Free Verse Collection
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35 total reviews
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good image.
-Author notes appreciated.
-A well penned free verse poem
with very good imagery that
creates a flow for the progression of ideas.
-Your "thoughts like lead" leads you through
this massive storm.
-The description of the storm is
so vivid, you put the reader right in it.
-Now you are experiencing a "glorious freshness."
-I like the conclusion with the analogy of the storm and living.
-Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-May-2017
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-Good image.
-Author notes appreciated.
-A well penned free verse poem
with very good imagery that
creates a flow for the progression of ideas.
-Your "thoughts like lead" leads you through
this massive storm.
-The description of the storm is
so vivid, you put the reader right in it.
-Now you are experiencing a "glorious freshness."
-I like the conclusion with the analogy of the storm and living.
-Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 06-May-2017
reply by the author on 06-May-2017
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Thank you, Pam, for your review of this and comments. Much appreciated! Have a good weekend! Tony
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You are welcome, Tony. Have a good day.
Comment from rspoet
Another fine free verse poem with marvelous imagery
of the city and the storm
The meter has a natural feel to it, like thought
Excellent use of the metaphor of the city streets and life
Sometimes, we just need the awakening of a sudden storm
Excellent choice of photograph, too
Well done, my friend
RS
reply by the author on 07-May-2017
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Another fine free verse poem with marvelous imagery
of the city and the storm
The meter has a natural feel to it, like thought
Excellent use of the metaphor of the city streets and life
Sometimes, we just need the awakening of a sudden storm
Excellent choice of photograph, too
Well done, my friend
RS
Comment Written 06-May-2017
reply by the author on 07-May-2017
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Very many thanks, RS. I appreciate your review and comments about the meter. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from lalajovanoski
I love the iambic rhythm in this well constructed piece. It is written so nicely and flows very smooth. Thank you very much for sharing this as I truly enjoyed reading!
reply by the author on 06-May-2017
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I love the iambic rhythm in this well constructed piece. It is written so nicely and flows very smooth. Thank you very much for sharing this as I truly enjoyed reading!
Comment Written 06-May-2017
reply by the author on 06-May-2017
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Thank you, Lalajovanoski, for your review of this and comments. Much appreciated! Have a good weekend! Tony
Comment from Eternal Muse
Tony, it is beautifully done. I am addicted to iambic meter myself, but there is great appeal in free verse and there are moments when we feel that what we want to express, rhyme can't touch. I dabble I to free verse myself from tine to time.
Powerful description of the storm and your feelings being caught in it. Excellent use of language.
reply by the author on 06-May-2017
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Tony, it is beautifully done. I am addicted to iambic meter myself, but there is great appeal in free verse and there are moments when we feel that what we want to express, rhyme can't touch. I dabble I to free verse myself from tine to time.
Powerful description of the storm and your feelings being caught in it. Excellent use of language.
Comment Written 06-May-2017
reply by the author on 06-May-2017
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Thank you, Yelena, for your review of this and kind comments. Much appreciated! Have a good weekend! Tony
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Some rains do feel like they have cleansed the environment. I wonder if they actually do. Once again, I enjoyed reading your well written poem. Your talent shines through.
reply by the author on 06-May-2017
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Some rains do feel like they have cleansed the environment. I wonder if they actually do. Once again, I enjoyed reading your well written poem. Your talent shines through.
Comment Written 06-May-2017
reply by the author on 06-May-2017
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Thank you, Barbara, for your review of this and kind comments. Much appreciated! Have a good weekend! Tony
Comment from robyn corum
Tony,
This was a wonderfully positive and upbeat poem about how a dreary and sad day can become more than that - it can offer a spirit of cleansing and renewal. Very nice! Thanks!
reply by the author on 06-May-2017
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Tony,
This was a wonderfully positive and upbeat poem about how a dreary and sad day can become more than that - it can offer a spirit of cleansing and renewal. Very nice! Thanks!
Comment Written 06-May-2017
reply by the author on 06-May-2017
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Thank you, Robyn, for your review of this and kind comments. Much appreciated! Have a good weekend! Tony
Comment from alf collier
Really like where you went with this!!! LOL, storms are all about cleansing and you have portrayed with seeming effortlessness!!! Great read...that deserves a higher award than I have at hand!!
reply by the author on 06-May-2017
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Really like where you went with this!!! LOL, storms are all about cleansing and you have portrayed with seeming effortlessness!!! Great read...that deserves a higher award than I have at hand!!
Comment Written 06-May-2017
reply by the author on 06-May-2017
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Thank you, Alf, for your review of this and kind comments. Much appreciated! Have a good weekend! Tony
Comment from JJInfinity805
The story was well told and I enjoyed the sudden buildup that lead to the downpour. I also thought the message at the end was well placed. Overall an excellent poem.
reply by the author on 05-May-2017
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The story was well told and I enjoyed the sudden buildup that lead to the downpour. I also thought the message at the end was well placed. Overall an excellent poem.
Comment Written 05-May-2017
reply by the author on 05-May-2017
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I very much appreciate your review, JJ. Many thanks. Tony
Comment from dragonpoet
This well done free verse tells of the power of storms and how the rain cleans and freshens all. Storms are always a good metaphor for the problems of life and cleansing yourself of them.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 05-May-2017
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This well done free verse tells of the power of storms and how the rain cleans and freshens all. Storms are always a good metaphor for the problems of life and cleansing yourself of them.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 05-May-2017
reply by the author on 05-May-2017
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I very much appreciate your review, Joan. Many thanks. Tony
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My pleasure.
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Comment from Asem.inspirations
Wow! I just love the way you write. You took me into your mood at first and I felt your reaction to the sudden change, the strength of the wind and rain, the scurry in the storm and then the change when it was all over.
Your choice of words, although free verse was still so beautifully poetic.
"but in the glorious freshness,
steam on stone,
as the glistening sun came out again,
defiantly adorning streets in evanescent gold.
It takes, at times,
a sudden storm to wash away the grime
from city streets - and living."
Sometimes it does take the storms to bring a change for the better...Excellent thoughts, excellent poem.
reply by the author on 05-May-2017
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Wow! I just love the way you write. You took me into your mood at first and I felt your reaction to the sudden change, the strength of the wind and rain, the scurry in the storm and then the change when it was all over.
Your choice of words, although free verse was still so beautifully poetic.
"but in the glorious freshness,
steam on stone,
as the glistening sun came out again,
defiantly adorning streets in evanescent gold.
It takes, at times,
a sudden storm to wash away the grime
from city streets - and living."
Sometimes it does take the storms to bring a change for the better...Excellent thoughts, excellent poem.
Comment Written 05-May-2017
reply by the author on 05-May-2017
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Very many thanks for your review and your comments about the tempo and mood. Much appreciated.Tony