In Charge of it all
Be careful what you wish for.21 total reviews
Comment from Ann Philips
I enjoy the subtle humor. The image supports the message well. The first line sets the stage for the next two. The Senryu moment is strong and appropriate. Although I think my husband would think you were writing about him. I enjoyed this very much.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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I enjoy the subtle humor. The image supports the message well. The first line sets the stage for the next two. The Senryu moment is strong and appropriate. Although I think my husband would think you were writing about him. I enjoyed this very much.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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Thank you for such a wonderful and humorous review.
Comment from Bill Schott
This satirical sentry, In Charge of it All, has the set up right and seems to relay the somber message (though I'm probably wrong because this should make me smile) that once everyone else is gone, we can be the boss. Of course, there's no one to order around.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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This satirical sentry, In Charge of it All, has the set up right and seems to relay the somber message (though I'm probably wrong because this should make me smile) that once everyone else is gone, we can be the boss. Of course, there's no one to order around.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Yes, in charge of what becomes the question. Thank you for your keen observations.
Comment from Lindagail Hall
I detest back seat drivers lol, love the word choice, this made me chuckle so thanks for that, I wouldn't like being a judge on this one. I wish you all the best in this contest.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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I detest back seat drivers lol, love the word choice, this made me chuckle so thanks for that, I wouldn't like being a judge on this one. I wish you all the best in this contest.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Thank you for your humorous review.
Comment from jaded831
I enjoyed your poem, although it didn't make me laugh. It contained an off, beat sense of comedy. I found it well written and true to form. The picture added to your poem. Good luck in the contest. Great job.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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I enjoyed your poem, although it didn't make me laugh. It contained an off, beat sense of comedy. I found it well written and true to form. The picture added to your poem. Good luck in the contest. Great job.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Thank you for your good observations.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This poem could have different meanings to different people, and that's what is so good about Haiku or Senryu, few words mean you use your imagination when prompted by the words, in this case it means that I am alone and in charge of my own destiny! Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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This poem could have different meanings to different people, and that's what is so good about Haiku or Senryu, few words mean you use your imagination when prompted by the words, in this case it means that I am alone and in charge of my own destiny! Love Dolly x
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Thank you for exploring the complexity of the form.
Comment from emptypage
Love this. So much truth in a few simple words. "Sitting in the driver's seat" takes on a new meaning with most porch sitters, those who are too old to drive anymore. You made me think long and hard about how old people fight to keep their car keys. I totally understand--they lose so much as they age and it all equals independence. Great poem.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Love this. So much truth in a few simple words. "Sitting in the driver's seat" takes on a new meaning with most porch sitters, those who are too old to drive anymore. You made me think long and hard about how old people fight to keep their car keys. I totally understand--they lose so much as they age and it all equals independence. Great poem.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Thank you for seeing the message.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello my friend,
Nice satirical senryu contest entry. You followed the rules of the contest well and the presentation is lovely. It is sad you have wait until you are old to have control in your life....
LoL
Good job my friend.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Hello my friend,
Nice satirical senryu contest entry. You followed the rules of the contest well and the presentation is lovely. It is sad you have wait until you are old to have control in your life....
LoL
Good job my friend.
Gypsy
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Yes and the control may not be so significant anymore.
Comment from sharonlshelley
really enjoyed reading this little poem this is short and straight to the point. finally feeling and being in charge for a change thanks for sharing. sharon
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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really enjoyed reading this little poem this is short and straight to the point. finally feeling and being in charge for a change thanks for sharing. sharon
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Thank you for your positive words.
Comment from lalajovanoski
Hello friend I really enjoyed reading this piece I think that it is cleverly written and I like the content. There's a good flow throughout and the alliteration is good thank you very much for sharing this God bless you love lella
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Hello friend I really enjoyed reading this piece I think that it is cleverly written and I like the content. There's a good flow throughout and the alliteration is good thank you very much for sharing this God bless you love lella
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Thank you for such a positive review.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Yes, we all long to be in charge, at least until we get there. Your senryu appears to meet the requirements of this contest. Best wishes in the voting, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2017
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Yes, we all long to be in charge, at least until we get there. Your senryu appears to meet the requirements of this contest. Best wishes in the voting, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 24-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the encouragement.