My First Kiss
In the middle of Parcheesi...3 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
Well written and interesting. Sometimes adolescent boys are shyer than girls who tend to be more forward then. It seems like Francine was one of those. Much luck in the contest. Marilyn
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Well written and interesting. Sometimes adolescent boys are shyer than girls who tend to be more forward then. It seems like Francine was one of those. Much luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 20-May-2017
Comment from F. Wehr3
It's very difficult to write a hundred word story, but I thought you did a good job. My only critique is you need to place the dialogue and actions of your characters into different paragraphs. Good luck in the contest.
Take care,
Russell
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It's very difficult to write a hundred word story, but I thought you did a good job. My only critique is you need to place the dialogue and actions of your characters into different paragraphs. Good luck in the contest.
Take care,
Russell
Comment Written 19-May-2017
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
She knew what she wanted. LOL! He didn't have to find a girl to kiss... she found him. I wonder how often it happens that way? Probably a lot more today with liberated women. :)
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She knew what she wanted. LOL! He didn't have to find a girl to kiss... she found him. I wonder how often it happens that way? Probably a lot more today with liberated women. :)
Comment Written 19-May-2017
