Left Behind
lune contest 5/3/526 total reviews
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, an articulate lune, well constructed and indicative of a forgotten past - in perfect compliance with the prompt - an obvious winner in its pensive simplicity - I've said it all...
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2017
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In my opinion, an articulate lune, well constructed and indicative of a forgotten past - in perfect compliance with the prompt - an obvious winner in its pensive simplicity - I've said it all...
Comment Written 11-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2017
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Thank you for the lovely review. Val
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You are very welcome, Val...Eve
Comment from Drew Delaney
I like the pic chosen to go with the Lune poem. The colouring is great too. An excellent idea to honour the vets. Thanks for sharing and reminding us about these men and women.
Drew
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2017
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I like the pic chosen to go with the Lune poem. The colouring is great too. An excellent idea to honour the vets. Thanks for sharing and reminding us about these men and women.
Drew
Comment Written 10-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2017
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Thank you for the lovely review.
Comment from mermaids
Congrats on winning the contest. There is an eery feel to your words. The image of the deserted truck is powerful and has an impact on the reader. Excellent lune form, you say much in few words.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2017
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Congrats on winning the contest. There is an eery feel to your words. The image of the deserted truck is powerful and has an impact on the reader. Excellent lune form, you say much in few words.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2017
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Thanks
Comment from kaymart
Wow. This makes me wonder who the truck belonged(s) to. Where did they go? What happened to them so the truck is there all by itself? And why the dog tags?
A touching, brief poem. Nicely-worded. It makes complete sense to me. Nicely-done!
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2017
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Wow. This makes me wonder who the truck belonged(s) to. Where did they go? What happened to them so the truck is there all by itself? And why the dog tags?
A touching, brief poem. Nicely-worded. It makes complete sense to me. Nicely-done!
Comment Written 10-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2017
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Your review made me cry, as these were exactly the questions I would like answered ... thank you for this six. But more for your thoughtful words. By the way, my family is Navy.
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My heart goes out to each and every member of the Navy/Army/Marines/etc.
PS, thank you for your service.
Comment from dragonpoet
Nice description of the truck. I like the metaphor of dog tags for license plates. It looks to old to even still be in one piece.
Congratulations on winning the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2017
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Nice description of the truck. I like the metaphor of dog tags for license plates. It looks to old to even still be in one piece.
Congratulations on winning the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 10-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2017
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Thank you
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No problem.
dragonpot
Comment from Contests
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2017
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 A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry. |
Comment Written 08-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2017
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Thank you, but what is a Seven Star Recognition ? Does just imply the winning piece? None the less, I am thrilled Val Crisson
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
Really enjoyed this line poem, such a poignant message within this deep and meaningful three line offerings.
Vets should be treated with more respect and treated with the dignity they deserve.
Mitchell
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2017
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Really enjoyed this line poem, such a poignant message within this deep and meaningful three line offerings.
Vets should be treated with more respect and treated with the dignity they deserve.
Mitchell
Comment Written 06-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2017
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I completely agree with you! Thank you for the review.
Comment from JACK2
Loved the graphic that sets this poem up it's never easy to get true meaning to surface when you have to us the syllable counts that a Lune poem requires. great choice of words to make it work goodt job. Good luck.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2017
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Loved the graphic that sets this poem up it's never easy to get true meaning to surface when you have to us the syllable counts that a Lune poem requires. great choice of words to make it work goodt job. Good luck.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2017
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Thank you for the encouraging review
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks a story of untold story of an accident, mishap or something mysterious, anything might have happened, the truck is in this solitary place; left behind - who or what? I liked.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2017
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This speaks a story of untold story of an accident, mishap or something mysterious, anything might have happened, the truck is in this solitary place; left behind - who or what? I liked.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2017
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I poet is always happy to provoke different visions, so this review made me very happy.
Comment from sueseagull
Wow. I am not at all familiar with this Lune type of poetry, but this poem is very powerful even though it has so few words. The picture is perfect. I understand the indication of the dog tags, but the idea of them being left behind could indicate multiple things. Eg: death while on duty and some family member has left them in the truck as a remembrance or the suicide of the military member. This poem made me think and I liked that a lot, Thanks for sharing this complex poem.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2017
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Wow. I am not at all familiar with this Lune type of poetry, but this poem is very powerful even though it has so few words. The picture is perfect. I understand the indication of the dog tags, but the idea of them being left behind could indicate multiple things. Eg: death while on duty and some family member has left them in the truck as a remembrance or the suicide of the military member. This poem made me think and I liked that a lot, Thanks for sharing this complex poem.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2017
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A poet is always happy, when he/she make people "think" This is an excellent review, and they have become a rarity on this site. Thank you so much.