Therefore I Am
Inspiration can be found all around us.27 total reviews
Comment from mermaids
"Leaves crackle beneath my feet" is a great line. It appeals to the senses. Your creative and vivid use of words makes feelings and scenes come alive. Your free verse form captures the feeling of being alive and experiencing life.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2018
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"Leaves crackle beneath my feet" is a great line. It appeals to the senses. Your creative and vivid use of words makes feelings and scenes come alive. Your free verse form captures the feeling of being alive and experiencing life.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2018
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Thank you so much for your critique of my work. I am very grateful.
Kind regards.
Comment from Poetic Friend
This is a powerful philosophical poem with poignant words. Each line speaks volumes.
I would have preferred periods at the end of the sentences, but the lack of punctuation works fine.
I am unsure who is Andrea, but I get your point.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2018
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This is a powerful philosophical poem with poignant words. Each line speaks volumes.
I would have preferred periods at the end of the sentences, but the lack of punctuation works fine.
I am unsure who is Andrea, but I get your point.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2018
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Thank you so much Poetic Friend. I love your name. I very much appreciate your critique.
Comment from Alec Gould
Powerful! Simply powerful! The first time I read this, the words "haunted" me. The second time I read this, they spoke to me. The third time I read this, it flowed together. The fourth and fifth times I read this, I enjoyed it more and more.
Well done my friend! ~Alec
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2018
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Powerful! Simply powerful! The first time I read this, the words "haunted" me. The second time I read this, they spoke to me. The third time I read this, it flowed together. The fourth and fifth times I read this, I enjoyed it more and more.
Well done my friend! ~Alec
Comment Written 13-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2018
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Thank you so much for your very in depth review. I am so glad that you liked my poem. I wrote this while listening to Andrea Bocelli. I was so moved by him.
Kind regards.
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Andrea Bocelli? Perfect! I also enjoy his music. ~Alec
Comment from robina1978
A lovely painting that complements your longish poem very well. It is a very well written free verse. Is this the one that had to be done within 10 minutes? Plenty of qualities of a free verse in it.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2018
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A lovely painting that complements your longish poem very well. It is a very well written free verse. Is this the one that had to be done within 10 minutes? Plenty of qualities of a free verse in it.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2018
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I so very much appreciate your kind review. I especially was touched that you compared my poem to a lovely painting. I am so humbled.
Kind regards.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 'Free Verse Poetry' writing prompt.
Well written, good story and message.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the 'Free Verse Poetry' writing prompt.
Well written, good story and message.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 13-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2018
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Thank you so much. I wrote this poem while listening to Andrea Bocelli. His voice so touched my heart and the emotion I felt.
Have a wonderful week.
Comment from shieldsE
MOONSUNRISE, you are to be commended for this work of art. It is difficult to pick one line in this poem that stands out more than another, because in whole each word, each line says so very much. Should I be compelled to choose a line I would perhaps embrace the following:
" I am the fountain of spiritual youth continuing to grow
Into the whimsical, wispy, protective willow tree"
As for: "I am alive, therefore I am!" You may see an analogy between, René Descartes' "I think, therefore I am" phrase.
E. Shields
Thank you for sharing this very wonderful work.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2018
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MOONSUNRISE, you are to be commended for this work of art. It is difficult to pick one line in this poem that stands out more than another, because in whole each word, each line says so very much. Should I be compelled to choose a line I would perhaps embrace the following:
" I am the fountain of spiritual youth continuing to grow
Into the whimsical, wispy, protective willow tree"
As for: "I am alive, therefore I am!" You may see an analogy between, René Descartes' "I think, therefore I am" phrase.
E. Shields
Thank you for sharing this very wonderful work.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2018
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I am so thankful for your in depth review of my poem. I am so thankful for your introduction to Rene Descartes. I will definitely read more about him. I just love FanStory. I am learning so much as I work towards getting better and better with my craft.
Thanks again.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You have certainly gathered lots of inspiration from your environment here and written a lovely poem and every line is a gem, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2018
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You have certainly gathered lots of inspiration from your environment here and written a lovely poem and every line is a gem, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 13-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2018
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I certainly have. This poem was written while listening to Andrea Bocelli. I am so glad that you enjoyed reading it. I am ever so humbled by your comment "every line was a gem". Thank you so much Dolly.
Comment from apky
Your free verse is absolutely delightful, embracing and evoking all our sensory receptors. I could caress the words as well as see them with my eyes as I read. I could smell and hear the vivid descriptions. I could "comprehend" my Being.
Good luck with contest.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2017
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Your free verse is absolutely delightful, embracing and evoking all our sensory receptors. I could caress the words as well as see them with my eyes as I read. I could smell and hear the vivid descriptions. I could "comprehend" my Being.
Good luck with contest.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2017
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Thanks very much for your kind review.
Kind regards.
Comment from Auto-Manic
Very nice, brought up some nice imagery and rambled some distant thoughts about the wonder of just being, and to remember to take the time to be I AM.
Nice
AM
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2017
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Very nice, brought up some nice imagery and rambled some distant thoughts about the wonder of just being, and to remember to take the time to be I AM.
Nice
AM
Comment Written 05-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2017
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Thanks so much for your kind review.
Have a wonderful week.
Comment from Irish Rain
God's greatest words...'I Am.' Love this, could be describing Christ, our higher being, or just love. All three the same. Beautiful free verse, blessings...
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2017
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God's greatest words...'I Am.' Love this, could be describing Christ, our higher being, or just love. All three the same. Beautiful free verse, blessings...
Comment Written 05-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2017
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Thank you so much for your kind review.
Blessings right back to you.
