A DwaRazy : Indescribable scribble
A DwaRazy poem I think LOL15 total reviews
Comment from JDRBAR
I love this. There are a few lines that are troublesome in pulling into rhythm, but I wouldn't change a single word. Good luck with this in the contest. It's a winner in my mind.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2017
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I love this. There are a few lines that are troublesome in pulling into rhythm, but I wouldn't change a single word. Good luck with this in the contest. It's a winner in my mind.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2017
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Hi JDRBAR, Thanks for reading , viewing and reviewing my scribble. I did have some trouble scribing the troublesome rhythm.. But I anxiously contiued regardlessly and lived in hope hoping the rhyme contiued to be regarded as readable and not causing too much anxiety. Secondly, Your good luck wishes were lucky for me as I came second and I minded not winning as long as this was a winner in your mind . Cheers Christine😃😃👍
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Congrats on the second place. And, you are most welcome.
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Thank you very much JDRBAR👍
Comment from BeasPeas
The form looks like fun, but a bit complicated. Yours is a DwaRazy about writing one. All poem is clever and fun but especially these lines:
"I think this challenge has challenged my thinking
To link every stanza so they're interlinking."
Marilyn
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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The form looks like fun, but a bit complicated. Yours is a DwaRazy about writing one. All poem is clever and fun but especially these lines:
"I think this challenge has challenged my thinking
To link every stanza so they're interlinking."
Marilyn
Comment Written 01-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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Hi Marilyn, Thanks for reading and reviewing my DwaRazy poem a rather complicated style but fun to do Glad you like those lines as it make me think LOL
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
I admire you for even attempting this form I would get lost I enjoyed your fun poem whether right or wrong I am not sure well done good luck regards Jill
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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I admire you for even attempting this form I would get lost I enjoyed your fun poem whether right or wrong I am not sure well done good luck regards Jill
Comment Written 31-May-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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Hi Jill, Thanks so much for your review and kind words it was a fun challenge I hope it was the right write ? LOLCheers
Comment from Rasmine
You know what, this is very funny and light. It was a joy to read -- I've been reviewing all day, trying to get to 60 member dollars and I'm a bit exhausted, so your poem put a smile on my face.
Good luck in the contest! Hope you get it.
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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You know what, this is very funny and light. It was a joy to read -- I've been reviewing all day, trying to get to 60 member dollars and I'm a bit exhausted, so your poem put a smile on my face.
Good luck in the contest! Hope you get it.
Comment Written 31-May-2017
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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Hi Rasmine, Oh Thanks you very much you must be exhausted. That is a lot of reviewing so well done on doing that. I truly appreciate your time to review mine and hope I helped a little bit to boost your dollars.' It can be expensive this site I Spend a bit on it' I am glad you had a laugh Thanks for your good luck wishes also We will see Cheers.
Comment from Thal1959
Thanks for entering. Yes, it fits the form with only one possible exception, "If you give me good rating or berate with review" I suppose the pairing is in rating/berate, but that's what makes the form fun - finding a more subliminal pairing. There is, of course, a heavy usage of alliterations here. Something I have chatted with other writers is that the form can lead one to resort to a simplistic, almost children's book style of phraseology. But focusing on a good word combination by its dual use in a line can make for some interesting verses. Good luck on the contest.
reply by the author on 30-May-2017
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Thanks for entering. Yes, it fits the form with only one possible exception, "If you give me good rating or berate with review" I suppose the pairing is in rating/berate, but that's what makes the form fun - finding a more subliminal pairing. There is, of course, a heavy usage of alliterations here. Something I have chatted with other writers is that the form can lead one to resort to a simplistic, almost children's book style of phraseology. But focusing on a good word combination by its dual use in a line can make for some interesting verses. Good luck on the contest.
Comment Written 30-May-2017
reply by the author on 30-May-2017
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Hi Thai1959.Thank you for your review and suggestion I have made one small change but have kept rating and berate. Yes it is a difficult jonre' bur a fun challenge . Cheers
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You're welcome - it was my pleasure.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written DwaRazy poem. The real trick is to let it all make sense. It is not about the words only. In that case we can read the dictionary. Good luck with te contest.
reply by the author on 30-May-2017
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A very well-written DwaRazy poem. The real trick is to let it all make sense. It is not about the words only. In that case we can read the dictionary. Good luck with te contest.
Comment Written 30-May-2017
reply by the author on 30-May-2017
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Hi Sandra, Thanks for saying that . I hope amongst my scribing fo this one can find the subtle sense througout. Your good luck is appreciate Cheer
Comment from estory
I liked the convoluted language of this poem, it really puts the mind through a maze, and created plenty of interesting musical melodies as well. lots of alliterations form the backbone of the music, and the convoluted images bring one to all kinds of scattered conclusions. or no conclusion at all. We don't know if we are coming or going, rising or falling. estory
reply by the author on 30-May-2017
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I liked the convoluted language of this poem, it really puts the mind through a maze, and created plenty of interesting musical melodies as well. lots of alliterations form the backbone of the music, and the convoluted images bring one to all kinds of scattered conclusions. or no conclusion at all. We don't know if we are coming or going, rising or falling. estory
Comment Written 30-May-2017
reply by the author on 30-May-2017
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Hi estory, Yes thats the reaction I am after LOL You try writing it Ha Ha, wasn't sure if I was Arthur or Martha, Thanks so much for your great feedback. It was fun to have a try at this style. Cheers
Comment from Caressa_08
Wow, Your poem is so entertaining with rhyme and reason and not an easy feat to come up with something like this, a DwaRazy...and even the name seems a little crazy, though looked at the contest particulars... and well, the name is Polish, meaning two times, but to really get one as good as yours...not for the casual writer it does seem...and think whoever you are... that you did quite a remarkable job with the task you decided to take on,
Best Wishes for your entry & just a very minor correction is that you did misspelled, DwaRazy, in the notes below your wonderful poem...Caressa_08
reply by the author on 30-May-2017
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Wow, Your poem is so entertaining with rhyme and reason and not an easy feat to come up with something like this, a DwaRazy...and even the name seems a little crazy, though looked at the contest particulars... and well, the name is Polish, meaning two times, but to really get one as good as yours...not for the casual writer it does seem...and think whoever you are... that you did quite a remarkable job with the task you decided to take on,
Best Wishes for your entry & just a very minor correction is that you did misspelled, DwaRazy, in the notes below your wonderful poem...Caressa_08
Comment Written 30-May-2017
reply by the author on 30-May-2017
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Hi Caressa 08. Oh my Thank you so much your wonderful review and for your six stars. This to receive has made this worth writing. I wasn 't sure how my poem would be received and yes It did take a while to write, but I love a good challenge and had never heard of a DwRazy before until I saw this contest this and thought why not lets give it a go . I will correct the spelling I had to keep looking at it to try and remember how to spell it LOL but never the less I am so pleased to receive your great feedback. With much appreciation and many Thanks Cheers
Comment from MaggieF
Great picture. I love the humour, the flow, the rhythm and rhyme but mostly the alliteration, which is much harder to write than it looks. Really enjoyed. MaggieF
reply by the author on 30-May-2017
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Great picture. I love the humour, the flow, the rhythm and rhyme but mostly the alliteration, which is much harder to write than it looks. Really enjoyed. MaggieF
Comment Written 29-May-2017
reply by the author on 30-May-2017
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Hi Maggie, Thanks for stopping by to read and review my poem. It was fun to write bit rather a tomgue twister as well LOL. Yes this WAS a challenge bit I do love those. Many Thanks for your feedback. I think the picture matches the chaos Ha Ha Cheers
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A very clever write with interesting twists and turns, very enjoyable and unusual and I wish you luck with the contest, not one word was wasted! Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 30-May-2017
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A very clever write with interesting twists and turns, very enjoyable and unusual and I wish you luck with the contest, not one word was wasted! Love Dolly x
Comment Written 29-May-2017
reply by the author on 30-May-2017
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Hi Dolly, Thank so much for reading my DwaRazy a rather complicated by fun style to try ( This is my first attempt LOL) Your feedback is much appreciated and Thanks for your luck wishes. Cheers
