The Letter
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "The Letter - Part Four"...a family saga
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Comment from lyenochka
Interesting turn of events. I'm guessing it's the mother in the wheelchair! This was a dramatic chapter but I wonder if it wouldn't be better to post as two chapters. There were places where there were multiple paragraphs said by the same person (usually Kathy) and it wasn't clear that it was still the same speaker. For example in:
"Where were you? Did you even offer to go with her to court? Did you listen to her on the phone as she cried? I don't think I did anything that a caring person wouldn't do. I helped her because neither of you even tried to be there."
"Doug and I were and ARE happy. I'm sorry if you can't believe in true love. Doug makes me happy and I do the same for him. You should both be happy that Doug has been happy all these years. Are you so unhappy with your own lives that you want everyone to be as miserable as you?"
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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2017
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Interesting turn of events. I'm guessing it's the mother in the wheelchair! This was a dramatic chapter but I wonder if it wouldn't be better to post as two chapters. There were places where there were multiple paragraphs said by the same person (usually Kathy) and it wasn't clear that it was still the same speaker. For example in:
"Where were you? Did you even offer to go with her to court? Did you listen to her on the phone as she cried? I don't think I did anything that a caring person wouldn't do. I helped her because neither of you even tried to be there."
"Doug and I were and ARE happy. I'm sorry if you can't believe in true love. Doug makes me happy and I do the same for him. You should both be happy that Doug has been happy all these years. Are you so unhappy with your own lives that you want everyone to be as miserable as you?"
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Comment Written 16-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2017
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Hi there; thank you for your time to read and review. The multiple paragraphs of dialogue are indicated as the same person speaking by the lack of a closing quotation until the very end. I will go back and try to ensure that people can tell that it is Kathy speaking - thanks for the suggestion
~patty~
Comment from Mistydawn
What a well-written story. The characters are so colorful, full of life. All the drama in the dialogue kept me engrossed to the end. Caressa, hum I wish someone would put that woman in her place. I did feel for Kathy and all she had to endure. You've got me wondering who the stranger is and why did he park at the front of the room. Great chapter I'm looking forward to reading more.
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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2017
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What a well-written story. The characters are so colorful, full of life. All the drama in the dialogue kept me engrossed to the end. Caressa, hum I wish someone would put that woman in her place. I did feel for Kathy and all she had to endure. You've got me wondering who the stranger is and why did he park at the front of the room. Great chapter I'm looking forward to reading more.
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Comment Written 16-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2017
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Hi there; I'm so glad you enjoyed this latest part of the saga. I share your feelings about Caressa - she is a character I love to hate! I hope you will continue with this saga as it draws to a close in the next part,
~patty~
