The Project
UFO poem contest entry8 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
This is such fun and humorous. Good rhythm throughout with good rhyming
too. Last two lines are especially good. A fine entry for the contest and I
wish you good luck in it. Marilyn
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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This is such fun and humorous. Good rhythm throughout with good rhyming
too. Last two lines are especially good. A fine entry for the contest and I
wish you good luck in it. Marilyn
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the great review, Marilyn. I really appreciate the gracious stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked this silly piece.
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I certainly did like it.
Comment from Hamiel
You made me laugh. It is my first time to read humour poem about UFO. Sometimes, there were faces that really scares us because it is mixed by with our sudden imaginations and emotions at the same moment. Very good written. Goodluck!
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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You made me laugh. It is my first time to read humour poem about UFO. Sometimes, there were faces that really scares us because it is mixed by with our sudden imaginations and emotions at the same moment. Very good written. Goodluck!
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the great review, Hamiel. I really appreciate the gracious stars. Yeah, I often write humorous stuff. So I figured why not about a UFO? Haha. I'm glad you had a chuckle at this silly thing. Thank you again.
Comment from Carol Montgomery
I liked the little twist at the end, and I also liked the format, using rhyming. I feel it takes more talent than writing freestyle. Shorten the last line of the first verse to make it read more evenly. Add "that" after weapon.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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I liked the little twist at the end, and I also liked the format, using rhyming. I feel it takes more talent than writing freestyle. Shorten the last line of the first verse to make it read more evenly. Add "that" after weapon.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Wow! A 2 star rating? I see you're new to the site and just to let you know, unless your work is almost total crap, no one hardly ever gives someone a 2 star rating. You need to add a lot more to this review to compensate for what you found wrong about the piece than just to shorten a line and add 'that' in there. Wow.
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Obviously, I somehow didn't read what each star meant. Thanks.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks about a school project on UFO, the UFO appears, he came for doing no harm, funding for a project to buy weapons and destroy the earth; I liked.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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This speaks about a school project on UFO, the UFO appears, he came for doing no harm, funding for a project to buy weapons and destroy the earth; I liked.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the great review, Al. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from KL Williams
I really enjoyed this poem. I thought it was well written, and the rhymes were great. The only thing I might change is in the second stanza, 4th line, the word "trips" through me off a little bit. Since it is referring to just one class, I would change it to "The class that sells the most wins a trip to Myrtle Beach". I love the humor in this though! Nicely done, and best of luck in the contest! :)
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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I really enjoyed this poem. I thought it was well written, and the rhymes were great. The only thing I might change is in the second stanza, 4th line, the word "trips" through me off a little bit. Since it is referring to just one class, I would change it to "The class that sells the most wins a trip to Myrtle Beach". I love the humor in this though! Nicely done, and best of luck in the contest! :)
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the great review, KL W. Yeah, I've a couple rounds with that line already. If I ass the 'a' in there then the one extra syllable seems to throw me off when reading it. I'll have to give it a little more thought to figure out how to get it right. That's for the suggestion. I've tried it few ways already. We'll see what happens. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked this silliness.
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I'm a big fan of satire and humor. :) I think if you drop the word "Then" from the beginning it will work. You're just moving the syllable and it still makes sense. However, I'm just one opinion... maybe someone else will chime in with another. ;)
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I think I fixed it a little better. I just moved the word 'then' to another spot and added the 'a.' Thank you again. Have a great day.
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Looks good to me! I hope you have a great day as well!
Comment from Dean Kuch
Now THAT is one awesome piece of artwork, Anonymous Poet. It looks like a piece of fantasy art depicting a tree creature of some sort. Of course, it could also pass for an alien.
Yeah, what the heck, I'd tell 'em to put me down for at least four myself. After all we would only be speeding up the inevitable, right?
Good rhyming in your entry, and I enjoyed the dark humor as well.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Now THAT is one awesome piece of artwork, Anonymous Poet. It looks like a piece of fantasy art depicting a tree creature of some sort. Of course, it could also pass for an alien.
Yeah, what the heck, I'd tell 'em to put me down for at least four myself. After all we would only be speeding up the inevitable, right?
Good rhyming in your entry, and I enjoyed the dark humor as well.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the great review, Dean. Yeah, when I went looking for a pic to use I wasn't finding any of the bug eyes aliens that were tripping my trigger. So I went searching under 'monster' and came across this cool pic. I figure hey, who knows, maybe aliens could like this, lol. Plus I wanted something mean looking so it'd be totally opposite of what I was going to have him say. I'm glad you liked this silliness. Thank you again.
Comment from humpwhistle
Well, this certainly covers a few bases--from the silly,
to the scary.
Seems to me, Myrtle Beach is the place
to go if you wish to escape the next holocaust.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Well, this certainly covers a few bases--from the silly,
to the scary.
Seems to me, Myrtle Beach is the place
to go if you wish to escape the next holocaust.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Haha, yep, I guess so. Thank you for the great review and stars, Lee. I really appreciate it.
Comment from Mustang Patty
LOL! Wonderful suspense built and conveyed in your poem for the UFO contest. I had to chuckle at the notion of purchasing the candy bars, and then stepped back to realize that to many of us, the kids of today are aliens!
Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest,
~patty~
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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LOL! Wonderful suspense built and conveyed in your poem for the UFO contest. I had to chuckle at the notion of purchasing the candy bars, and then stepped back to realize that to many of us, the kids of today are aliens!
Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest,
~patty~
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the great review, Patty. Yes, some of the kids now-a-days are quite different, lol. I really appreciate the gracious stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you had a chuckle at this silliness.
