2017 JAPANESE POETRY
Viewing comments for Chapter 37 "Haiku (midnight thunderstorm)"A collection of Japanese poetry
22 total reviews
Comment from Ann Philips
I enjoyed this Haiku. I thought the it was a very nice idea for this poetic format.
The first two lines really speak to me, maybe because I have the same feeling about late night thunder storm.
I'm not sure the last line speaks to me as strongly as the first two lines, but I liked the poem very much.
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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I enjoyed this Haiku. I thought the it was a very nice idea for this poetic format.
The first two lines really speak to me, maybe because I have the same feeling about late night thunder storm.
I'm not sure the last line speaks to me as strongly as the first two lines, but I liked the poem very much.
Comment Written 31-May-2017
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words, Ann.
Gypsy
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes my friend this is well written you certainly have the feeling of how people react during a thunderstorm using this form well done again my friend I am behind again forgive me regards Jill
reply by the author on 29-May-2017
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Yes my friend this is well written you certainly have the feeling of how people react during a thunderstorm using this form well done again my friend I am behind again forgive me regards Jill
Comment Written 29-May-2017
reply by the author on 29-May-2017
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Thank you, Jill :)
Gypsy
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
A well constructed haiku centered on a picture that inspires many to reflect - the thunderstorm. Thank you for sharing it.
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A well constructed haiku centered on a picture that inspires many to reflect - the thunderstorm. Thank you for sharing it.
Comment Written 29-May-2017
Comment from Joan E.
You certainly capture the unsettled mood in this 5-7-4 verse. I admired your memorable "echoes of my mind". Hope you are enjoying a serene holiday Monday- Joan
reply by the author on 29-May-2017
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You certainly capture the unsettled mood in this 5-7-4 verse. I admired your memorable "echoes of my mind". Hope you are enjoying a serene holiday Monday- Joan
Comment Written 29-May-2017
reply by the author on 29-May-2017
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Thank you, Joan, I had a very pleasant day I hope yours was too. Thank you, my friend.
Gypsy
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I enjoyed a relaxing, long weekend and am ready for a new week--hope yours is productive- Joan
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nicely written haiku, Gypsy.
-Vivid, concrete imagery
that paints a picture of the storm.
-I like the second line that leads
to an interesting conclusion in the satori.
-Just curious should it be 'soothes'?
-Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-May-2017
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-Nicely written haiku, Gypsy.
-Vivid, concrete imagery
that paints a picture of the storm.
-I like the second line that leads
to an interesting conclusion in the satori.
-Just curious should it be 'soothes'?
-Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 29-May-2017
reply by the author on 29-May-2017
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Thank you, Pam, I will check that. Thank you for the review and kind words.
Gypsy
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You are very welcome, Gypsy.
Comment from Mark Schardine
The reader can interpret this poem in different ways. The thunderstorm, with its immediate danger, can clear away uncertainty. We must forget our minor concerns and focus on the natural world, which affects us much more.
reply by the author on 29-May-2017
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The reader can interpret this poem in different ways. The thunderstorm, with its immediate danger, can clear away uncertainty. We must forget our minor concerns and focus on the natural world, which affects us much more.
Comment Written 29-May-2017
reply by the author on 29-May-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words, my friend.
Gypsy
Comment from Heather Knight
I like the relationship between nature and your mind that you have created in this poem.
Soothes the echoes of my mind is a beautiful sentence.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-May-2017
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I like the relationship between nature and your mind that you have created in this poem.
Soothes the echoes of my mind is a beautiful sentence.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 29-May-2017
reply by the author on 29-May-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words, my friend.
Gypsy
Comment from Dean Kuch
It should be no secret that I find thunderstorms to be a very soothing, relaxing occurrence of nature, and a great aid in helping one whose minds are all a'clutter to fall asleep.
If it wasn't known before, then perhaps it will be now.
I rather like this "minimalist approach" you've take towards your haiku writing of late, Teach.
Although I realize some of it is brought about by circumstances rather than choice.
Excellent, as always.
reply by the author on 29-May-2017
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It should be no secret that I find thunderstorms to be a very soothing, relaxing occurrence of nature, and a great aid in helping one whose minds are all a'clutter to fall asleep.
If it wasn't known before, then perhaps it will be now.
I rather like this "minimalist approach" you've take towards your haiku writing of late, Teach.
Although I realize some of it is brought about by circumstances rather than choice.
Excellent, as always.
Comment Written 29-May-2017
reply by the author on 29-May-2017
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Thank you
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Don't mention it.
Comment from Hitcher
I love thunderstorms at any day and hour but a midnight thunderstorm... Mmmm, I'm thinking sensual thoughts already, ha ha. Another great haiku from your very gifted mind gypsy... Nice!
reply by the author on 29-May-2017
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I love thunderstorms at any day and hour but a midnight thunderstorm... Mmmm, I'm thinking sensual thoughts already, ha ha. Another great haiku from your very gifted mind gypsy... Nice!
Comment Written 29-May-2017
reply by the author on 29-May-2017
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LoL you are funny. Thank you for the review and kind words, my friend.
Gypsy
Comment from Sis Cat
Gypsy, another fine haiku. I love your simplicity of going image-less. This allows your haiku to stand on its own, creating an image in the reader's mind and an emotion in the reader's heart. Here, midnight thunderstorm both soothe ones mind and causes uncertainty. You create a mood, an emotion that resonates.
On the technical side, I thought thunderstorms occur in summer and not winter, as your sub-title explains.
Other than that, this is a fine haiku. Your black background also echoes midnight while the white text echoes lightning.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-May-2017
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Gypsy, another fine haiku. I love your simplicity of going image-less. This allows your haiku to stand on its own, creating an image in the reader's mind and an emotion in the reader's heart. Here, midnight thunderstorm both soothe ones mind and causes uncertainty. You create a mood, an emotion that resonates.
On the technical side, I thought thunderstorms occur in summer and not winter, as your sub-title explains.
Other than that, this is a fine haiku. Your black background also echoes midnight while the white text echoes lightning.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 29-May-2017
reply by the author on 29-May-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words, my friend. You are right. My mistake.
Gypsy