Only Yesterday
A kyrielle entry4 total reviews
Comment from Asem.inspirations
This is an extremely marvelous poem. I love how you chose to write you Kyrielle poem by using the repeated line as your first line. It really made the difference for me in the way the words flowed. Your choice of words and picture are also so splendid. WONDERFUL love poem.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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This is an extremely marvelous poem. I love how you chose to write you Kyrielle poem by using the repeated line as your first line. It really made the difference for me in the way the words flowed. Your choice of words and picture are also so splendid. WONDERFUL love poem.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Thank you very much!
Comment from N.K. Wagner
While a couple of rhymes stretch a bit (best/happiness is the most questionable), this Kyrielle is a sweet memoir of an aging couple's love. Your repeating line is perfect in tone for this poem. Enjoyed it. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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While a couple of rhymes stretch a bit (best/happiness is the most questionable), this Kyrielle is a sweet memoir of an aging couple's love. Your repeating line is perfect in tone for this poem. Enjoyed it. :) Nancy
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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Thanks for the feedback. Did revise the best/happiness lines. Appreciate the tip.
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Glad to help. :)
Comment from moongirlwriter
a beautiful poem right from the heart and flows well in every stanza, except for two.
The last two stanzas have a little problem
towards reaching goal of happiness. . . . reaching their goal of happiness, might have a better flow
the the last line, actually has nine syllables and has a problem with flow, how about
flying like petals in the wind. I don't think pink is even necessary because you stated already, cherry blossoms.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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a beautiful poem right from the heart and flows well in every stanza, except for two.
The last two stanzas have a little problem
towards reaching goal of happiness. . . . reaching their goal of happiness, might have a better flow
the the last line, actually has nine syllables and has a problem with flow, how about
flying like petals in the wind. I don't think pink is even necessary because you stated already, cherry blossoms.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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Didn't mean to include the pink in last line - copied and pasted in haste to meet the deadline! And revised the line with happiness. Appreciate the tips. Thanks for the review.
Comment from lalajovanoski
Hello my friend, I very much enjoyed reading this beautifully written romantic poem. I love the rhyming scheme in this it's very soft and smooth. The structure and flow is very even. I like the alliteration and this. I can feel a lot of emotions. Thank you very much for sharing this. With love, lola
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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Hello my friend, I very much enjoyed reading this beautifully written romantic poem. I love the rhyming scheme in this it's very soft and smooth. The structure and flow is very even. I like the alliteration and this. I can feel a lot of emotions. Thank you very much for sharing this. With love, lola
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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Thank you for our insightful comments!
