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Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am almost positive that this isn't for Mother's Day. LOL So Astor uses human fertilizer for this garden. Oh MY! I did enjoy reading and can't wait for more. Your talent shines through.
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I am almost positive that this isn't for Mother's Day. LOL So Astor uses human fertilizer for this garden. Oh MY! I did enjoy reading and can't wait for more. Your talent shines through.
Comment Written 20-May-2017
Comment from Rasmine
Hello,
What I see is a bunch of corpses talking to the Gardener. I don't know if I got that right--at least Mary and her son. Well, continue on!
Have a good weekend.
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Hello,
What I see is a bunch of corpses talking to the Gardener. I don't know if I got that right--at least Mary and her son. Well, continue on!
Have a good weekend.
Comment Written 19-May-2017
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Mikey,
Tales of the Gruesome Gardner? lol Yikes! I've heard of fertilizer, but that generally means poop, not bodies. You've certainly got a twist going in this story and it has a garden and a mom lol
The writing is fine and the stage direction is complete for your script. It is a bit disturbing that the mom and the son were rolling around and laughing about using the neighbors as fertilizer. What made them think they wouldn't end up planted under one of those trees? Better a stranger than a neighbor, eh?
Your imagination is running wild here and I think we should be worried about that lol
Great job for this genre!
Kim
reply by the author on 20-May-2017
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Hi Mikey,
Tales of the Gruesome Gardner? lol Yikes! I've heard of fertilizer, but that generally means poop, not bodies. You've certainly got a twist going in this story and it has a garden and a mom lol
The writing is fine and the stage direction is complete for your script. It is a bit disturbing that the mom and the son were rolling around and laughing about using the neighbors as fertilizer. What made them think they wouldn't end up planted under one of those trees? Better a stranger than a neighbor, eh?
Your imagination is running wild here and I think we should be worried about that lol
Great job for this genre!
Kim
Comment Written 19-May-2017
reply by the author on 20-May-2017
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I'm so pleased you enjoyed this. I did feel a little guilty it being Mother's Day and all ... so, I hope I redeemed myself with my poetry potlatch entry. Much nicer and in tune with the spirit of the day. LOL
I had no idea my nice little gardener would turn out to be such a ghoul, but I guess he wasn't the sweetheart I though he was. HA!
I got a huge kick out of a remark you made in a review about Gloria going wherever Mikey goes. HAHAHAHA! Just for the record. It's the other way around. I doubt I show up on Gloria's radar, but she's kind enough to let me be her sidekick. LOL! Yeah, I'm Milhouse and she's Lisa. :)) Thanks so much. Mike
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I just meant you two stick together lol nothing bad about that :) I was perplexed as to what Strandregs was saying in his piece and was trying to understand. I hope that wasn't upsetting. Are you up for epigrams today? I hope so. You are awesome at satire!
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Oh, I didn't think anything bad. LOL
Other's though imply things for who knows what reason. I was just joking around. I'm NOT ready, but I will be there. HAHAHA!!! Is being prepared a requirement? :)) mike
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Is already having a topic required? lol I am so bad at settling on what style or what topic to choose... I just want to try too many things lol You will be awesome at epigrams, I'm sure of it!
Kim
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You have GREAT topics. Plenty of wiggle room. :))
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Thanks! That's what I try for, I absolutely love the diversity of all of our Potlatch pieces on a weekly basis. It makes all the perspectives so fun to read.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Well not Mother's DAy but indeed garden and the first of many trees it seems and many a fine compost?
Excellent staged piece and hope for another part
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Well not Mother's DAy but indeed garden and the first of many trees it seems and many a fine compost?
Excellent staged piece and hope for another part
Comment Written 18-May-2017
Comment from country ranch writer
Oh how the garden grows with people coming to visit and never going home. Staying for eturnity. He is sleek and slippery so he has to be careful he isn't caught.
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Oh how the garden grows with people coming to visit and never going home. Staying for eturnity. He is sleek and slippery so he has to be careful he isn't caught.
Comment Written 18-May-2017
Comment from apky
I've been following your excellent script writing for quite some time now, in the hope of grasping how you do this so well. I'd like to attempt script writing but my knowledge is not really up to scratch. When I read passages like below, I'm awed:
We open with a wide shot of a small cottage which resembles a castle in style. The camera pans over a colourful garden with a mad variety of plant, tree and floral growth. It is Spring and everything is vibrant and in bloom. An older man brushes the sweat off his brow with his sleeve and lays his shovel down. He picks up a hose and adjusts the nozzle to a fine spray. He begins to water the fruits of his labor, a small apricot tree covered in white blossoms. A mother and a little boy, her son, appear a few feet away and watch him.
Apky
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I've been following your excellent script writing for quite some time now, in the hope of grasping how you do this so well. I'd like to attempt script writing but my knowledge is not really up to scratch. When I read passages like below, I'm awed:
We open with a wide shot of a small cottage which resembles a castle in style. The camera pans over a colourful garden with a mad variety of plant, tree and floral growth. It is Spring and everything is vibrant and in bloom. An older man brushes the sweat off his brow with his sleeve and lays his shovel down. He picks up a hose and adjusts the nozzle to a fine spray. He begins to water the fruits of his labor, a small apricot tree covered in white blossoms. A mother and a little boy, her son, appear a few feet away and watch him.
Apky
Comment Written 18-May-2017
Comment from Pearl Edwards
May not be in the spirit of Mothers Day but it's certainly in someone's spirits and with another one to join them soon. Great script mikey, enjoyed this well fertilized garden,
cheers.
valda
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May not be in the spirit of Mothers Day but it's certainly in someone's spirits and with another one to join them soon. Great script mikey, enjoyed this well fertilized garden,
cheers.
valda
Comment Written 18-May-2017
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written script about a beautiful garden, although the gardener has a hidden secret, why the plants grow so well and the fruit are so juicy. The fertilizer is the best he can lay his hands on.
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A very well-written script about a beautiful garden, although the gardener has a hidden secret, why the plants grow so well and the fruit are so juicy. The fertilizer is the best he can lay his hands on.
Comment Written 18-May-2017
Comment from nordicgirl
Whew! I forgot just how warped and twisted you are. You DO get sid we tracked with your little heartfelt love offerrings.
I love this though I am here alone and afraid to go outside now. Creepy as hell.
MORE!!!!!! NG.
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Whew! I forgot just how warped and twisted you are. You DO get sid we tracked with your little heartfelt love offerrings.
I love this though I am here alone and afraid to go outside now. Creepy as hell.
MORE!!!!!! NG.
Comment Written 18-May-2017
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hahaha... hilarious... My boyfriend read it to me and did all the voices. This is awesome, my friend. No wonder you are number two script writer on the site. You can be number one easily.
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
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Hahaha... hilarious... My boyfriend read it to me and did all the voices. This is awesome, my friend. No wonder you are number two script writer on the site. You can be number one easily.
Comment Written 18-May-2017
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
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OMG! I would love to hear that. What a treat. I'm sure he made it sound WAY better than it is. LOL!! Not much script competition. Maybe I'll go for the gold. HAHAHA! Thanks so much. mike ... Irish Hug!