Comment from Rasmine

Excellent

Patty,

Good story. I love the way everyone had thoughts and definitely sounds like a dysfunctional family. One of my favorite parts was how she thought to get security.

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017

thank you so much for continuing to read along. I appreciate your comments and encouraging words,
~patty~

Comment from Leena

Excellent

Nice and elaborate write up. Enjoyed reading the passive aggressive reactions of Doug's siblings. Wondering what would be the scenario at the reception.. Waiting for part four.

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017

thank you so much for continuing to read along. I appreciate your comments and encouraging words,
~patty~

Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

Hi, Patty - hope you and your daughter had a wonderful time together.

Pleased to find you've posted.

Lots of tension in this part - it's going to be chaos when everyone starts letting go. Looking forward to reading the outcome.

Blessings,
Margaret

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017

Hi Margaret; I'm not home yet. I did decide to bring my laptop with me, and I had some time early this morning to write, edit and post the next part. I won't be home until late on Wednesday.

Thank you for stopping by to read and review. It looks like I have quite a few of your postings to catch up on,
~patty~

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

The story concludes in the next part? I can't wait for that one, I bet it will be a real humdinger! But, more than anything, I want Kathy to come out on top of all those nasty in-laws. This was a really good part, Patty, the tension grows and it will soon burst out! Well done, my friend. :) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017

thank you so much for continuing to read along. I appreciate your comments and encouraging words,
~patty~

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Family feuds are put on hold as the Matriarch's Memorial Service enters the feast portion of the ritual. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017

thank you so much for continuing to read along. I appreciate your comments and encouraging words,
~patty~

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written chapter that builds up the tension between the members of this big dysfunctional family. It would be very interesting to read how everyone releases their grudges against each other.

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017

thank you so much for continuing to read along. I appreciate your comments and encouraging words,
~patty~

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Very good chapter here, and the switches in POV are handled very well indeed. that's not always easy. nice job

In the front of the room - maybe 'At' here rather then 'In'.

and the familial cracks could be senses - ? sensed / seen?

The church looked like a battle field - battlefield can be one word.

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017

Thank you so much for the thoughtful and concise review. I appreciate the help with the edits. They did make the piece stronger.
Your continued support means a great deal to me.
-patty-

Comment from Sankey

Excellent

This was good. Can't remember if I reviewed the other chapters. But I can pretty well take up here. I thought this was very descriptive of a lot of our families. I am only now starting to feel a bit more warmth from my sister after a long time. Just one spag. could be sense(d)[s].

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017

thank you so much for continuing to read along. I appreciate your comments and encouraging words,
~patty~

Comment from kiwigirl2821

Excellent

Hi Patty, Yep you got this one right at least for this reader. You've made a very believable argument on why Kathy is being shunned by these dopey family members. I got mad when the one liked Kathy and then family pressure disliked her. Yes a good addition to the story. Next! lol xoxo Kiwi

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017

thank you so much for continuing to read along. I appreciate your comments and encouraging words,
~patty~

Comment from Asem.inspirations

Excellent

"I hope you fill follow along as the story" Did you mean "still," here?

Good morning, Patty:

I see that you have possibly returned home from your visit with your daughter? If so, I hope that you had a wonderful time with your family, as I am sure that you did.

Yes, I am continuing to follow this story. It is continuing to be so interesting. I especially enjoyed reading what each family member was thinking to themselves. Some of their thoughts were hilarious but in all this story is written very well. This story is very realistic. I am truly enjoying this read and am eager to see what will happen next.

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017

Hi Tier; thank you for reading. I'm not home yet - decided to bring my laptop because this story won't stop coming at me! I am having a great time. Had to get up super early to squeeze in some time to write and edit!

~patty~