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The Letter

Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "The Letter - Part Three"
...a family saga

41 total reviews 
Comment from Rlegel99
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Wouldn't stop reading now. You set up the ending part very well. The thoughts of every family member seems believable and flows well. Can't wait for the family picture.

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2017


reply by the author on 16-Jun-2017
    thank you so much for your kind words. I hope you enjoy Part Four - and I'm sure you will look forward to the conclusion in Part Five. I should have that ready to post by Sunday morning. (I couldn't post the last bit yet AND Part Four is already very long.)

    Thanks for continuing to read the saga,
    ~patty~
Comment from frierajac
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I may have commented before, I'm not sure. However, I would like to know if the line
"Sylvia rolled her eyes at her wife" are what were intended. And if so, if this is a marriage between two women that needs to be explained to a reader.

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2017


reply by the author on 16-Jun-2017
    Hi there; yes indeed. Sylvia is married to a woman. I didn't give an explanation, because I wanted the reader to discover that Sylvia is a lesbian without going into details - it is the twenty-first century, after all.

    Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. Part Four will be up within the next day or so.

    ~patty~
Comment from suzterus
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Very well done. I found it very easy to follow and the descriptions were well done. The character development is fantastic with vibrant features. I can't wait for part four!

Great Job

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2017


reply by the author on 16-Jun-2017
    Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I think Part Four will explain everything and give the reader lots of action and surprises.

    ~patty~
Comment from Marvin Calloway
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This is a satisfying chapter. It is well-detailed and described. You gave me many thoughts and feelings to keep me informed.
I still might need a program to keep track of all the players.
Good job.
Marv

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2017


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2017
    Hi Marv; thank you so much for continuing to follow the saga; I appreciate your feedback and words of encouragement. Part Four should be up within the next few days.

    ~patty~
Comment from JW
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As I read this, my laptop is unplugged. Outside, thunder roars and lightning flashes in the sky turning the darkness into daylight - if only for a moment.

Thank goodness - my battery is fully charged.

And what does all of this have to do with your story? Conflict occurs in nature, as well.

Thanks for sharing this. JW

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2017


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2017
    Hi there; thank you for the entertaining review. I appreciate you for continuing to follow along with the story.
    ~patty~
Comment from Mabaker
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They say some families only ever meet at funeral or weddings now we know why. What a mealy-mouthed lot they were, but no different I think than hundreds of other people. You get the feeling the old girl is laughing herself sick over her little trick. Regards Mabaker.

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2017


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2017
    Hi; thank you so much for continuing to read along. I think you will enjoy the action in Part IV as things are revealed,
    ~patty~
reply by Mabaker on 15-Jun-2017
    Thank you dear friend
Comment from royowen
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It sounds like a normal family wedding, with all the seething resentments, the unhealed wounds, the offense etc. Great descriptive episode Patty. One gets a feeling of "being there" of being in the narrator's heads. Pat of the atmosphere, well done, good scribing, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2017


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2017
    Hi Roy;
    thank you so much for continuing to read along. I greatly appreciate you continuing to follow the story. There will be a great deal of action and information in Part Four,
    ~patty~
reply by royowen on 15-Jun-2017
    Well done Patty
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
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Yes my friend this is well written again you do well telling the story the characters come to life so well and I am looking forward to the next well done my friend regards Jill

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2017


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2017
    Hi Jill;
    thank you so much for continuing to read along with this saga. I'm glad you are enjoying it and I appreciate your kind words of encouragement,
    ~patty~
Comment from Patricia A. Shaw
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Good Summary from previous chapters. A very visual experience. You really showed the awkwardness of it all and displayed the reminders of how people think in their minds at funerals. You showed how people are not focused on the deceased person. Kathy didn't want to do her job but she fulfilled a dying wish and it is almost done. Nice cliffhanger on the end.

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2017


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2017
    thank you so much for reading along with this saga. I'm glad you were able to pick up with the recap, and I think you will enjoy Part Four,
    ~patty~
Comment from dweigt
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Gotta give you the six stars on this! I enjoyed reading it, and nothing disturbed the flow of the narrative. You did an excellent job of conveying the characters' thoughts and animosity. If there were any spags, I didn't notice them.

Looking forward to the conclusion! Keep writing!

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2017


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2017
    Hi Dennis;
    thank you so much for the SHINY six stars! I greatly appreciate your willingness to follow along with the saga and your kind words. Part Four should be posted soon, and I think you will enjoy it,
    ~patty~