Home Again
Last man on earth contest16 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Interesting use of recursion. We don't know if he was hallucinating or if the wife and dog were some other beings that looked like them? Excellent entry for this contest!
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2017
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Interesting use of recursion. We don't know if he was hallucinating or if the wife and dog were some other beings that looked like them? Excellent entry for this contest!
Comment Written 02-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2017
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Thanks so much. It's a fun contest to ponder-I have tried it before.
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Ah, it was you! You had my vote!
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I thank you so much.
Comment from F. Wehr3
I enjoyed this story and wish the best in this contest. I pulled one thing for your consideration.
"You two always did love your sweets," he laughed.--I don't know if laughed works as a speech tag or an action tag. You have two of these.
Take care,
Russell
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2017
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I enjoyed this story and wish the best in this contest. I pulled one thing for your consideration.
"You two always did love your sweets," he laughed.--I don't know if laughed works as a speech tag or an action tag. You have two of these.
Take care,
Russell
Comment Written 01-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2017
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Thanks Russel. Much appreciated.
Comment from KL Williams
This is a great story with a wonderful twist! It grabbed my attention and kept it. It was entertaining and humorous. Poor guy, I can imagine being the last man on earth you'd go a little crazy. Good luck in the contest! :)
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2017
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This is a great story with a wonderful twist! It grabbed my attention and kept it. It was entertaining and humorous. Poor guy, I can imagine being the last man on earth you'd go a little crazy. Good luck in the contest! :)
Comment Written 01-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2017
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Thanks so much.
Comment from cupa tea
That's an interesting piece of writing you have there. The guy has gone nuts. Makes since as he is the only being alive on a dead world. This is the first I've seen with that idea.
I didn't see any grammar issues...So good luck!
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2017
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That's an interesting piece of writing you have there. The guy has gone nuts. Makes since as he is the only being alive on a dead world. This is the first I've seen with that idea.
I didn't see any grammar issues...So good luck!
Comment Written 01-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2017
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Thanks so much.
Comment from lalajovanoski
Hello my friend, I very much enjoyed reading this beautifully written piece. I think that the content is very strong and powerful. The flow of this is very soft and smooth and interesting. Thank you very much for sharing this. God bless you. With love Lala
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2017
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Hello my friend, I very much enjoyed reading this beautifully written piece. I think that the content is very strong and powerful. The flow of this is very soft and smooth and interesting. Thank you very much for sharing this. God bless you. With love Lala
Comment Written 30-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2017
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Thanks for your thoughtful review. It is truly appreciated.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
A well written piece and has a certain twilight zone feel to it. I liked the ambiguity of it until the final lines which personally I'd omit.
"How did you get here? Where were you?- need closing speech marks here.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2017
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Hi there,
A well written piece and has a certain twilight zone feel to it. I liked the ambiguity of it until the final lines which personally I'd omit.
"How did you get here? Where were you?- need closing speech marks here.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 30-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2017
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Thanks much. Will consider this and fix the quote.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Very good. I entered this contest a year ago. My story was similar. The last man on earth answered a knock and met the last woman on earth. Good luck.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2017
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Very good. I entered this contest a year ago. My story was similar. The last man on earth answered a knock and met the last woman on earth. Good luck.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2017
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Well, that was convenient-haha. Thanks for the good wishes. I have entered this one before-wanted to see if I could do something a bit different.
Comment from JDRBAR
This is very well written and certainly complies with the topic. I think if I were the last man on earth I'd still be sitting at a computer mindlessly typing out stories, LOL
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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This is very well written and certainly complies with the topic. I think if I were the last man on earth I'd still be sitting at a computer mindlessly typing out stories, LOL
Comment Written 29-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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How true-haha. It would likely fill our time better than some things. At least we could resurrect favorite characters like friends. Thanks for the thoughtful review.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Good job on the prompt. I suspect this is really what would have happened, given enough time to lose one's mind and begin hallucinating. It kept him going for part of each day, so it was a good move on the part of his brain. Who cares if you're crazy if it makes you happy? :)
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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Good job on the prompt. I suspect this is really what would have happened, given enough time to lose one's mind and begin hallucinating. It kept him going for part of each day, so it was a good move on the part of his brain. Who cares if you're crazy if it makes you happy? :)
Comment Written 29-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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Ha-true. Thanks much for this thoughtful review.
Comment from emptypage
This is great, but I think your entire last paragraph ruins the effect. We KNOW by then that the poor guy imagined it as soon as the same thing happens again. You don't need to tell people.
Also, you need the last words to be EXACTLY the same as the first, so there is no question.
This method, rather than spelling it out, let's the reader feel smart and have an epiphany on his or her own. That extra paragraph takes that feeling away.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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This is great, but I think your entire last paragraph ruins the effect. We KNOW by then that the poor guy imagined it as soon as the same thing happens again. You don't need to tell people.
Also, you need the last words to be EXACTLY the same as the first, so there is no question.
This method, rather than spelling it out, let's the reader feel smart and have an epiphany on his or her own. That extra paragraph takes that feeling away.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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I thought this over and I get what you are saying but so many people ask what is meant by things that I decided to leave no questions. Will consider though if you think it is clear enough.
