My Muse
What's a girl to do?22 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
I liked the picture of the reflective woman that established the mood for your poem. I have noticed the lack of pantyhose--even I wear compression stockings instead! I enjoyed your rhymed quatrains and reveal about the connection to the "pantyhose" at the conclusion. Very clever- Joan
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2017
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I liked the picture of the reflective woman that established the mood for your poem. I have noticed the lack of pantyhose--even I wear compression stockings instead! I enjoyed your rhymed quatrains and reveal about the connection to the "pantyhose" at the conclusion. Very clever- Joan
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2017
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Thank you Joan for your generous and encouraging review. I was actually going to wear pantyhose the other day with a skirt and boots and discovered, I really don't have any anymore. haha
Happy New Year
Janet
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I can loan you mine next time--I still have unopened packages! Enjoy the holiday weekend and happy New Year- Joan
Comment from rama devi
This is entertaining and well penned. Good originality and style. Great rhymes and flow. Good phonetics. Good satirical overtone. A few memorable lines and phrases and a superb closing punchline simile!
NOTES:
My muse is like a secret lover --
who only visits late at night.
This opening made me smile,because my muse is a night owl too.
There's magic from this witty author --
but, I'm too tired to think or write.
Witty satire. I find that I write best when the mind is tired...the creative side of the brain has more free reign then.
*no comma after OR is needed:
Love the rhymes here and the consonance of L:
or, not recall one word or sound?
He tickles me with lively banter
from countless tales of make-believe.
Does he not know I need my slumber?
I think my muse must be naïve.
I love the clever closing and inventive rhymes and utterly original simile in the last stanza. Note one spag suggestion:
While words of wisdom he's imparting,
my eyelids fall like dominoes.
But(,) at first light(,) when I am ready --
he's disappeared - like pantyhose.
Enjoyed this.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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This is entertaining and well penned. Good originality and style. Great rhymes and flow. Good phonetics. Good satirical overtone. A few memorable lines and phrases and a superb closing punchline simile!
NOTES:
My muse is like a secret lover --
who only visits late at night.
This opening made me smile,because my muse is a night owl too.
There's magic from this witty author --
but, I'm too tired to think or write.
Witty satire. I find that I write best when the mind is tired...the creative side of the brain has more free reign then.
*no comma after OR is needed:
Love the rhymes here and the consonance of L:
or, not recall one word or sound?
He tickles me with lively banter
from countless tales of make-believe.
Does he not know I need my slumber?
I think my muse must be naïve.
I love the clever closing and inventive rhymes and utterly original simile in the last stanza. Note one spag suggestion:
While words of wisdom he's imparting,
my eyelids fall like dominoes.
But(,) at first light(,) when I am ready --
he's disappeared - like pantyhose.
Enjoyed this.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 31-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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Thank your rd for your wonderful review. I always look forward to seeing your name in my inbox. I appreciate you kind suggestions and I really count on your honest review.
blessings
Janet
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Aw, thanks, dear. :-))) Blessings, rd
Comment from Gert sherwood
Laughter you gave me Jmf4119
what a great way to think of your muse( made me, indeed,laugh especially when you told us how he diapered like pantyhose
No way will I buy another pair of pantyhose
Gert
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017
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Laughter you gave me Jmf4119
what a great way to think of your muse( made me, indeed,laugh especially when you told us how he diapered like pantyhose
No way will I buy another pair of pantyhose
Gert
Comment Written 27-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017
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Thank you Gert. I'm happy this one made you laugh. I haven't bought a pair of pantyhose for quite a while but it still surprises me that we don't wear them anymore.
Blessings
Jane
Comment from susan18
Wonderful poem--I know exactly how you feel!
Why is it the greatest ideas, the most wonderful lines, the best images come to us at night when all we want to do is sleep??
Yes, our Muse is a tease!
You captured the frustration in great-sounding words.
I, too, always wonder if I should get up and write these fantastic ideas down.
Great job!!
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Wonderful poem--I know exactly how you feel!
Why is it the greatest ideas, the most wonderful lines, the best images come to us at night when all we want to do is sleep??
Yes, our Muse is a tease!
You captured the frustration in great-sounding words.
I, too, always wonder if I should get up and write these fantastic ideas down.
Great job!!
Comment Written 06-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Thank you Susan for the wonderful review. I appreciate your candor.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from marybell1
I enjoyed reading your contest entry "My Muse". I enjoyed your story line and I also liked your choice of photo. Your rhyming was good except for stanza four. You also had only a near rhyme in stanza two. You may wish to review these.
Marybell1.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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I enjoyed reading your contest entry "My Muse". I enjoyed your story line and I also liked your choice of photo. Your rhyming was good except for stanza four. You also had only a near rhyme in stanza two. You may wish to review these.
Marybell1.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Thank you Marybell for the thoughtful review. I appreciate your candor.
Blessings
Janet
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You are most welcome.
Marybell1
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
My muse is like a secret lover --
who only visits late at night.
There's magic from this witty author --
but, I'm too tired to think or write.'
wonderful words. I met my husband, also a poet on a poetry site, he makes me laugh and astounds me with his talent, what more could I ask for?This is terrific well done kind regards Meia x
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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My muse is like a secret lover --
who only visits late at night.
There's magic from this witty author --
but, I'm too tired to think or write.'
wonderful words. I met my husband, also a poet on a poetry site, he makes me laugh and astounds me with his talent, what more could I ask for?This is terrific well done kind regards Meia x
Comment Written 04-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Thank you Meia for the wonderful review. I appreciate your candor.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Irish Rain
I wear my hose, ha ha. Too expensive to throw out, and they still look nice! If I don't get up and write something down....it's gone. I rarely get up. Loved this, blessings....
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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I wear my hose, ha ha. Too expensive to throw out, and they still look nice! If I don't get up and write something down....it's gone. I rarely get up. Loved this, blessings....
Comment Written 04-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the wonderful review. I appreciate your candor.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from bertranclan
Your poem is really cute, and I like that it rhymes so well. It's like that for me, too: I'll get inspired late at night, but have no energy to write the thoughts down. Funny ending!
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Your poem is really cute, and I like that it rhymes so well. It's like that for me, too: I'll get inspired late at night, but have no energy to write the thoughts down. Funny ending!
Comment Written 04-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the wonderful review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Poet,
This is true, but it wasn't a problem for me since almost all of mine always had holes and runs anyway. Haha! I was always having to run out for more so I was one of the first to toss the notion to the wind -- and with good riddance!! Good luck in the voting!
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Dear Mystery Poet,
This is true, but it wasn't a problem for me since almost all of mine always had holes and runs anyway. Haha! I was always having to run out for more so I was one of the first to toss the notion to the wind -- and with good riddance!! Good luck in the voting!
Comment Written 04-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Thank you robyn for the wonderful review. I always appreciate your candor.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the Muse that likes to work when we feel like sleeping some more. We have to get into the habbit to write down whatever he wants to say, because he will not repeat it again.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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A very well-written poem about the Muse that likes to work when we feel like sleeping some more. We have to get into the habbit to write down whatever he wants to say, because he will not repeat it again.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Thank you Sandra for the wonderful review. You are so right - he never will repeat it.
Blessings
Janet
