself
That remains hopelessly unsound
Still we individually persist to chart the journey
And attempt to plot the proper course
To a destination that is rarely, ever, truly found
With a terrain of multitude nuances
To obscure, confuse and astound
As we attempt to avoid the pitfalls
And the precipices that so completely surround Â
Trekking our way ever forward in the hope to meet someday
On that most sacred of all common ground
William E. Shannon
Comment Written 25-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2017
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thank you :)
Comment from nbonner
Very catching right from the beginning with using Lost for the first word. I liked it and enjoyed the read. Thank you for sharing and congrats on the win
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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Very catching right from the beginning with using Lost for the first word. I liked it and enjoyed the read. Thank you for sharing and congrats on the win
Comment Written 20-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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Thank you NB :)
Comment from Pantygynt
Easy to see why this ran out a winner. The situation is of course familiar to most of us and many of us in desperation have written about it when we can't think of anything else, but i don't think I have ever seen an ad like this in the lost and found section. The idea of the muse playing hide-and-seek is a good one too. Congratulations.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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Easy to see why this ran out a winner. The situation is of course familiar to most of us and many of us in desperation have written about it when we can't think of anything else, but i don't think I have ever seen an ad like this in the lost and found section. The idea of the muse playing hide-and-seek is a good one too. Congratulations.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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Lol! Thank you PG :-)
Comment from Mitchell Brontë
Hi
What a wonderful 5-7-5 poem, congratulations on your win.
Which describes writer's block with such vivid imagination.
The word play is fantastic which strengthens your statement brilliantly.
Mitchell.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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Hi
What a wonderful 5-7-5 poem, congratulations on your win.
Which describes writer's block with such vivid imagination.
The word play is fantastic which strengthens your statement brilliantly.
Mitchell.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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thank you Mitchell :)
Comment from marybell1
I enjoyed reading your lost poem 'If found please notify me asap'. You followed all the rules for the genre and I loved your choice of topic.
All the best.
Marybell1.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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I enjoyed reading your lost poem 'If found please notify me asap'. You followed all the rules for the genre and I loved your choice of topic.
All the best.
Marybell1.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
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Thank you Mary :-)
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You are most welcome.
Marybell1.
Comment from rspoet
Congratulations on the win!
Ironic, isn't it -
So many lose their muse then write a poem about it and win contests,
seemingly without their muse,
or perhaps the muse was simply waiting in the other room .
I think your muse was it the voting booth.
Sorry, no sixes left for you fine winner.
RS
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2017
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Congratulations on the win!
Ironic, isn't it -
So many lose their muse then write a poem about it and win contests,
seemingly without their muse,
or perhaps the muse was simply waiting in the other room .
I think your muse was it the voting booth.
Sorry, no sixes left for you fine winner.
RS
Comment Written 19-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2017
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Lol! Thank you rs :)
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Congratulations on the win.
-Nice to see you on FS; hope
you will be on more, as I
really like your poetry.
-Syllable count is good.
-I can see why your poem won-
it is very witty and creative.
-I like everything about it.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2017
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-Congratulations on the win.
-Nice to see you on FS; hope
you will be on more, as I
really like your poetry.
-Syllable count is good.
-I can see why your poem won-
it is very witty and creative.
-I like everything about it.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2017
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thank you pam :-)
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You are very welcome, Shelley🙂
Comment from pipersfancy
Well done with this clever 5-7-5 poem! I think your take on the prompt is something we can ALL relate to. Congratulations on your recent win!
Warmest regards,
pf
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2017
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Well done with this clever 5-7-5 poem! I think your take on the prompt is something we can ALL relate to. Congratulations on your recent win!
Warmest regards,
pf
Comment Written 19-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2017
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thank you PF :)
Comment from mvbrooks
This is funny and immediately evoked a smile--it's also poignant because we all feel this sense of frustration. Well done capturing the "obvious" and the "deep" messages. Congrats on your win for this clever and thoughtful poem.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2017
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This is funny and immediately evoked a smile--it's also poignant because we all feel this sense of frustration. Well done capturing the "obvious" and the "deep" messages. Congrats on your win for this clever and thoughtful poem.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2017
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thank you mv :-)
Comment from Hitcher
You must have taken a heavy knock to the head friend, having a playful muse running loose with one's lost mind sounds like a recipe for chaos. Just make sure you write about it when you manage to find it again : )
Nice contest offering... good luck!
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2017
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You must have taken a heavy knock to the head friend, having a playful muse running loose with one's lost mind sounds like a recipe for chaos. Just make sure you write about it when you manage to find it again : )
Nice contest offering... good luck!
Comment Written 18-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2017
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LOL! thank you hitcher :)