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Viewing comments for Chapter 46 "I Whisper Her Name to No One"possible selections for inclusion in book project
19 total reviews
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
You've written a very good poem.
I can clearly see that 'I Whisper Her Name To No One' meets the requirements of the contest and makes a good entry.
Lovely artwork. The image shown supports the poem. The background selected goes well with the art and color of font chosen.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Thanks for sharing your Free Verse of Length.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
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You've written a very good poem.
I can clearly see that 'I Whisper Her Name To No One' meets the requirements of the contest and makes a good entry.
Lovely artwork. The image shown supports the poem. The background selected goes well with the art and color of font chosen.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Thanks for sharing your Free Verse of Length.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
Comment Written 11-Jun-2017
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
This was a wonderful free verse poem Michael . It flowed beautifully, imagery was outstanding and it was very professionally written. Your chosen words are insightful and impressive.
It is perfectly written and completely error free.
The descriptive words created wonderful impressions.
Good luck in the contest
Mitchell
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This was a wonderful free verse poem Michael . It flowed beautifully, imagery was outstanding and it was very professionally written. Your chosen words are insightful and impressive.
It is perfectly written and completely error free.
The descriptive words created wonderful impressions.
Good luck in the contest
Mitchell
Comment Written 09-Jun-2017
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
This is really quite lovely, Mike -
you have a wonderful way with words
that flow so smoothly down the page.
I like the whole presentation. A perfect entry for the contest.
Good luck to you.
Margaret
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This is really quite lovely, Mike -
you have a wonderful way with words
that flow so smoothly down the page.
I like the whole presentation. A perfect entry for the contest.
Good luck to you.
Margaret
Comment Written 08-Jun-2017
Comment from frogbook
Interesting and unique. Full of imagery and emotion right down to the powerful and beautiful end. A great stark presentation that added to the words, instead of distracting with too much.
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Interesting and unique. Full of imagery and emotion right down to the powerful and beautiful end. A great stark presentation that added to the words, instead of distracting with too much.
Comment Written 23-May-2017
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Ths is a beautifully written free verse mikey. I felt like I was drifting on the wins of the butterfly as I followed this through to the end, till you -whisper her name to no one.
Very nice, good luck in the contest,
cheers,
valda
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Ths is a beautifully written free verse mikey. I felt like I was drifting on the wins of the butterfly as I followed this through to the end, till you -whisper her name to no one.
Very nice, good luck in the contest,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 21-May-2017
Comment from Gloria ....
Excellent visuals in the opening stanza, Mav. I have seen this happen when clouds form and the sun seeps through onto the water. Eye to the horizon is fantastic foreshadowing of a future, not exactly a sunset but motion to another place because we do know the sun never stops shining.
I love the colour choices too as it symbolizes not only growth but also the stem of a rose. Very tasteful.
a beautiful statement of the power of forests. They most definitely are confident as they reach for the sky.
Excellent use of personification to evoke intimacy. And I absolutely love the rose growing right of the ocean! That is rare and would be something to see.
Exceptional tone, movement and voicing.
This is a fantastic free verse. Best of luck to you in the contest.
Ange
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Excellent visuals in the opening stanza, Mav. I have seen this happen when clouds form and the sun seeps through onto the water. Eye to the horizon is fantastic foreshadowing of a future, not exactly a sunset but motion to another place because we do know the sun never stops shining.
I love the colour choices too as it symbolizes not only growth but also the stem of a rose. Very tasteful.
a beautiful statement of the power of forests. They most definitely are confident as they reach for the sky.
Excellent use of personification to evoke intimacy. And I absolutely love the rose growing right of the ocean! That is rare and would be something to see.
Exceptional tone, movement and voicing.
This is a fantastic free verse. Best of luck to you in the contest.
Ange
Comment Written 21-May-2017
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Mikey, what a truly beautiful free verse with such strong imagery and emotion as well. You have been doing some really superb writing lately, my friend. Best wishes in the contest~Debbie
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Mikey, what a truly beautiful free verse with such strong imagery and emotion as well. You have been doing some really superb writing lately, my friend. Best wishes in the contest~Debbie
Comment Written 21-May-2017
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Mikey,
My perceptions might be way off on this one lol I feel like this is the Earth going into a cycle of renewal. I get that with the urgency (to save the planet) being ignored. Eventually it will get to a state where the world must be reborn. The mountains erupting, lava (hot) rivers underground, new life (the flower) from the ocean, and the last man swept away on the current. Her name is Mother Earth.
Ok, now is the part where you tell me I got it all wrong! lol But, that's where my brain went with it. :) Your free verse has wonderful flow and excellent use of assonance and consonance.
Good luck in the contest.
Kim
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Hi Mikey,
My perceptions might be way off on this one lol I feel like this is the Earth going into a cycle of renewal. I get that with the urgency (to save the planet) being ignored. Eventually it will get to a state where the world must be reborn. The mountains erupting, lava (hot) rivers underground, new life (the flower) from the ocean, and the last man swept away on the current. Her name is Mother Earth.
Ok, now is the part where you tell me I got it all wrong! lol But, that's where my brain went with it. :) Your free verse has wonderful flow and excellent use of assonance and consonance.
Good luck in the contest.
Kim
Comment Written 20-May-2017
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading your contest entry. Just a note for us old fogies. This shade of green on the black made it different for me to read, the green smeared in my view. I am probably the only person it effected.
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I enjoyed reading your contest entry. Just a note for us old fogies. This shade of green on the black made it different for me to read, the green smeared in my view. I am probably the only person it effected.
Comment Written 20-May-2017
Comment from Pantygynt
An entrancingly beautiful piece of free verse on a romantic theme, that requires silent secrecy. I stumbled over this strangely placed comma however.
"...display of enticing mystery so, soft softness..." The comma after 'so' seems misplaced. "...mystery, so soft that..." feels more appropriate unless I have missed something here. What worries me is that apart from apostrophes this is the only punctuation mark in the whole poem, and it seems odd that you would misplace it.
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An entrancingly beautiful piece of free verse on a romantic theme, that requires silent secrecy. I stumbled over this strangely placed comma however.
"...display of enticing mystery so, soft softness..." The comma after 'so' seems misplaced. "...mystery, so soft that..." feels more appropriate unless I have missed something here. What worries me is that apart from apostrophes this is the only punctuation mark in the whole poem, and it seems odd that you would misplace it.
Comment Written 20-May-2017