Old Versus New
A Duodecliner Contest Entry10 total reviews
Comment from Ogden
Brava, June! Your astute and witty piece overtook my somber one ("The World Cries..."). Both address complicated concerns, neither likely to be satisfactorily resolved anytime soon.
Wishing you continuing FanStory success,
Don
reply by the author on 10-May-2017
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Brava, June! Your astute and witty piece overtook my somber one ("The World Cries..."). Both address complicated concerns, neither likely to be satisfactorily resolved anytime soon.
Wishing you continuing FanStory success,
Don
Comment Written 10-May-2017
reply by the author on 10-May-2017
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Thank you for your encouraging support. I have learned a great desl in the short time I've been a member here from seasoned writers such as yourself. It's been a pleasure and a joy!
Comment from lyenochka
It's a great commentary in this restrictive form. I do agree that even though we've made so many strides in everyday life through technology but we are missing some of the most precious things such as connecting in person.
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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It's a great commentary in this restrictive form. I do agree that even though we've made so many strides in everyday life through technology but we are missing some of the most precious things such as connecting in person.
Comment Written 09-May-2017
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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So true. Guess I'm just old school. Thanks for taking the time to read and review.
Comment from Bill Schott
This duodec-liner, Old versu New, has the required twelve lines with a rhyme included and an opinion of the opinion. Together we see and, for some, mourn the slow slide into illiteracy that technology has made posible.
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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This duodec-liner, Old versu New, has the required twelve lines with a rhyme included and an opinion of the opinion. Together we see and, for some, mourn the slow slide into illiteracy that technology has made posible.
Comment Written 09-May-2017
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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Thank you for your insights
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Thank you!
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
You've written this one well.
My favorite part: 'I miss those days when coffee was ground by hand
and castles were built - not in the cloud - but in the sand'
The artwork is good. The image shown goes well with the poem. The background color is a good choice.
The author's notes are appreciated. Thank you!
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Thanks for sharing your Duodecliner.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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You've written this one well.
My favorite part: 'I miss those days when coffee was ground by hand
and castles were built - not in the cloud - but in the sand'
The artwork is good. The image shown goes well with the poem. The background color is a good choice.
The author's notes are appreciated. Thank you!
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Thanks for sharing your Duodecliner.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
Comment Written 09-May-2017
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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Appreciate the time you took to give an insightful review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A great poem of rememberance and it's the simple things in life that touch our hearts. I'm looking forward to driverless cars though! A super write and a joy to read, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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A great poem of rememberance and it's the simple things in life that touch our hearts. I'm looking forward to driverless cars though! A super write and a joy to read, love Dolly x
Comment Written 09-May-2017
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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Appreciate your stopping by to read and review!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your poem. You did a great job with a difficult style. You expressed your thoughts & feelings well. Some 'old' things are still the best, I agree. Your image is perfect. Good job & best wishes in the contest. Jan
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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I enjoyed your poem. You did a great job with a difficult style. You expressed your thoughts & feelings well. Some 'old' things are still the best, I agree. Your image is perfect. Good job & best wishes in the contest. Jan
Comment Written 09-May-2017
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Elijah Davis
Great job! I have never tried writing that style of poetry but inspired to now. Words and meaning to the poem were so true and spot on. Again great job and keep it up!
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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Great job! I have never tried writing that style of poetry but inspired to now. Words and meaning to the poem were so true and spot on. Again great job and keep it up!
Comment Written 09-May-2017
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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Thank you so much for your encouraging words!
Comment from RodG
I really like the sardonic TONE of this Duodecliner which mocks a "brave new world" even Aldous Huxley didn't imagine. Wonderful examples cited of a world that appears to have taken two steps backwards for each step forward. Some wonderful rhymes chosen.
reply by the author on 04-May-2017
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I really like the sardonic TONE of this Duodecliner which mocks a "brave new world" even Aldous Huxley didn't imagine. Wonderful examples cited of a world that appears to have taken two steps backwards for each step forward. Some wonderful rhymes chosen.
Comment Written 04-May-2017
reply by the author on 04-May-2017
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Thank you so much for your insightful review!
Comment from JDRBAR
There is so much from the past I long for. You say it all perfectly well. I can only wish you the very best of luck in the contest. I really like this.
reply by the author on 04-May-2017
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There is so much from the past I long for. You say it all perfectly well. I can only wish you the very best of luck in the contest. I really like this.
Comment Written 04-May-2017
reply by the author on 04-May-2017
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Thank you so much for your insights!
Comment from Thomas Bowling
The old coffee maker reminds me of my coffee maker. A very good poem and a good contest entry. I think you will do well.
reply by the author on 04-May-2017
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The old coffee maker reminds me of my coffee maker. A very good poem and a good contest entry. I think you will do well.
Comment Written 04-May-2017
reply by the author on 04-May-2017
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Thank you for your positive feedback!
