Comment from emptypage

Excellent

Wow, these people are almost as bad as my family! That takes some writing skill to pull off! I'm waiting on the next part. Can't wait to see... but I have a sickening feeling about it.

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2017

Hi Marla; I'm so glad you are reading along with this saga. I'm so sorry to hear about your family - these people seem especially bad. The conclusion should be posted this weekend.

Hope you are well,

~patty~

Comment from kiwigirl2821

Excellent

Hi Patty. Well I'm in no matter the chapters lol. You are telling a great story. Those sisters! Man! I'm glad you are giving Kathy some ammunition to fight back with that doesn't take away from who she is. Wonderful! xoxo Kiwi

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2017

Hi there; thank you so much for continuing to read the saga of the Hamlin family. I think the conclusion will bring answers to many of the questions some readers seem to have - it should be posted sometime this weekend,

~patty~

Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Excellent

I didn't know you knew my family--this is exactly how they treat me and why I have cut ties with them. A very well written story--sorry I missed the first parts. Thank you for the summary, my friend~Debbie

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2017

Hi Debbie; thank you for reading and reviewing this part of the story. I'm glad the summary allowed you to join in. I'm so sorry to hear that this family resembles yours - these people are pretty toxic.

The conclusion should be posted sometime this weekend,

~patty~

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Hi Patty. Your writing is clear in describing this complicated family story. My problem is with the premise. I don't know anyone who actually behaves like this. Of course it is fiction, so there is broad range there. Maybe I have just been blessed with great relatives and in-laws.

Just as an aside, as Kathy recalls the argument with Jane--the kids were picked up without permission. I know this is a vehicle for the story, but schools have a list of approved people to pick up kids and if someone is not on the list the child will not be released to that person.

I think you did a very good job describing the scene, good detail as the event progresses and in introducing the various characters. You ended this chapter well, leaving the reader with a cliffhanger. Always a good device in a story. Marilyn

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2017

Hi Marilyn; thank you so much for your continuing support with this saga. I am so thankful you and so many others have continued to read and review.

Believe it or not - the mother-in-law was listed as an approved person. The problem was she would pick up the children anytime she wanted to - without Kathy's permission.

The conclusion should be posted sometime this weekend,

~patty~

reply by BeasPeas on 17-Jun-2017

Hi Patty. I know that some families are totally off the charts. I'm grateful mine was never one of them. I agree that no one should every pick up kids unless the parents are unavailable and/or give permission.

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very well written chapter you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery with your words. You used very good dialogue also. I enjoyed reading and reviewing it. Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2017

Hi Teri; I'm so glad you continue to read the story. This saga has been so much fun to write! I will be sorry to post the conclusion, but I truly think I will turn it into a much longer story in a novel at some point in the future - it just has so much left to explore!

~patty~

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

Oh dear, you have taken us to the brink of explosion and left us hanging in this thriller of a story. wondering why all the secrecy and where it is going. No problems noted and an excellent piece of writing

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2017

Hi Barb;
thank you so much for your continued support with this saga. I'm glad you have stayed faithful to the end - the conclusion should be posted sometime this weekend,

~patty~

Comment from Mabaker

Excellent

What a horrid family. Makes me glad I was an only child of only parents, Every time I have married it's been to a man from a large family, so of course I get trundled along to Christmas parties and any other function. How I hate the behind the hand sarcasm, and the false smiles. Have fun. Sincerely Anne.

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2017

Hi Anne; thank you for the review and for sharing your own family foibles. Isn't it horrible that no one is who they seem to be, and everyone has their own agenda? This has been a fun write, and I will hate to see it come to an end in the next part, but it is time to reveal the final secrets,

~patty~

Comment from JDRBAR

Excellent

, Caressa turned and greeted their children. (You do mean Kathy here, right?)
I feel you overused the word happy in the bathroom. I would try substituting another word occasionally. Otherwise, an excellent read as usual. I have a feeling what's coming, but I'll wait to find out. Those sisters really are capital Bs. LOL

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2017

Hi there; thank you so much for continuing to follow the story. I appreciate your thorough and concise review. I will go back and rework the 'bathroom scene.' I do need to do something about all the 'happy's.'

The conclusion will be posted by tomorrow evening (Saturday.)

~patty~

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Exceptional

Toxic is the best way to describe those miserable people.

I enjoyed reading this chapter, Patty. I really like the way Kathy stood her ground & told them just what she thought. I liked the flashback story too.

You did a great job. I can't wait for the next installment. Jan

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2017

Hi Jan; thank you so much for the EXCEPTIONAL rating. I'm glad you enjoyed this part and could feel the toxicity coming through. I appreciate your encouraging words, and I hope the next part will help to answer any of the remaining questions you may have.
~patty~

Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

Hi ~patty~ You certainty know how to make this story desired to be read.
The dialogue and the inner felling of your characters are well written so I also could; feel them.

Good ending of this chapter to make me want to continue reading what comes next.

Gert

Gert

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2017

Hi Gert; thank you so much for your encouraging review. The last part is coming up and I hope you will enjoy it, too.

~patty~

reply by Gert sherwood on 16-Jun-2017

Hi ~patty~ You are welcome

Gert