Electric Kiss
A Blind Date Gone Right9 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
So true--it's all about the chemistry. If there's no chemistry, there's no romance. Your story is clear and interesting. Good luck in the contest. Marilyn
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So true--it's all about the chemistry. If there's no chemistry, there's no romance. Your story is clear and interesting. Good luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 20-May-2017
Comment from Mustang Patty
thank you for sharing your short piece for the writing prompt. Within the one hundred word limit, you have given us a moment in time - held onto by the kissers. Well done and good luck in the contest,
~patty~
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thank you for sharing your short piece for the writing prompt. Within the one hundred word limit, you have given us a moment in time - held onto by the kissers. Well done and good luck in the contest,
~patty~
Comment Written 17-May-2017
Comment from Rikki66
Good story well written. It is a spark we all desire but seldom get, especially on a blind first date. Generally when someone says they know the perfect person for you, they are the exact opposite. To put a twist to the story make the kiss same gender. Rick
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Good story well written. It is a spark we all desire but seldom get, especially on a blind first date. Generally when someone says they know the perfect person for you, they are the exact opposite. To put a twist to the story make the kiss same gender. Rick
Comment Written 17-May-2017
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi T. Again, another one short, sweet and to the point. I think the use of the word "end" twice in that last paragraph is too much however, ah hemmm I do get the point. Good luck in your contest. xoxo Kiwi
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Hi T. Again, another one short, sweet and to the point. I think the use of the word "end" twice in that last paragraph is too much however, ah hemmm I do get the point. Good luck in your contest. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 17-May-2017
Comment from Dean Kuch
So...I take it that you didn't want the kiss to end based merely on the fact that you mentioned it on more than one occasion during the course of this very short story.
I also understand that there was a bit of electric energy which passed between you?
Also, mentioned more than once...
Ya know, I've been told by those in the know that when it comes to writing flash fiction stories it's best to avoid repetition at all costs--unless it is an integral component of the story as a whole.
Also, FF stories should include a beginning, and conflict, and a resolution.
I know, I know. It sounds like a lot for a story of so few words, right?
Best of luck to you in the contest...
~Dean
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So...I take it that you didn't want the kiss to end based merely on the fact that you mentioned it on more than one occasion during the course of this very short story.
I also understand that there was a bit of electric energy which passed between you?
Also, mentioned more than once...
Ya know, I've been told by those in the know that when it comes to writing flash fiction stories it's best to avoid repetition at all costs--unless it is an integral component of the story as a whole.
Also, FF stories should include a beginning, and conflict, and a resolution.
I know, I know. It sounds like a lot for a story of so few words, right?
Best of luck to you in the contest...
~Dean
Comment Written 16-May-2017
Comment from kahpot
What an excellent way to describe the first kiss, as for a lot of us the first kiss can be the teller of futures, great artwork and good luck in your competition****kahpot
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What an excellent way to describe the first kiss, as for a lot of us the first kiss can be the teller of futures, great artwork and good luck in your competition****kahpot
Comment Written 15-May-2017
Comment from KyColonel Randal
Thank you for sharing. In a story this short, you might consider more concrete description. With 100 words, you almost need to write poetry to convey anything significant in such a short selection. Good luck with your contest entry!
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Thank you for sharing. In a story this short, you might consider more concrete description. With 100 words, you almost need to write poetry to convey anything significant in such a short selection. Good luck with your contest entry!
Comment Written 15-May-2017
Comment from rspoet
Sounds like a lethal kiss
might get yourself electrocuted
or even married
Either way, it's for life
Excellent story for the flash kiss contest
Didn't want it to end
Well done, great choice of picture
Good luck in the contest
RS
reply by the author on 15-May-2017
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Sounds like a lethal kiss
might get yourself electrocuted
or even married
Either way, it's for life
Excellent story for the flash kiss contest
Didn't want it to end
Well done, great choice of picture
Good luck in the contest
RS
Comment Written 15-May-2017
reply by the author on 15-May-2017
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Thank you for a fun review from a fellow New Jerseyan.
Comment from lyenochka
That sounds like a powerful kiss. I wonder if you had included a picture per your author's notes but none is shown. Good description and glad for the perfect match.
reply by the author on 15-May-2017
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That sounds like a powerful kiss. I wonder if you had included a picture per your author's notes but none is shown. Good description and glad for the perfect match.
Comment Written 15-May-2017
reply by the author on 15-May-2017
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I am so soyry. It said it was there. I just checked. It shows up now.
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Thanks. Perfect picture!
