~ Red Carp ~
Etheree Poem - (2nd Place)25 total reviews
Comment from Pantygynt
A skilfully constructed etheree resulting in a good isosceles triangular shape resulting from the syllable count and the appropriate words choice. I think the very last word, 'pop' has slipped off the bold format. Is that because the bubble popped or was it not intentional?
reply by the author on 13-May-2017
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A skilfully constructed etheree resulting in a good isosceles triangular shape resulting from the syllable count and the appropriate words choice. I think the very last word, 'pop' has slipped off the bold format. Is that because the bubble popped or was it not intentional?
Comment Written 12-May-2017
reply by the author on 13-May-2017
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Pantygynt, many thanks, as always, for your words of wisdom in your reviews. I'm always grateful and appreciate your comments on my Etheree poem. I was still in many minds as to the end word - pop - so was playing with font. Kind regards ~DD
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Poet enjoys red carps at play their favourite game hide and seek amongst water lilies and watches their bubbles give red carps away with sounds pops on pond's surface.
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Poet enjoys red carps at play their favourite game hide and seek amongst water lilies and watches their bubbles give red carps away with sounds pops on pond's surface.
Comment Written 12-May-2017
reply by the author on 13-May-2017
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Thank you so much for taking the time to review my Etheree poem. Kind regards ~DD
Comment from closetpoetjester
Haha it's always those bubbles floating to the surface that give you away LOL I just bet those water lillies are a great hiding place for the darting carp.
A delightful and vivid Etheree that started out slow and unassuming and then amassed in a whole lotta bubbles! LOL
Well done
Hugs P
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reply by the author on 13-May-2017
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Haha it's always those bubbles floating to the surface that give you away LOL I just bet those water lillies are a great hiding place for the darting carp.
A delightful and vivid Etheree that started out slow and unassuming and then amassed in a whole lotta bubbles! LOL
Well done
Hugs P
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Comment Written 12-May-2017
reply by the author on 13-May-2017
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Thanks P, I appreciate your review on my etheree poem. I have a fish pond and enjoy watching the fish swim and chase each other. It's very calming. I wonder if they get gas and fart under water too like we do in the bath tub sometimes. It would be like musical bubbles if they did. ~DD
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Hahaha it sure would! LOL
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Syllable count is perfect in this entry for the etheree poetry contest. VEry nicely done as the imagery takes us to the pond as we watch the bubbles.
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Syllable count is perfect in this entry for the etheree poetry contest. VEry nicely done as the imagery takes us to the pond as we watch the bubbles.
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Comment Written 12-May-2017
reply by the author on 12-May-2017
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Thank you Barb. I appreciate your comments on my Etheree poem. ~DD
Comment from MaggieF
Love the shape of your poem. You paint a cosy picture with your words, great imagery and onomatopoeia. I can visualise the fish playing hide and seek. Loved it. MaggieF
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Love the shape of your poem. You paint a cosy picture with your words, great imagery and onomatopoeia. I can visualise the fish playing hide and seek. Loved it. MaggieF
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Comment Written 12-May-2017
reply by the author on 12-May-2017
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Thank you Maggie for your review of my Etheree poem. It wasn't supposed to be released just yet as I had only just typed it up and wasn't ready - hadn't even attached a picture. Not sure what's happening but I haven't got good internet access at the mo. Anyhow, I appreciate you comments. ~DD
