Senses
Senses Over Time6 total reviews
Comment from TAB_that's me
This sounds like a very special moment for you:) Nice little 100 word story. You have followed all the contest rules and I wish you well in it.
teresa
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This sounds like a very special moment for you:) Nice little 100 word story. You have followed all the contest rules and I wish you well in it.
teresa
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
Comment from Mustang Patty
thank you for sharing your entry in the one to a hundred contest. Your piece tells a vivid story and the presentation was lovely.
You may want to go back and take a look at your sentence structure in places. Not all of your sentences are a complete thought, and your grammar is a bit rough, too.
A good edit could help it in the contest,
~patty~
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thank you for sharing your entry in the one to a hundred contest. Your piece tells a vivid story and the presentation was lovely.
You may want to go back and take a look at your sentence structure in places. Not all of your sentences are a complete thought, and your grammar is a bit rough, too.
A good edit could help it in the contest,
~patty~
Comment Written 24-Jul-2017
Comment from c_lucas
It's always right to stop and enjoy God's Cathedral. His handiwork should be admired. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. Good luck in your contest.
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It's always right to stop and enjoy God's Cathedral. His handiwork should be admired. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2017
Comment from JanPerry
I like your descriptions and time spent on writing this.
The descriptions are very mature for a boy indeed of thirteen years.
Mature and beautiful on every line,
good luck in the contest.
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I like your descriptions and time spent on writing this.
The descriptions are very mature for a boy indeed of thirteen years.
Mature and beautiful on every line,
good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2017
Comment from Halfree
A beautiful memory, But I do not think you are in the bounds of the contest. The contest directs that first word be "One and last word, hundred. " do not think the story meets the instructions. But putting that aside, some good writing here...Had a good read, Liked your story, needs a little work,
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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A beautiful memory, But I do not think you are in the bounds of the contest. The contest directs that first word be "One and last word, hundred. " do not think the story meets the instructions. But putting that aside, some good writing here...Had a good read, Liked your story, needs a little work,
Comment Written 24-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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Thanks for reading and your feedback. Prior to your reading, I did the changes that would adhere to the contest. You know, started writing and digressed. Hope you read updated version, would appreciate your feedback. I'm not on FS much any more, don't think I've seen you either.
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I am there just do not post a lot
Comment from rspoet
This is a very fine entry and story for the contest
with excellent descriptive imagery
and wonderful memories
However, it must start with the word "one" and end with "hundred"
so you need to makes some changes and then check the word count for 100 words
a small typo: "towardÃ? Pikes Peak." [towards]
Sound pretty cool to me.
Hope you make the changes.
Best wishes in the contest
RS
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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This is a very fine entry and story for the contest
with excellent descriptive imagery
and wonderful memories
However, it must start with the word "one" and end with "hundred"
so you need to makes some changes and then check the word count for 100 words
a small typo: "towardÃ? Pikes Peak." [towards]
Sound pretty cool to me.
Hope you make the changes.
Best wishes in the contest
RS
Comment Written 24-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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Thank you so much. I knew the rules, but once started, word-smithed, blah, blah, blah. Have changed. I much appreciate your kind feedback and timely information!
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Great changes. Good luck.
