Two Children - Double Rainbow
Anything is possible to those who believe.2 total reviews
Comment from smbau
What are the chances that I saw double rainbow today and I am reviewing a story of the same:) Jake and Cam adventure of chasing the ends of the rainbow. Great analogy and reference to Jonathan Livingston Seagull's leg. One would have to read this book to understand your analogy. Consider separating your dialogue as single paragraphs and list your characters and their roles in the story under authors note for ease of readers. Great ending with a twist... the rainbow was two new born babies. Ps: consider checking permission rights when using other authors creation woven into your story.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2017
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What are the chances that I saw double rainbow today and I am reviewing a story of the same:) Jake and Cam adventure of chasing the ends of the rainbow. Great analogy and reference to Jonathan Livingston Seagull's leg. One would have to read this book to understand your analogy. Consider separating your dialogue as single paragraphs and list your characters and their roles in the story under authors note for ease of readers. Great ending with a twist... the rainbow was two new born babies. Ps: consider checking permission rights when using other authors creation woven into your story.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2017
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Thank you so much for your kind review. I so appreciate your critique and will work on what you suggested.
Kind regards. Have a wonderful day!
Comment from Possummagic
What a lovely story of two young boys and their quest to find Jonathan Livingstone seagull tied to the ends of the double rainbow.. the imagery is wonderful and I was excited as they went along their journey to find the end of the rainbow. I wish you luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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What a lovely story of two young boys and their quest to find Jonathan Livingstone seagull tied to the ends of the double rainbow.. the imagery is wonderful and I was excited as they went along their journey to find the end of the rainbow. I wish you luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2017
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Thank you so much for your very kind review.
Have a wonderful evening.
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You are very welcome.