2017 JAPANESE POETRY
Viewing comments for Chapter 36 "Senryu (he holds grandpa's hand)"A collection of Japanese poetry
27 total reviews
Comment from Gaye Hemsley
Lovely senryu, the few words say so much. It's interesting how poems pop into one's mind. I often send haiku to myself on my mobile phone when I am out walking. Sorry I haven't been onto FS for so long, life's been a bit busy (good busy)
I really enjoy your poetry
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Lovely senryu, the few words say so much. It's interesting how poems pop into one's mind. I often send haiku to myself on my mobile phone when I am out walking. Sorry I haven't been onto FS for so long, life's been a bit busy (good busy)
I really enjoy your poetry
Comment Written 12-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Hello my friend, no worries, I understand. Thank you for the review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from l.raven
HI My Queen of Haiku, your poem is so very true...and with each generation...it is a new hand...holding an old one...very nicely written you...and the perfect picture...love you...Linda xxoo
still behind...but still working in my home...hopefully it won't be much longer...take care sweet girl...xxoo
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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HI My Queen of Haiku, your poem is so very true...and with each generation...it is a new hand...holding an old one...very nicely written you...and the perfect picture...love you...Linda xxoo
still behind...but still working in my home...hopefully it won't be much longer...take care sweet girl...xxoo
Comment Written 11-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie. Love you.
Gypsy
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you are so welcome sweet girl...xxoo love
Comment from Joan E.
I am pleased you captured the moments that you observed and shared the emotive senryu with us. The "cycle of life" satori makes this piece personal for all readers. Sighs- Joan
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2017
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I am pleased you captured the moments that you observed and shared the emotive senryu with us. The "cycle of life" satori makes this piece personal for all readers. Sighs- Joan
Comment Written 09-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2017
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my senryu, you are very kind and I appreciate it.
Gypsy
Comment from Sis Cat
This is a fine senryu with a narrative arc not only of youth and age but of people returning to the early acts of their lives. Your poem forms an evocative picture of what you witnessed on the train, conveying a man's love and guidance of his grandpa as grandpa did for him in earlier years.
Other than misspelling "fragile" in your author's notes as "fragil," I found no other flaws. This poem is a gem.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2017
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This is a fine senryu with a narrative arc not only of youth and age but of people returning to the early acts of their lives. Your poem forms an evocative picture of what you witnessed on the train, conveying a man's love and guidance of his grandpa as grandpa did for him in earlier years.
Other than misspelling "fragile" in your author's notes as "fragil," I found no other flaws. This poem is a gem.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2017
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Thank you very much for the review and kind words. We appreciate that you took the time to read it.
Gypsy :)
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes my friend this is well written it shows life through the generations and the bond between them loved the photograph selected I enjoyed well done sorry I am behind again regards Jill
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2017
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Yes my friend this is well written it shows life through the generations and the bond between them loved the photograph selected I enjoyed well done sorry I am behind again regards Jill
Comment Written 07-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie.
Gypsy
Comment from robyn corum
Gypsy,
I think this is a terrific senryu. It captures all the elements of aging and watching someone we love aging, too. It's sad and sweet and sentimental, all at the same time. Wonderful!
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2017
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Gypsy,
I think this is a terrific senryu. It captures all the elements of aging and watching someone we love aging, too. It's sad and sweet and sentimental, all at the same time. Wonderful!
Comment Written 06-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie.
Gypsy
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You're welcome! Btw, so far, we've sold about 15 books to three of the authors. One is still working w PayPal to order 10 for herself but having issues at the moment. Yay!
Sorry I missed that meeting last Sunday. Still a lot going on here and now we're preparing for a big family vacay so I'll also be gone for the next two sundays. My level of commitment is still high it's just that I have a lot of other things that demand my time. If that's a problem, I understand and will step down if the group desires it.
Otherwise, I hope to talk to everyone as soon as possible. Thanks so much!
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Good news about the books, cool!
Comment from Ric Myworld
None of us can ever picture ourselves as being old, but then it happens. Seemingly overnight. That face, weathered and worn, changing every day since it was born. Time tested through the cycle of life, gives a better description than old. For we still have a few uses left, or at least that's what I choose to think. LOL! Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2017
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None of us can ever picture ourselves as being old, but then it happens. Seemingly overnight. That face, weathered and worn, changing every day since it was born. Time tested through the cycle of life, gives a better description than old. For we still have a few uses left, or at least that's what I choose to think. LOL! Great job. :-)
Comment Written 06-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Mustang Patty
thank you for sharing this lovely poem about the bond between grandparent and child. The holding of hands brought a smile to my face; I can remember holding onto my grandmother in those last years - her hands were brittle with arthritis, but still she gripped my hand as she had when I was little.
~patty~
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2017
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thank you for sharing this lovely poem about the bond between grandparent and child. The holding of hands brought a smile to my face; I can remember holding onto my grandmother in those last years - her hands were brittle with arthritis, but still she gripped my hand as she had when I was little.
~patty~
Comment Written 06-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie.
Gypsy
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image.
-Author notes appreciated.
-It sounded like a very nice scene to witness,
and you expressed it well in the poem, Gypsy.
-The poem is very touching, and shows
how the man has always cared for his grandpa.
-Good ending line.
-Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2017
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-Very nice image.
-Author notes appreciated.
-It sounded like a very nice scene to witness,
and you expressed it well in the poem, Gypsy.
-The poem is very touching, and shows
how the man has always cared for his grandpa.
-Good ending line.
-Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Gypsy
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You are welcome, Gypsy. A good poem.
Comment from Ulla
Ahhh, Guapa, this is wonderful. What an imagery, you portray here. I love it. I can just visualise him as a little boy holding his grandfather's hand. Un abrazo de tu amiga Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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Ahhh, Guapa, this is wonderful. What an imagery, you portray here. I love it. I can just visualise him as a little boy holding his grandfather's hand. Un abrazo de tu amiga Ulla:)))
Comment Written 06-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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Gracias bonita :) thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie I.
Gypsy