If I Had Only Listened
Only One Was Talking21 total reviews
Comment from Heather Knight
This is a lovely poem, but very sad too. I think with the right music it'd make a great song.
Good luck in the contest.
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This is a lovely poem, but very sad too. I think with the right music it'd make a great song.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-May-2017
Comment from Brett Matthew West
A relationship can not survive when one person walks the fence and the other one is doing all the committing.
Lyrics cover this theme well.
Should make an interesting entry into this contest.
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A relationship can not survive when one person walks the fence and the other one is doing all the committing.
Lyrics cover this theme well.
Should make an interesting entry into this contest.
Comment Written 02-May-2017
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
I can "hear" this song and I like it. The lyrics have meaning and are also well chosen. Sounds like a country song... maybe one for Willie Nelson? Nice picture. MKFlood does so many... unique style. :)
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I can "hear" this song and I like it. The lyrics have meaning and are also well chosen. Sounds like a country song... maybe one for Willie Nelson? Nice picture. MKFlood does so many... unique style. :)
Comment Written 02-May-2017
Comment from LaRosa
'Suddenly it came to me...I was doin' all the talkin' while you just walked the fence.'
'If I had only listened...'
The emotions, the loss, are so moving. It's so painful to realize that the object of ones affection (sounds like an old song) has moved away and didn't have the courage to speak the truth.
How many of us haven't lived this moment in time?
Very well structured, so perfectly worded. Love your poem.
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'Suddenly it came to me...I was doin' all the talkin' while you just walked the fence.'
'If I had only listened...'
The emotions, the loss, are so moving. It's so painful to realize that the object of ones affection (sounds like an old song) has moved away and didn't have the courage to speak the truth.
How many of us haven't lived this moment in time?
Very well structured, so perfectly worded. Love your poem.
Comment Written 02-May-2017
Comment from Oatmeal
The theme was nice. It was a pleasure to read. Your flow was very good. The arrangement is understandable and effective. Your poem was comprehensible and very nicely written. Good flow. Informative and enlightening.
Everything was clean.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
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The theme was nice. It was a pleasure to read. Your flow was very good. The arrangement is understandable and effective. Your poem was comprehensible and very nicely written. Good flow. Informative and enlightening.
Everything was clean.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 02-May-2017
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
Love the title, 'If I Had Only Listened'.
These lyrics make a great song.
Nice artwork: The image shown goes well with this writing.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Thanks for sharing your lyrics.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-
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Love the title, 'If I Had Only Listened'.
These lyrics make a great song.
Nice artwork: The image shown goes well with this writing.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Thanks for sharing your lyrics.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-
Comment Written 01-May-2017
Comment from bertranclan
Good structure and perfect rhyme scheme. These are certainly singable lyrics. I, too, hear songs in my head and have to record me singing the music on a voice recorder because I usually can't play it on the piano very well. I love reading lyrics and I enjoyed yours.
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Good structure and perfect rhyme scheme. These are certainly singable lyrics. I, too, hear songs in my head and have to record me singing the music on a voice recorder because I usually can't play it on the piano very well. I love reading lyrics and I enjoyed yours.
Comment Written 01-May-2017
Comment from Hitcher
I enjoyed your lyrical offering friend, I am sure there will be a great many among us who will be able to relate to the well crafted words of this song and they would have felt the pain of that final understanding... Nice! Good luck!
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I enjoyed your lyrical offering friend, I am sure there will be a great many among us who will be able to relate to the well crafted words of this song and they would have felt the pain of that final understanding... Nice! Good luck!
Comment Written 01-May-2017
Comment from rspoet
This is a fine song lyric for the contest
it would be interesting to hear it performed
It is a good idea to repeat lines in a song
especially strong ones like you did:
"I was doin' all the talkin'
While you just walked the fence"
Very nicely done
Best wishes in the contest
RS
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This is a fine song lyric for the contest
it would be interesting to hear it performed
It is a good idea to repeat lines in a song
especially strong ones like you did:
"I was doin' all the talkin'
While you just walked the fence"
Very nicely done
Best wishes in the contest
RS
Comment Written 01-May-2017
Comment from Mustang Patty
Your lyrics reflect the way things often go. One person convinces themselves that they are in a relationship with another person - when in fact, they are all by themselves - talking to space. With each stanza, the reader can see the truth, but it isn't until the end, that the narrator sees,
~patty~
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Your lyrics reflect the way things often go. One person convinces themselves that they are in a relationship with another person - when in fact, they are all by themselves - talking to space. With each stanza, the reader can see the truth, but it isn't until the end, that the narrator sees,
~patty~
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 01-May-2017
