A Woman Named Jeanette
Jeanette observing her funeral14 total reviews
Comment from Kazzawin
Such a difficult thing to write about but you have done it in a way that is quite pragmatic, moving amongst the mourners and taking it all in.
Beautiful ending to this well written poem, evoking a sorrowful image but just wanting to reassure. Good luck in the contest.
Gorgeous artwork too : )
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
Such a difficult thing to write about but you have done it in a way that is quite pragmatic, moving amongst the mourners and taking it all in.
Beautiful ending to this well written poem, evoking a sorrowful image but just wanting to reassure. Good luck in the contest.
Gorgeous artwork too : )
Comment Written 24-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the read and the comment. Much appreciated.
Comment from RodG
I like how you set the scene and introduce the dead Speaker who is a dry-eyed observer of friends and family at her funeral. She's just happy to be free of pain. One recurrent problem, especially in stanza 4: shifting verb tense.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
I like how you set the scene and introduce the dead Speaker who is a dry-eyed observer of friends and family at her funeral. She's just happy to be free of pain. One recurrent problem, especially in stanza 4: shifting verb tense.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the read and the comment. Much appreciated. I fixed the tense problem.
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No, it still exists, but the voters don't seem to mind.
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I think I got it this time.
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Almost. Stanza 3: They all [nod] in agreement . . .
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Thanks so much for your help.
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My pleasure. Rod
Comment from tfawcus
Such a vivid scene created here of loss and grief but also of blessed release from pain. I loved your expression, "I wisped among their conversations"! Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
Such a vivid scene created here of loss and grief but also of blessed release from pain. I loved your expression, "I wisped among their conversations"! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 24-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the read and the comment. Much appreciated.
Comment from lalajovanoski
Hello friend I've really enjoyed reading this poem that is written very beautifully for this writing prompt the funeral. I think that the structure and flow is great and the alliteration is wonderful thank you very much for sharing this God bless you love lolla
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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
Hello friend I've really enjoyed reading this poem that is written very beautifully for this writing prompt the funeral. I think that the structure and flow is great and the alliteration is wonderful thank you very much for sharing this God bless you love lolla
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Comment Written 24-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the read and the comment. Much appreciated.