Daydreams
Daydreams like weeds just pop up.9 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
So the speaker is having and affair with her neighbor's husband. How could they get away with it with the wife sitting on the front porch. She has to know. She has the love of this man. But she probably really doesn't as much as she think's she knows about the wife's life as the last line implies
Congrats on placing in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2017
So the speaker is having and affair with her neighbor's husband. How could they get away with it with the wife sitting on the front porch. She has to know. She has the love of this man. But she probably really doesn't as much as she think's she knows about the wife's life as the last line implies
Congrats on placing in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 26-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2017
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Awww. she's only daydreaming, Seeing the handsome neighbour started her on a little mind trip, no actual affair. :o) Thank you for reading and reviewing my work.
Jo
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No problem.
joan
Comment from Spitfire
Yep, a middle-aged muscular man would get me going too.
pulled another dandelion from my badly overgrown flower bed. -- nice touch with symbolic overtones and reading between the lines.
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
Yep, a middle-aged muscular man would get me going too.
pulled another dandelion from my badly overgrown flower bed. -- nice touch with symbolic overtones and reading between the lines.
Comment Written 17-May-2017
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
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Thanks, I appreciate your feedback.
Jo
Comment from MizKat
Hi justjo,
What you wrote for the word flash fiction contest was very nice.
The picture that you put up with it is very great too.
Also using the 102 words worked out well.
Kat
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
Hi justjo,
What you wrote for the word flash fiction contest was very nice.
The picture that you put up with it is very great too.
Also using the 102 words worked out well.
Kat
Comment Written 16-May-2017
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
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Thanks, Kat, for reading my flash fiction. I haven't entered anything in a long time. Recovering from a heart attack in June and a mild stroke in April.
Jo
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Hi Jo,
I hope that you are a lot better now.
It's too bad that you had so many things wrong with you.
Kat
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Thanks, Kat, I'm much better now.
Jo
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Hi Jo,
I wrote something and don't know if I remembered to save it.
I am very sorry about all of the things
that were wrong with you. I hope you
will be feeling better now.
Kat
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Hi Jo,
I'm very happy that you are feeling better now. I look forward to more of
your lovely poems.
Kat
Comment from Dean Kuch
Dreams of Gone With the Wind, 'ey, JustJo66?
Yeah, I get it. That's one of the greatest romances portrayed in all of moviedom.
Besides, there's nothing wrong with a little healthy fantasizing, provided that you're single of course.
Good flash fiction tail...e-r-rrrr, heh-heh/... I mean TALE.
Ahem...
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
Dreams of Gone With the Wind, 'ey, JustJo66?
Yeah, I get it. That's one of the greatest romances portrayed in all of moviedom.
Besides, there's nothing wrong with a little healthy fantasizing, provided that you're single of course.
Good flash fiction tail...e-r-rrrr, heh-heh/... I mean TALE.
Ahem...
Comment Written 16-May-2017
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
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Aww, Dean, a little healthy fantasising is good for everyone...even us old married people. :o) Thanks for the stars and the review.
Jo
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My pleasure.
Comment from Wabigoon
justjo--
Daydreams, eh? Okay, I buy it. A very small, provocative short story, Nicely done. I am not sure why I don't do these but I don't. I do buy what you have written, or believe in it and that it is just a daydream.
Thanks much jo
Wabigoon/Jeff
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
justjo--
Daydreams, eh? Okay, I buy it. A very small, provocative short story, Nicely done. I am not sure why I don't do these but I don't. I do buy what you have written, or believe in it and that it is just a daydream.
Thanks much jo
Wabigoon/Jeff
Comment Written 16-May-2017
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
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Jeff, thank you for the six stars and review. I truly appreciate it. I haven't done much lately. Still recovering from a heart attack in June and a mild stroke in April. Not a lot of brain damage. :O) well maybe some memory loss...hard to tell...I was already having some senior moments. :o)
Jo
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Jo--
Sorry about the health problems. We all face them sooner or later, Nah, I wish I had something acutely intelligent to say about them, but don't at the moment. Hang in there.
Best
Wabigoon/Jeff
Comment from Mustang Patty
the daring daydreams will just take over our lives, if we let them. Within the 100 word count, you have given us a complete story - except maybe for the last sentence - but daydreams will pop up like that. Good luck in the contest,
~patty~
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
the daring daydreams will just take over our lives, if we let them. Within the 100 word count, you have given us a complete story - except maybe for the last sentence - but daydreams will pop up like that. Good luck in the contest,
~patty~
Comment Written 16-May-2017
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
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Patty, thank you for reviewing my flash fiction.
Jo
Comment from His Grayness
As far as I can understand, this is a contest entry for flash fiction and within the restraints of that type of contest, I found this to be delightful and offering a "grip" to stay onboard for further delight...which is always the best issue for any writing.
Many thanks for an interesting read! HIS GRAYNESS
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
As far as I can understand, this is a contest entry for flash fiction and within the restraints of that type of contest, I found this to be delightful and offering a "grip" to stay onboard for further delight...which is always the best issue for any writing.
Many thanks for an interesting read! HIS GRAYNESS
Comment Written 16-May-2017
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
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Thank you so much for your kind review. I am amused by your choice of name for this site(made me smile).
Jo
Comment from Natalie Walker
This is a good story, with excellent description. I like the comparison of daydreams to weeds, both pop up unexpectedly.
I didn't notice any errors or typos.
Nice work!
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
This is a good story, with excellent description. I like the comparison of daydreams to weeds, both pop up unexpectedly.
I didn't notice any errors or typos.
Nice work!
Comment Written 16-May-2017
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
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Thank you, Natalie, for reviewing my poem and the generous stars.
Jo
Comment from prettybluebirds
Excellent. This story is short but sweet. It is well-written and I enjoyed the ending. The artwork compliments the writing as well. I wish you only the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
Excellent. This story is short but sweet. It is well-written and I enjoyed the ending. The artwork compliments the writing as well. I wish you only the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-May-2017
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
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Thank you for the good wishes for the contest and for the generous stars for my work.
Jo