2017 JAPANESE POETRY
Viewing comments for Chapter 26 "Linked Tanka (After the harvest)"A collection of Japanese poetry
24 total reviews
Comment from l.raven
HI Gypsy, WOW!!!...you both did a great job on this...a man who abuses a woman should not be on this earth...or a child...the mother saved the children from years of abuse...and died...very well written sweet girl...and the perfect picture...love ya you...I hope all is well with you...love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 15-May-2017
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HI Gypsy, WOW!!!...you both did a great job on this...a man who abuses a woman should not be on this earth...or a child...the mother saved the children from years of abuse...and died...very well written sweet girl...and the perfect picture...love ya you...I hope all is well with you...love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 14-May-2017
reply by the author on 15-May-2017
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happy mother's day, Linda. I hope you had a happy one. mine was super happy. my daughter spoiled me. Thank you :) my friend, you are very kind. :) luv ya
gypsy
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HAPPY MOTHER"S DAY sweet one...yes mine was great...my son gave me a dozen Red Roses...and I got beautiful cards from the grand kids...and an awesome gift card from my daughter...I am so glad yours was super...and your daughter spoiled you...LOL...you are always so welcome my sweet friend...smiling back at ya...love ya xxoo love
Comment from Mark Schardine
Death arrives and claims his soul
smiles at the soup flask in hand.
Seldom does a killing frighten us more than this one, a most pre-meditated killing. Would you agree with Charles Lawton's line in "Witness for the Prosecution", "She has not murdered him. She has executed him."?
reply by the author on 13-May-2017
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Death arrives and claims his soul
smiles at the soup flask in hand.
Seldom does a killing frighten us more than this one, a most pre-meditated killing. Would you agree with Charles Lawton's line in "Witness for the Prosecution", "She has not murdered him. She has executed him."?
Comment Written 13-May-2017
reply by the author on 13-May-2017
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I would tend to agree. He deserved to die. Thank you for reading, my friend, I appreciate it.
Gypsy
Comment from Ulla
Hola Gitana, I loved this horror story told within the linked tanka. Well he saw it coming.I'm glad they're now all freed from him. A wonderful write. Un abrazo de tu amiga Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 13-May-2017
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Hola Gitana, I loved this horror story told within the linked tanka. Well he saw it coming.I'm glad they're now all freed from him. A wonderful write. Un abrazo de tu amiga Ulla:)))
Comment Written 13-May-2017
reply by the author on 13-May-2017
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Gracias, bonita, I appreciate you reading my poem and it's always good to hear from you. :)
Gypsy
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I'm sorry if I'm distracted, but we're in the cherry season, picking from morning to evening. In two weeks it will be over and I will be back to normal again. Un besito. Ulla:)xx
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
This is a wonderful collaboration and very exciting. Scary too and not much scares me! I would love to keep reading so keep writing and keep me happy much love Meia x
reply by the author on 13-May-2017
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This is a wonderful collaboration and very exciting. Scary too and not much scares me! I would love to keep reading so keep writing and keep me happy much love Meia x
Comment Written 13-May-2017
reply by the author on 13-May-2017
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I appreciate you reading my poem and it's always good to hear from you. :) Dean, Hitcher, and I are going to write a traditional renga.
Gypsy
Comment from bertranclan
I enjoyed reading your collaborative tanka. What a great idea! My favorite line is "After the harvest daylight drips away
Cold creeps on the fallow field..." Superb story.
reply by the author on 12-May-2017
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I enjoyed reading your collaborative tanka. What a great idea! My favorite line is "After the harvest daylight drips away
Cold creeps on the fallow field..." Superb story.
Comment Written 12-May-2017
reply by the author on 12-May-2017
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Thank you very much, my friend. :)
Gypsy
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes you have done well composing this poem it is full of emotion you brought the feelings through well I enjoyed regards Jill
reply by the author on 12-May-2017
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Yes you have done well composing this poem it is full of emotion you brought the feelings through well I enjoyed regards Jill
Comment Written 12-May-2017
reply by the author on 12-May-2017
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Thank you very much, my friend. :)
Gypsy
Comment from Dean Kuch
Poor Pa.
Well in all actuality, it kinda sounds like he had it comin'.
Ya know, cyanide poison smells and tastes like bitter almonds. Having said that, it's probably a good thing that arsenic was used instead or Pa might'a gotten suspicious.
Live by the sword, die by the sword...that what they always say.
When it comes to abusing children and spouses, perhaps it is wise to abstain from doing so if one or more of them are involved with cooking your supper.
Just sayin'...
Great work, you two! (Sorry, I am all outta
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~Dean
reply by the author on 12-May-2017
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Poor Pa.
Well in all actuality, it kinda sounds like he had it comin'.
Ya know, cyanide poison smells and tastes like bitter almonds. Having said that, it's probably a good thing that arsenic was used instead or Pa might'a gotten suspicious.
Live by the sword, die by the sword...that what they always say.
When it comes to abusing children and spouses, perhaps it is wise to abstain from doing so if one or more of them are involved with cooking your supper.
Just sayin'...
Great work, you two! (Sorry, I am all outta
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~Dean
Comment Written 12-May-2017
reply by the author on 12-May-2017
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Thank you, Dean, you are very kind.
Gypsy
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written linked tanka. Every part fits nicely in with each other and the whole scenario unfolds petfectly to reveal the plot and the reason hy the father id poisoned.
reply by the author on 12-May-2017
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A very well-written linked tanka. Every part fits nicely in with each other and the whole scenario unfolds petfectly to reveal the plot and the reason hy the father id poisoned.
Comment Written 12-May-2017
reply by the author on 12-May-2017
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Thank you very much, my friend. :)
Gypsy
Comment from Sis Cat
Gypsy, I love your and Hitcher's renga collaboration. These are so fun because you don't know what the other person is going to write. You two are evenly matched with your creativity and passion for this form. Hitcher's closing couplet is a nice play on your "Don't eat supper!" haiku.
Thank you for sharing.
I have resumed storytelling on stage, so you will see less of me on FanStory. I had a great time last night performing "Teacakes" at an open mic. When the host offered me an opportunity to share a second story after intermission, I quickly went on FanStory to read and learn my "Night Cravings" story by heart, which I then recited word for word before crowds. FanStory is a great repository of my poems and stories that I can perform on stage in a short notice.
Keep up your great work.
reply by the author on 12-May-2017
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Gypsy, I love your and Hitcher's renga collaboration. These are so fun because you don't know what the other person is going to write. You two are evenly matched with your creativity and passion for this form. Hitcher's closing couplet is a nice play on your "Don't eat supper!" haiku.
Thank you for sharing.
I have resumed storytelling on stage, so you will see less of me on FanStory. I had a great time last night performing "Teacakes" at an open mic. When the host offered me an opportunity to share a second story after intermission, I quickly went on FanStory to read and learn my "Night Cravings" story by heart, which I then recited word for word before crowds. FanStory is a great repository of my poems and stories that I can perform on stage in a short notice.
Keep up your great work.
Comment Written 12-May-2017
reply by the author on 12-May-2017
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You must have good memory. It would be hard for me. I will miss you. Good luck. Thank you very much, my friend. :)
Gypsy
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Gypsy, I was shocked today to find my name in the newspaper advertising my upcoming show. This has not happened to me since I was a kid performing a Black History Week program. I am scaling back FanStory posting to dedicate more time to rehearsing and performing. I will drop in from time to time to review, and will likely post new stories and poems that I will transform into performances.
Comment from rspoet
A little Arsenic and Old Lace in a linked tanka,
with excellent imagery in the beginning;
a fine and interesting collaboration
that works smoothly to tell the tale of abuse.
Excellent presentation to accompany your tanka
Well done
RS
reply by the author on 12-May-2017
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A little Arsenic and Old Lace in a linked tanka,
with excellent imagery in the beginning;
a fine and interesting collaboration
that works smoothly to tell the tale of abuse.
Excellent presentation to accompany your tanka
Well done
RS
Comment Written 12-May-2017
reply by the author on 12-May-2017
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Thank you very much, my friend. :)
Gypsy
