Watery Grave
A poem about the Titanic13 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Mystery Poet,
Your rhyming poem is a great response to the contest prompt. I have read about the rooms where the poorer passengers were located. Your poem tells that story well. It was a sad time for all aboard the Titanic. The picture is perfect, too.
Best wishes in the contest. Jan
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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Mystery Poet,
Your rhyming poem is a great response to the contest prompt. I have read about the rooms where the poorer passengers were located. Your poem tells that story well. It was a sad time for all aboard the Titanic. The picture is perfect, too.
Best wishes in the contest. Jan
Comment Written 18-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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Thanks much for reading and your thoughtful review.
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a touching poem, well written. It tells a story of passengers trapped on lower decks in the Titanic tragedy. Too few lifeboats but the lower deck people probably wouldn't have survived in any case because they were below the water line. Good rhyming and flow in your piece. Marilyn
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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This is a touching poem, well written. It tells a story of passengers trapped on lower decks in the Titanic tragedy. Too few lifeboats but the lower deck people probably wouldn't have survived in any case because they were below the water line. Good rhyming and flow in your piece. Marilyn
Comment Written 18-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Thanks much for reading. You know there actually were more lifeboats, it's just that they took off unfilled. Selfish people.
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It was both--no enough lifeboats and the ones it did have were not filled to capacity.
Comment from Boogienights
I found this poem very chilling. It almost brought tears to my eyes, what an excellent entry for this contest. Best of luck. I know this poem will do well, thanks for sharing it.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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I found this poem very chilling. It almost brought tears to my eyes, what an excellent entry for this contest. Best of luck. I know this poem will do well, thanks for sharing it.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Thanks so much for these kind and encouraging words. I am very grateful for this wonderful green star.
Comment from Dawn Munro
I have a friend who has a great passion for this tragic tale, and what you've written represents a glimpse of what those passengers suffered, I'm sure, although I am equally sure that the poorest of cabins would look nothing like that picture, even on the Titanic. They would have been far more cramped.
What an experience it must have been to dive that wreck! I'm not sure I would want to... A sad poem, well done - good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2017
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I have a friend who has a great passion for this tragic tale, and what you've written represents a glimpse of what those passengers suffered, I'm sure, although I am equally sure that the poorest of cabins would look nothing like that picture, even on the Titanic. They would have been far more cramped.
What an experience it must have been to dive that wreck! I'm not sure I would want to... A sad poem, well done - good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2017
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Have you see the display-we saw it in the Denver museum. It is very sobering and sad. The way some of the dishes were totally intact while the ship and it's people perished. It's remarkable. Thanks for reading.
Comment from Oatmeal
You did a really nice job on this poem. Perfectly arranged & formatting is wonderful.
Very well formatted and full of descriptive narrations. The words you chose worked very well.
There was no SPAG, no typos, no room for improvement.
I wish you the best in the contest.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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You did a really nice job on this poem. Perfectly arranged & formatting is wonderful.
Very well formatted and full of descriptive narrations. The words you chose worked very well.
There was no SPAG, no typos, no room for improvement.
I wish you the best in the contest.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 08-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Thanks so much for this kind and insightful review.
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
This is a wonderful heartfelt poem about such a tragic moment in time.
Which describes the terrifying scene with such imagery.
The alliteration is fantastic which strengthens your words beautifully
and what a great choice picture to accompany
Mitchell
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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This is a wonderful heartfelt poem about such a tragic moment in time.
Which describes the terrifying scene with such imagery.
The alliteration is fantastic which strengthens your words beautifully
and what a great choice picture to accompany
Mitchell
Comment Written 08-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Thanks so much. Truly appreciated.
Comment from zanya
Heart-rending and with such an air of immediacy absorbing the reader into the gravitas of the final drama and potential watery grave -with class at its core
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Heart-rending and with such an air of immediacy absorbing the reader into the gravitas of the final drama and potential watery grave -with class at its core
Comment Written 07-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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I thank you so much for this generous and kind review. I am honored.
Comment from Irish Rain
Just heart-wrenching. And that's from reading it, can you imagine the horror of living/dying it?? Wonderful entry for this contest, blessings...
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Just heart-wrenching. And that's from reading it, can you imagine the horror of living/dying it?? Wonderful entry for this contest, blessings...
Comment Written 07-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Thanks so much. I really appreciate you reading.
Comment from RodG
A poignant story about the poorest class. Very informative notes, too.
I found the child speaking to be easy to relate to, and though this is a tragedy, we are glad she died in her mother's arms. YOU PUT US THERE. well done.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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A poignant story about the poorest class. Very informative notes, too.
I found the child speaking to be easy to relate to, and though this is a tragedy, we are glad she died in her mother's arms. YOU PUT US THERE. well done.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Thanks so much Rod. Truly appreciated. JoAnn
Comment from Thal1959
The poem is really very nicely done. The rhymes and the story are fine, but the meter fluctuates because the lines almost randomly vary from 9 syllables to as much as 13 or 14. But it is still a good story poem.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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The poem is really very nicely done. The rhymes and the story are fine, but the meter fluctuates because the lines almost randomly vary from 9 syllables to as much as 13 or 14. But it is still a good story poem.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Thanks much-appreciated the noted corrections needed.
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You're welcome - it was my pleasure.
