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Comment from Gloria ....
Well you give a whole new meaning to a deadbeat dad with this terrific poem. I can imagine a thousand mouths to feed might be a wee bit daunting for anyone, but alas poor Wendy spider waits for a phone call that will never come.
Excellent addition to your book, Bill.
Gloria
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
Well you give a whole new meaning to a deadbeat dad with this terrific poem. I can imagine a thousand mouths to feed might be a wee bit daunting for anyone, but alas poor Wendy spider waits for a phone call that will never come.
Excellent addition to your book, Bill.
Gloria
Comment Written 18-May-2020
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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Thank you, Gloria
Comment from Y. M. Roger
I'm thinking Wendy fed him to the children to hide the evidence...!! ;) I can tell that this will be an awesome adventure... looking forward to each and every one of them (hope you don't get tired of reading that - lol!! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
I'm thinking Wendy fed him to the children to hide the evidence...!! ;) I can tell that this will be an awesome adventure... looking forward to each and every one of them (hope you don't get tired of reading that - lol!! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 17-May-2020
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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Thanks, Yvette, for giving this a look. (Wendy knows things)
Comment from robyn corum
Bill,
ROBYN to WENDY:
(Tap, tap, tap, gently on shoulder.)
Excuse me...
WENDY: (impatiently)
WHAT is it? I'm IMPATIENTLY WAITING for the FATHER of all these children! There's a pandemic going around, you know. Keep your distance!
ROBYN:
I'm sorry, but I thought I might be able to help.
WENDY:
I don't think so. You seem to be a HUMAN.
ROBYN:
That's true. And you're a Black Widow. Correct?
WENDY:
What of it? I don't have time for this. The FATHER of my THOUSAND children is MISSING. HAVE YOU HEARD? --belch--
ROBYN:
Yes, actually. And it's good manners to excuse yourself after a public burp, if you don't mind.
WENDY:
THIS is why HUMANS and spiders don't get along! You're SO difficult!
ROBYN:
Actually, that's not the reason at all. But I won't argue. I was merely considering mentioning the POSSIBILITY you might have ... (lowering voice) ... eaten your mate?
WENDY:
WHAT?!! I'D NEV-- Wait... Come to... think of it... hmmm...
Child-- -- ren!! Come along, now! I hear there's a fine adult male specimen living in the attic. Let's be off. Pick up the pace...
ROBYN:
Glad to help! Have a great-- Oh, well.. Never mind...
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
Bill,
ROBYN to WENDY:
(Tap, tap, tap, gently on shoulder.)
Excuse me...
WENDY: (impatiently)
WHAT is it? I'm IMPATIENTLY WAITING for the FATHER of all these children! There's a pandemic going around, you know. Keep your distance!
ROBYN:
I'm sorry, but I thought I might be able to help.
WENDY:
I don't think so. You seem to be a HUMAN.
ROBYN:
That's true. And you're a Black Widow. Correct?
WENDY:
What of it? I don't have time for this. The FATHER of my THOUSAND children is MISSING. HAVE YOU HEARD? --belch--
ROBYN:
Yes, actually. And it's good manners to excuse yourself after a public burp, if you don't mind.
WENDY:
THIS is why HUMANS and spiders don't get along! You're SO difficult!
ROBYN:
Actually, that's not the reason at all. But I won't argue. I was merely considering mentioning the POSSIBILITY you might have ... (lowering voice) ... eaten your mate?
WENDY:
WHAT?!! I'D NEV-- Wait... Come to... think of it... hmmm...
Child-- -- ren!! Come along, now! I hear there's a fine adult male specimen living in the attic. Let's be off. Pick up the pace...
ROBYN:
Glad to help! Have a great-- Oh, well.. Never mind...
Comment Written 14-May-2020
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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Sounds like you were a real help there.
Comment from nomi338
Another dead beat dad. Apparently the victim of someone he scared badly who in response, turned around and beat that poor guy to death. Thereby giving a brand new meaning to the term dead beat dad
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2017
Another dead beat dad. Apparently the victim of someone he scared badly who in response, turned around and beat that poor guy to death. Thereby giving a brand new meaning to the term dead beat dad
Comment Written 04-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2017
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Thanks, nomi, for peeking at this.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Awww poor Wendy. lol Well suppose she wouldn't be the first to left "hangin" no pun intended lol. Loved the inventiveness of this one my friend. Great work. xoxo d
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2017
Awww poor Wendy. lol Well suppose she wouldn't be the first to left "hangin" no pun intended lol. Loved the inventiveness of this one my friend. Great work. xoxo d
Comment Written 01-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2017
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Thanks, d, for the nice review. Bill
Comment from Teri7
Bill, I really do enjoy your poetry, but I do not like spiders and snakes! lol You used very good descriptive wording and cute wording. Very good imagery. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2017
Bill, I really do enjoy your poetry, but I do not like spiders and snakes! lol You used very good descriptive wording and cute wording. Very good imagery. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 30-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2017
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Thanks, Teri
Comment from damommy
This is hilarious! Poor thing perched there, waiting. Can't really blame the father. A thousand children? I'd run, too. LOL
Great fun!
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2017
This is hilarious! Poor thing perched there, waiting. Can't really blame the father. A thousand children? I'd run, too. LOL
Great fun!
Comment Written 30-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2017
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Thanks, da, for giving this a look. Bill
Comment from Mustang Patty
this poor unwed mother has to deal with ALL these children by herself. But, did she kill him after they mated? I loved the fact he no longer accepts any calls - gave the situation some realism.
Well done,
~patty~
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2017
this poor unwed mother has to deal with ALL these children by herself. But, did she kill him after they mated? I loved the fact he no longer accepts any calls - gave the situation some realism.
Well done,
~patty~
Comment Written 30-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2017
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Thanks, Patty, for reviewing this. We can see why the guy took off. Bill
Comment from c_lucas
Bye, bye, spider. Not one of my favorite species, but one that is necessary in the food line. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2017
Bye, bye, spider. Not one of my favorite species, but one that is necessary in the food line. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2017
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Thanks, Charlie