The Little Dog That Wouldn't Let Go
Viewing comments for Chapter 46 "Crazy Neighbours and more."Subtitle: God Never Lets Go!
26 total reviews
Comment from Sylvia Page
Hello Sankey,
Interesting story of everyday life around the neighbourhood. It is fortunate the old brick fence did not fall on your house. More damage then.
Here is a few spag I noticed...
close to 15 years // fifteen-year
robbers knew it (,) "Bear"
old house's time. (space) Our house is
Sylvia
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2019
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Hello Sankey,
Interesting story of everyday life around the neighbourhood. It is fortunate the old brick fence did not fall on your house. More damage then.
Here is a few spag I noticed...
close to 15 years // fifteen-year
robbers knew it (,) "Bear"
old house's time. (space) Our house is
Sylvia
Comment Written 02-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2019
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Thanks Sylvia nice to meet another new friend. I appreciate the review and I will look at these and fix where necessary, thanks. Will check your stuff as well.
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Nice to meet you too, I think I am one of the oldest Fanstorians here since February 2008 and count maybe eleven years at FS. Most of my buddies don't seem to be around but my work remains! Take a look you might find something of interest and spicy!
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Thankjs Sylvoa. I don't know how you have survived all this time qwith the amount of shenanigans that goes on in this place. A lot of favouritism and same people winning awards all the time. We still don't know who the "Committee" is after all these years. I have been here more than five years. am on Monthly on thids account and I have my wife's old account up Tootsie55 as folks wanted to read more of our trips around Australia where we live. My autobiography you have reviewed is almost finished for a final review. I am on Monthly subs until I decide to move on. Tootsie55 is up until November.
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I haven't been present all the time and come only when I have some spare time. I renew my membership every two years. I know there are problems and guess it's why I don't see many of the old faces around. I was in Australia with family over Christmas and returned in time for Easter. What an Easter! I cannot believe we went through all that carnage. In April I felt very uneasy and wanted to return and the family was disappointed we did not stay the year as planned. Then, Jesus wanted me to pray unceasingly from Maunday Thursday right through to Holy Saturday. He wanted me to gather as many of my prayer warriors and pray on Holy Saturday. On Easter Sunday for some reason, my husband and I decided to go for the first morning Mass and was shocked with the news of the bombings. It was only then, I realised why Jesus wanted me to pray and why I felt uneasy and wanted to get back to Sri Lanka.
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Thanks for then heads up glad you visited Aussie have a look at Tootsie 55 for my wife's stories about our trips around Aussie. We are both disabled will fan ya to keep in touch from both accounts I run these days.
Comment from Alex Rosel
I enjoyed reading this. Everyday life can often throw up many interesting events. And it's so nice to have actual pictures of the things you're writing about :)
Here are a few points you might like to consider:
However, if the thieves and robbers knew it "Bear" has to be the most placid Rottweiller I have ever known. -- Spag? I'd insert a comma after knew it.
About 1 am my wife turned over -- Spag? This is better (and the more usual): About 1:00 a.m. my wife turned over. It prevents the confusion with I am.
Flames were shooting meters into the air, from the bin.
-- A picky point here. You've already told the reader the fire is in the bin, so here I'd omit the from the bin. The flames wouldn't be shooting up from anywhere else, and if they were, that's when you'd specifically define their location.
After the Creepy Neighbours moved in a car ran up on the street opposite in our T-intersection and messed up the fence -- Spag? I'd insert a comma after moved in.
It's a lovely post. Thank you :)
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2019
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I enjoyed reading this. Everyday life can often throw up many interesting events. And it's so nice to have actual pictures of the things you're writing about :)
Here are a few points you might like to consider:
However, if the thieves and robbers knew it "Bear" has to be the most placid Rottweiller I have ever known. -- Spag? I'd insert a comma after knew it.
About 1 am my wife turned over -- Spag? This is better (and the more usual): About 1:00 a.m. my wife turned over. It prevents the confusion with I am.
Flames were shooting meters into the air, from the bin.
-- A picky point here. You've already told the reader the fire is in the bin, so here I'd omit the from the bin. The flames wouldn't be shooting up from anywhere else, and if they were, that's when you'd specifically define their location.
After the Creepy Neighbours moved in a car ran up on the street opposite in our T-intersection and messed up the fence -- Spag? I'd insert a comma after moved in.
It's a lovely post. Thank you :)
Comment Written 02-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2019
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Thanks very much for the detailed edit suggestions. I like them all thanks. let you know when they are done.
Comment from Earl Corp
The story about the one neighbor who colorized the truth that you didn't want to associate with sounds like my ex wife. You've been robbed three times? That's horrible. I live in the country and I have one neighbor and we get along with them. Enjoyed your story. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2019
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The story about the one neighbor who colorized the truth that you didn't want to associate with sounds like my ex wife. You've been robbed three times? That's horrible. I live in the country and I have one neighbor and we get along with them. Enjoyed your story. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2019
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Thanks new friend. Great review contest is for a poem I wrote not this old chapter. Thanks anyway. Check you out later.
Comment from Hitcher
I am touching wood as I type for I feel i have been fortunate up until now not to have had any troublesome neighbors. At least none worthy of been called creepy or bad. I've had friends who have had real problematic ones, but I can smile inwardly and let out sigh of relief because I have not. I feel for you, that has got to be stressful?
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2019
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I am touching wood as I type for I feel i have been fortunate up until now not to have had any troublesome neighbors. At least none worthy of been called creepy or bad. I've had friends who have had real problematic ones, but I can smile inwardly and let out sigh of relief because I have not. I feel for you, that has got to be stressful?
Comment Written 02-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2019
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Thanks very much. Another new friend I think. Hope you read the poem. No contest on that now.
Comment from JudyE
I can imagine the brick fence falling would have made quite thump indeed. It was lucky no-one was near it at the time. The colourbond fences do look very smart.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2019
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I can imagine the brick fence falling would have made quite thump indeed. It was lucky no-one was near it at the time. The colourbond fences do look very smart.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2019
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Thanks JudyE. So glad someone is still around for these. We are nearing the end of this book real soon, now. I am only putting up chapters that need a few more points. Appreciate the lovely review, it was scary that night we were inside and felt the house shake when the fence came down!
Comment from Thal1959
Very nicely written, Geoff, with only a few minor things to point out.
"The lady happened to confide in me some time later the neighbor in their previous home..." (In all other instances, you employ the Aussie version of neighbor spelling it with a "u." I'm sure this is just a typo, but consistency is important.)
"...several tree removers offering to come and take the dying one/s down." (Another typo - "s" not "/.")
"After all the troubles we have had with them over the years as outlined above. A really good thing happened over replacement of the old brick fence dividing our properties." (The first sentence is incomplete. It is like saying, "After we went to the house." Well, what happened afterwards? All you have to do is connect the two sentences since the first line is dependent n the second. "After all the troubles we have had with them over the years as outlined above, a really good thing happened over replacement of the old brick fence dividing our properties.")
"...there in the old house's time.Our house is the beginning of a newer estate," (Missed the space after the period.)
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017
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Very nicely written, Geoff, with only a few minor things to point out.
"The lady happened to confide in me some time later the neighbor in their previous home..." (In all other instances, you employ the Aussie version of neighbor spelling it with a "u." I'm sure this is just a typo, but consistency is important.)
"...several tree removers offering to come and take the dying one/s down." (Another typo - "s" not "/.")
"After all the troubles we have had with them over the years as outlined above. A really good thing happened over replacement of the old brick fence dividing our properties." (The first sentence is incomplete. It is like saying, "After we went to the house." Well, what happened afterwards? All you have to do is connect the two sentences since the first line is dependent n the second. "After all the troubles we have had with them over the years as outlined above, a really good thing happened over replacement of the old brick fence dividing our properties.")
"...there in the old house's time.Our house is the beginning of a newer estate," (Missed the space after the period.)
Comment Written 04-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017
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Hey, I asked for it, ha! Currently on cell phone, get to the errors later. This chapter had a very recent addition including the bit about the trees. Get you back later, thanks
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I will count the hours until your return!
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Sankey. I enjoyed reading your story about your horrible neighbors. I guess we all have had those. It was the title of your piece that "grabbed" me. My neighbor on one side is troublesome, too. My solution was to plant as much fast-growing greenery as possible to make a barrier within the fence I installed (double fencing so to speak). Your writing is clear and interesting. Most people who have had a bad neighbor will agree with it. Marilyn
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2017
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Hi Sankey. I enjoyed reading your story about your horrible neighbors. I guess we all have had those. It was the title of your piece that "grabbed" me. My neighbor on one side is troublesome, too. My solution was to plant as much fast-growing greenery as possible to make a barrier within the fence I installed (double fencing so to speak). Your writing is clear and interesting. Most people who have had a bad neighbor will agree with it. Marilyn
Comment Written 03-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2017
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Hi Marilyn, loved your review. Glad you came in on this an inserted chapter after I broke up the large preceding one to create this. There is more I could write about these and maybe I will one day. The saddest part of it all is I really like Sean the second youngest boy but because of his Mother's comments, I just felt I had to remain at a distance for fear of being accused of being the same as her old neighbour from her former residence. You have come in almost at the conclusion of my autobiography. I intend to check your stuff out. I am a great believer in reciprocating in FS even though some old friends I had were nto that way inclined. Your Nick kind of rings some bells but maybe because it is similar to an almost common expression. Cheers and thanks might fan ya.
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You're welcome. I agree that one good turn deserves another. I write mostly poetry, but lately have been posting a little more of my stories. Marilyn
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I forgot to tell you before...the previous owner of the Creepy Neighbours (Hope you saw the poem) house had a white metal see-through fence put around her property to keep her dog in. After the Creepy Neighbours moved in a car ran up from the street opposite our T-intersection and messed up the fence as well as knocking over the steel light post in front. Creepies wanted me to pay half the cost of replacing the fence. I refused as the lady who wanted to put it up excluded us from contributing seeing it was as above to keep the dog in. Maybe I should add this to the chapter as well. We did not feel obligated to contribute on that basis. We do have 3 large Pine trees dividing our properties that were there when we bought the house (a lot smaller then of course)...sadly some of them are dying and we have had several tree removers offering to come and take the dying one/s down. Sorry for the rave.
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I am always wary of neighbors and try to only buy houses far away from any. Fences are a Godsend to keep out what we want out and keep in what we want in. I always erect my own fence and make sure it's on my own property line so there will be no squawks. Even with all of that, there usually are--at some point in time. Frankly, the less I see of neighbors, the better I like it.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Fences make for good neighbors.
The ones described here seem like real "creepy".
Kind of surprised they agreed to help finance the cost of the fence.
As I have always said, four-legged neighbors always make much better ones than the two-legged species could ever hope to.
reply by the author on 22-May-2017
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Fences make for good neighbors.
The ones described here seem like real "creepy".
Kind of surprised they agreed to help finance the cost of the fence.
As I have always said, four-legged neighbors always make much better ones than the two-legged species could ever hope to.
Comment Written 22-May-2017
reply by the author on 22-May-2017
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Yep good one for sure. Thanks for coming by old friend.
Comment from sharonlshelley
good writing i enjoyed it, well written and good descriptive words , look forward to reading more like this in the future i am more of a poet and new to the site
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reply by the author on 21-May-2017
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good writing i enjoyed it, well written and good descriptive words , look forward to reading more like this in the future i am more of a poet and new to the site
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Comment Written 21-May-2017
reply by the author on 21-May-2017
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Hi there new Fser. Nice to meet you. I have just about finished the last run through of this, my Life Story. Sorry we have not met before. I am about to get out my Spiritual Poems book for one last review before I try and get both of these published as well. If you look through my Portfolio you will find Poems of all kinds serious, funny and so on. Will look for your stuff too as I believe in reciprocating and helping each other get those infernal Funny Money dollars in here for Promoting and Reviewing etc. Cheers from Australia.
Comment from pbomar1115
The story was entertaining. Your daily life seems ordinary; however, creepy people come up with the craziest things to tell you. I can't imagine what the woman was thinking when she told you about her son being touched. What did she expect from you? Your story was not only entertaining, it was interesting, as well.
reply by the author on 21-May-2017
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The story was entertaining. Your daily life seems ordinary; however, creepy people come up with the craziest things to tell you. I can't imagine what the woman was thinking when she told you about her son being touched. What did she expect from you? Your story was not only entertaining, it was interesting, as well.
Comment Written 21-May-2017
reply by the author on 21-May-2017
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Thanks another new friend. So glad to be making these new friends I nearly got off here but my renewal came up too quick and I was not ready...just as well...meeting new friends. Thanks so much. Nearly at the end of my biography now this was just added to and the pictures are only recent as well. cheers.
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You're welcome.
