Bad Mens
dealing with Mr. Suave13 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a very smart young boy to know not to let this man talk to his mother. . He kept the guy talking until his mom came and told him to hang up.
This does show how funny and intelligent kids can be.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2017
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This is a very smart young boy to know not to let this man talk to his mother. . He kept the guy talking until his mom came and told him to hang up.
This does show how funny and intelligent kids can be.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 12-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2017
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thanks so much!
I'm a'tryin'!
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You are so very welcome. We all are.
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Comment from Teri7
Now this was a very cute and entertaining read. You did a great job with the dialogue, imagery from the words and wording. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017
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Now this was a very cute and entertaining read. You did a great job with the dialogue, imagery from the words and wording. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 29-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017
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thanks, Teri,
much appreciated
Comment from Marvin Calloway
Hey, you're good at this.
It's a nice story. It keeps the reader guessing and it's believable.
Good to see a kid enjoying an activity that doesn't wear out his fingers.
Good luck!
Marv
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017
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Hey, you're good at this.
It's a nice story. It keeps the reader guessing and it's believable.
Good to see a kid enjoying an activity that doesn't wear out his fingers.
Good luck!
Marv
Comment Written 28-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017
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thanks so much.
yeah, I guess burping your name is a better past time. :)
Comment from Mustang Patty
thank you for sharing your entry in the dialogue only contest. I imagine that a call from a stranger would have set my son off like this. He hated it when salesmen called.
Good luck in the contest,
~patty~
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2017
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thank you for sharing your entry in the dialogue only contest. I imagine that a call from a stranger would have set my son off like this. He hated it when salesmen called.
Good luck in the contest,
~patty~
Comment Written 27-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2017
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thank you
Comment from lyenochka
Lol! That's so clever. I think you got exactly what a little boy would say, the kind of typical distractions like "burping out a whole sentence." Good for him for hanging up. I also like that you gave us the context ahead of time in the bar conversation.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2017
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Lol! That's so clever. I think you got exactly what a little boy would say, the kind of typical distractions like "burping out a whole sentence." Good for him for hanging up. I also like that you gave us the context ahead of time in the bar conversation.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2017
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thank you for your very gracious review. sorry I don't have a reviewer rec to give you.
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I know - I use up my votes too soon. But I'm honored that you've even considered it. Blessings.
Comment from Eternal Muse
Absolutely adorable. Utterly charming. This little boy Danny is a genius to keep all those "mens" away from his mom (lol). Fantastic use of a dialogue. Witty, entertaining and keeps you on the edge of your chair. You have a lot of talent.
I wish you luck in the contest if it's still running.
Grand job.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2017
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Absolutely adorable. Utterly charming. This little boy Danny is a genius to keep all those "mens" away from his mom (lol). Fantastic use of a dialogue. Witty, entertaining and keeps you on the edge of your chair. You have a lot of talent.
I wish you luck in the contest if it's still running.
Grand job.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2017
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what a wonderful review! many, many thanks. I'm sorry I don't have a reviewer recommendation left for you. You certainly were encouraging and kind.
Comment from Margaret Ford
Your story is clever, and an excellent entry into the "Dialog Only Writing Contest." I think this story will be hard to beat. I like the way you have structured it: the (ethically-challenged) protagonist is only speaking with one person at a time; it's easy to keep track of who's saying what. The characters are all believable, and the little one made me smile. Margaret
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2017
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Your story is clever, and an excellent entry into the "Dialog Only Writing Contest." I think this story will be hard to beat. I like the way you have structured it: the (ethically-challenged) protagonist is only speaking with one person at a time; it's easy to keep track of who's saying what. The characters are all believable, and the little one made me smile. Margaret
Comment Written 27-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2017
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Thank you very much. For such a wonderful, encouraging review you deserve a reviewer recommendation, but I fear I haven't one. I do offer my sincere appreciation!
Comment from royowen
It just goes to show, one shouldn't chat up somebody's wife, and mum, in the store...now should they? I think things could have gone for our friendly neighbourhood lecher, but I'm glad they didn't, heheh. Excellent entry in this contest, the dialogue was great, quite intuitive and imaginative, well done. Good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2017
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It just goes to show, one shouldn't chat up somebody's wife, and mum, in the store...now should they? I think things could have gone for our friendly neighbourhood lecher, but I'm glad they didn't, heheh. Excellent entry in this contest, the dialogue was great, quite intuitive and imaginative, well done. Good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 27-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2017
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thank you kindly, sir! much appreciated!
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Well done
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Wow I need a protector like Danny. I love the innocience of children and you did this so very well even with the burping. I could hear him doing it.lol
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2017
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Wow I need a protector like Danny. I love the innocience of children and you did this so very well even with the burping. I could hear him doing it.lol
Comment Written 27-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2017
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thanks so much! appreciate it.
actually my grown daughter can burp a whole sentence! she still thinks it's funny.
Comment from Poetic Friend
Wow, this was funny. He should have given Danny another try, and maybe he would have spoken to the mother.
I like the dialogue in this story. It allows for an interesting and humorous read.
Good luck in the contest. You entry is cute.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2017
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Wow, this was funny. He should have given Danny another try, and maybe he would have spoken to the mother.
I like the dialogue in this story. It allows for an interesting and humorous read.
Good luck in the contest. You entry is cute.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2017
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thanks so much. appreciate it.