I'm Hollywood
Leonine Rhyme contest entry22 total reviews
Comment from Irish Rain
Very few and far between. This is so true, and a great analogy to life in general, as we constantly seek the 'bigger, better.' Just wonderful!!! Blessings...
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Very few and far between. This is so true, and a great analogy to life in general, as we constantly seek the 'bigger, better.' Just wonderful!!! Blessings...
Comment Written 22-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the great review, Irish. I really appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Ron
Comment from Pantygynt
It seems to me that this leonine rhyme is a particular and regularised form of internal rhyme, and I am intrigued to know how the lions became involved. Ithink the vsentiments expressed in this poem would have worked at your hands in whatever form you expressed them as it is in the content rather than the form that the power of this piece lies. This really is a terrible warning to those who would sacrifice all on the altar of fame and fortune.
The really clever part of this is that it personifies the place that is dedicated to the depersonalising of those who embrace its values most closely.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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It seems to me that this leonine rhyme is a particular and regularised form of internal rhyme, and I am intrigued to know how the lions became involved. Ithink the vsentiments expressed in this poem would have worked at your hands in whatever form you expressed them as it is in the content rather than the form that the power of this piece lies. This really is a terrible warning to those who would sacrifice all on the altar of fame and fortune.
The really clever part of this is that it personifies the place that is dedicated to the depersonalising of those who embrace its values most closely.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Ha. yeah, I don't know how the lions fit in there either. Thank you for the excellent review, Pantygynt. This piece was actually inspired by the picture. I forgot what I was looking for in the first place but when I came across this pic I just had to use it, and this is what came out. I really appreciate the generous stars, friend. Have a great rest of your weekend.
Ron
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a terrific poem and I'm impressed with your talent. The poem clicks along with a marvelous pace and cadence (rhyming, too) that keeps the reader's attention. Great job. Good luck in the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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This is a terrific poem and I'm impressed with your talent. The poem clicks along with a marvelous pace and cadence (rhyming, too) that keeps the reader's attention. Great job. Good luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 22-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the excellent review, Marilyn. I really appreciate the gracious stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Ron
Comment from Dean Kuch
Quite often reality is very ugly, Ron, but your poem here isn't.
Oh sure, it deals with a moribund topic--the death of youthful dreams that far too many would be actresses and actors experience in Tinsel Town.
But the composition itself is exquisite, as is the presentation, accompanying photo, and layout used.
I can't see anything being able to top this in the contest.
Best of luck to you.
~Dean
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Quite often reality is very ugly, Ron, but your poem here isn't.
Oh sure, it deals with a moribund topic--the death of youthful dreams that far too many would be actresses and actors experience in Tinsel Town.
But the composition itself is exquisite, as is the presentation, accompanying photo, and layout used.
I can't see anything being able to top this in the contest.
Best of luck to you.
~Dean
Comment Written 22-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Dean. This piece was actually inspired by the picture this time. I was looking for a picture for another project and when I came up on this one I just had to use it. Yeah, I didn't know what direction I wanted to go with it at first. Should I go dark with some way having this girl in harm or go the good direction and write a piece for all the little church going ladies and have it be the girl in God's hand. Well, you see what way I went. Haha. I really appreciate the generous stars, Dean. Thank you again. Have a good one.
Ron
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You're more than welcome, Ron.
I would have given you a six if I'd had any left.
I'll bet you've gotten very tired of hearing that today, lol.
Take care.
~Dean
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I really appreciate it, D.
Comment from bmethner
It's a lovely poem with such a powerful message. The inner rhyme flows so easily with never the feeling it's forced. Within the poem the personification of Hollywood comes across so real and so evil, and sadly so true. The cost of fame... The artwork beautifully fits the poem. I so enjoyed the read. Though I wish you luck in the contest, I don't think you will need it.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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It's a lovely poem with such a powerful message. The inner rhyme flows so easily with never the feeling it's forced. Within the poem the personification of Hollywood comes across so real and so evil, and sadly so true. The cost of fame... The artwork beautifully fits the poem. I so enjoyed the read. Though I wish you luck in the contest, I don't think you will need it.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review and the big sixer, bmethner. Yeah, the piece was actually inspired by the artwork this time. That doesn't happen often with me. I really appreciate the gracious stars and good luck wishes. I'm sure I'll need all I can get. I know someone will come up with something with rainbows or bunnies and I'll go hurling down in flames. Haha. That's how it usually works. I'm glad you like the piece. Thank you again. Have a great weekend.
Ron
Comment from apky
Although we do read about the "hard realities of Hollywood", you have managed to convey it perfectly in theis verse poem, with Hollywood itself as the POV.
A great lesson for the wannabes to learn.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Although we do read about the "hard realities of Hollywood", you have managed to convey it perfectly in theis verse poem, with Hollywood itself as the POV.
A great lesson for the wannabes to learn.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the great review, apky. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from KL Williams
Great job on this poem. You have skillfully described and personified "Hollywood" and what happens to its victims seeking fame. It's sad what people will go through for just a crumb of celebrity life, or worse yet the ones trying to stay relative in an ever changing world. Best of luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Great job on this poem. You have skillfully described and personified "Hollywood" and what happens to its victims seeking fame. It's sad what people will go through for just a crumb of celebrity life, or worse yet the ones trying to stay relative in an ever changing world. Best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 22-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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That's so true. Thank you for the great review, KL W. I really appreciate the generous stars and good luck wishes, friend. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Ron
Comment from donforclearn
This poem is well written. The Hollywood I know is filled with illusions and preys on those searching for a life that can be lived like that. The cold reality wakes up a few but sinks many others. Good Luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing your work.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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This poem is well written. The Hollywood I know is filled with illusions and preys on those searching for a life that can be lived like that. The cold reality wakes up a few but sinks many others. Good Luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing your work.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the excellent review, Don. I appreciate the generous rating and the good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Ron
Comment from Vicki Easterly
Not pretty, indeed! My computer stalled while reading this poem, and I couldn't wait for it to move to the next line. You make Hollywood into Satan. Rhyme and description of the evils of Hollywood are very effective. My son lived there for 15 years before giving up the dream. I know exactly what you are talking about. Excellent.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Not pretty, indeed! My computer stalled while reading this poem, and I couldn't wait for it to move to the next line. You make Hollywood into Satan. Rhyme and description of the evils of Hollywood are very effective. My son lived there for 15 years before giving up the dream. I know exactly what you are talking about. Excellent.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Wow, 15 years out there? I'm sorry it didn't work out for him. thank you for the excellent review, Vicki. I really appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked the piece.
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Ironically, my son has had better luck since he returned home. His first independent film, Relict, will be shown this Tuesday at our local art theatre. Thanks for caring.
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Awesome. Good for him. I hope he goes far.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
SS,
You did a great job with the prompt. Your rhymes read well without being obtrusive. Your story is true for so many.
I applaud you for writing using this perspective. You are right about the dangers girls find when chasing stardom in Hollywood.
Good job & best wishes in the contest. Jan
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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SS,
You did a great job with the prompt. Your rhymes read well without being obtrusive. Your story is true for so many.
I applaud you for writing using this perspective. You are right about the dangers girls find when chasing stardom in Hollywood.
Good job & best wishes in the contest. Jan
Comment Written 22-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Wow, Jan, thank you so much for the fantastic review and the big sixer. Yeah, I couldn't imagine some of the things girls endure when trying to make it in Hollywood. I'd be too afraid to even try. I dearly appreciate the gracious rating and good luck wishes, Jan. You made my day. Thank you again.
Ron
