Comment from humpwhistle

Excellent

Hard to cram all the sounds of a city
into seventeen syllables.
Jack hammers, air brakes, sirens,
and I-phone static add their own layers.

I'm sure many things 'clang', but voices?
To me, they mostly clash.

Best of luck.

Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017

Thank you for your insightful comments.

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

thank you for sharing your entry in the 5-7-5 city limits contest. Your words are quite succinct and tell the tale of the sounds you hear on the city streets. Well done and good luck in the contest,

~patty~

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017

Thank you for your encouraging review.

Comment from RodG

Excellent

This 5-7-5 definitely captures what city life is to me (though I would call all those sounds you mention a city CACOPHONY. I like how you focus strictly on audio imagery.

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017

Thank you for the good words and yes cacophony is accurate.

Comment from joeruptak

Excellent

A lot to say with very few words
very good reasons for not wanting to live in the city
you have my vote in the contests
a job well done

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017

Thank you for such a positive review and the vote.

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very well written 5-7-5 poem about the noises in the city. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery with your words. Best wishes in the contest. Teri

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 Comment Written 26-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017

Thank you for your encouragement and positive review.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

This is so true. Even a hustling, bustling, anonymous city has these vibes.

Good job on the syllable count as required.

So many on FS believe all posts need an image. This may be overlooked although your words paint a great picture in my mind as intended.

Best wishes in the contest. Jan

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 Comment Written 26-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017

Thank you. I may be wrong but I interpreted no special affects as pictures too.

reply by Jannypan (Jan) on 26-Jun-2017

I looked & no image is stated. I have seen this sponsor before with an ok for 1 image. But since it doesn't say that, you should be right. I have also seen some in this contest where a picture was used. They may have to remove the picture to remain in the booth when it goes to voting. Please forgive my not knowing. Jan

reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017

I really appreciate your interest and helpfulness. Thank you for your effort to follow through.

reply by Jannypan (Jan) on 27-Jun-2017

In the thread where the rules etc for this contest is listed, there are 2 questions. On one of them the sponsor said 1 picture was ok. Even though the contest deadline was reached, you can still add a picture IF you wish.