Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

:)) - Well, this little gem almost feels like romance and summer breezes; stolen glances, exposed shoulders and a hint of perfume on the air...Well done! Best of luck in the contest. I can 'hear' the music...

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017

Thanks much!

reply by Dawn Munro on 28-Aug-2017

You're very welcome.

Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson

Excellent

ooo-la-la so very romantic this Paris poem is, my friend. It's what Paris is all about.
You did a lovely job, and beautiful picture and font to go along with it:) ~Kerry

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2017

Thanks so much!

reply by Kerry Foley Robinson on 29-Jul-2017

reply by Kerry Foley Robinson on 29-Jul-2017

Your welcome

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

oh yes my friend ooh la la indeed Paris the city of romance this is well written and presented good luck in the contest regards Jill

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2017

Thanks so much!

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Good color in your presentation with just the right touch of French included in your 5-7-5. I particularly like the hot pink and black displayed with your piece. Much luck in the contest with this fine entry. Marilyn

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2017

Thanks much!

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This 5-7-5, Paris, has the right set up and includes some of the sites and utterances that may be as close to the French city as we may ever get. Funny.

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Jul-2017

Thanks Bill-much appreciated from a great poem writer such as yourself.

Comment from pipersfancy

Excellent

A lovely photo of the Eiffel Tower, but a couple of nits to point out.

Ooh, la, la..... Pa-ree
-no commas needed, also this familiar phrase is most often seen with an exclamation mark at the end:

Ooh La La!

Misspelling Paris in order to approximate the French pronunciation doesn't work terribly well for me (I actually find it slightly offensive.) Since you're using the phrase "Ooh La La!" which most people typically associate with a French-sounding accent, the proper name, Paris, will likely be sufficient as people will recognize the French pronunciation of the city. Also, there is a natural tendency to rhyme the word with the previous line's ending, "Cherie".

Consider:
Ooh La La! PARIS!

Best of luck in the contest,
pf

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Jul-2017

Thanks for these well thought ideas.

Comment from Irish Rain

Excellent

My favorite so far, of all the lovely entries!! You've nailed it. Gorgeous picture, and such entertaining familiar expressions....everyone will love this! Blessings...

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Jul-2017

Thanks so much for reading.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about Paris and its magical powers and attractions that make us feel romantic and playful. The Eiffel Tower is the most famous attraction for all tourists.

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017

Thanks much!

Comment from nor84

Good

I wanted to give you a heads-up review. There is a short author note attached to the poem, and the contest does not allow author notes. You might want to take that out.

Good luck in the contest.

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 Comment Written 25-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017

Oh My gosh-thanks so much for the heads up!

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

thank you for sharing your entry in the 5-7-5 poetry contest. Your three line poem is well structured to enhance the limited syllables and get the Parisian theme to come come across.

Well done and good luck in the contest,

~patty~

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017

Thanks much!