A Woman Named Jeanette
Jeanette observing her funeral14 total reviews
Comment from Mustang Patty
such a poignantly written portrayal of a funeral and what it would feel like to see it with the eyes of the deceased. You give a good accounting of the service and her wish for those that grieve to only see that she has left the pain behind comes across loud and clear. well done and good luck in the contest,
~patty~
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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such a poignantly written portrayal of a funeral and what it would feel like to see it with the eyes of the deceased. You give a good accounting of the service and her wish for those that grieve to only see that she has left the pain behind comes across loud and clear. well done and good luck in the contest,
~patty~
Comment Written 29-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much for the read and your thoughtful review.
Comment from southernyankeespeaks
This is a beautifully written poem from the heart. Your words presented me with a picture of Jeanette witnessing her funeral as people celebrated her life.
Excellent job.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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This is a beautifully written poem from the heart. Your words presented me with a picture of Jeanette witnessing her funeral as people celebrated her life.
Excellent job.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the read and your thoughts.
Comment from Wabigoon
Harry--
A little religious for my taste, though this is a theme dominated by religion. Still, it is well observed, effective, perhaps most touching the end of the pain.
Thanks
Wabigoon/Jeff
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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Harry--
A little religious for my taste, though this is a theme dominated by religion. Still, it is well observed, effective, perhaps most touching the end of the pain.
Thanks
Wabigoon/Jeff
Comment Written 28-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the read and your thoughts.
Comment from Charmisa Parker
One of my friends' name is Jeanette. But I love this poem! What I picked up on from this message is that this woman will be missed but tells everyone that she is fine and finally free from pain, therefore, there is no need to worry, even if you can't see her. Love it!
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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One of my friends' name is Jeanette. But I love this poem! What I picked up on from this message is that this woman will be missed but tells everyone that she is fine and finally free from pain, therefore, there is no need to worry, even if you can't see her. Love it!
Comment Written 28-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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Thank you for your read. You nailed the poem.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, A Woman Named Jeanette, voices a person who has fought the good fight is on her trip home. The collection of mourners is what we wish for, in the sense that they bear no ill will and miss us. Nice poem.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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This poem, A Woman Named Jeanette, voices a person who has fought the good fight is on her trip home. The collection of mourners is what we wish for, in the sense that they bear no ill will and miss us. Nice poem.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the read and the thought.
Comment from WalkerMan
One can tell from Jeanette's thoughts as she observes her funeral that she was a kind, loving, and creative person with many friends and caring family that she cherishes. Well done, and aptly illustrated.
Punctuation suggestions:
"Mark steps to the pulpit, tears in his eyes, a muted"
[no comma between subject and its verb;
but use commas to set off the parenthetic phrase, "tears in his eyes"]
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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One can tell from Jeanette's thoughts as she observes her funeral that she was a kind, loving, and creative person with many friends and caring family that she cherishes. Well done, and aptly illustrated.
Punctuation suggestions:
"Mark steps to the pulpit, tears in his eyes, a muted"
[no comma between subject and its verb;
but use commas to set off the parenthetic phrase, "tears in his eyes"]
Comment Written 26-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the read and the suggestion.
Comment from JDRBAR
A very realistic dialogue, and a very sad one as well. Wonder if crafters will still be able to craft in heaven. Now, that would be heaven, wouldn't it? LOL Very good job with this.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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A very realistic dialogue, and a very sad one as well. Wonder if crafters will still be able to craft in heaven. Now, that would be heaven, wouldn't it? LOL Very good job with this.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the read. The beautiful thing about heaven, I believe, it will be what you wish it to be. I hope.
Comment from msshirley
Sad, moving, inspiring, even if you don't believe, as I was, you will be moved.
I only hope I get the chance to see my loved ones after I'm gone, one last time.
Well done
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Sad, moving, inspiring, even if you don't believe, as I was, you will be moved.
I only hope I get the chance to see my loved ones after I'm gone, one last time.
Well done
Comment Written 24-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the read. Me too.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very interesting poem you have penned about what you would say if you were the one in the coffin in the funeral. You used very good descriptive and moving words with great imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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This is a very interesting poem you have penned about what you would say if you were the one in the coffin in the funeral. You used very good descriptive and moving words with great imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 24-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the read and the comment. Much appreciated.
Comment from Mary-Kate
I enjoyed reading this poem and I like that she is present at her own funeral, observing but being in a better place. I like that it finishes with the knowing that she will be reunited with her loved ones day.
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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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I enjoyed reading this poem and I like that she is present at her own funeral, observing but being in a better place. I like that it finishes with the knowing that she will be reunited with her loved ones day.
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Comment Written 24-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the read and the comment. Much appreciated.
