Act of Endurance
Viewing comments for Chapter 56 "The Path"Dawn of Chaos
33 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a good job describing your path from work to retirement. Your lines flow smoothly and are well thought out. Any work requires adjustments to time, amount of energy, refocusing, and finding a way over obstacles in order to be productive and happy. Your words create great imagery.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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You did a good job describing your path from work to retirement. Your lines flow smoothly and are well thought out. Any work requires adjustments to time, amount of energy, refocusing, and finding a way over obstacles in order to be productive and happy. Your words create great imagery.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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Thanking you for your kind reviews, appreciating your generous rate as well: plus welcomed comments.
Comment from Dilettante junior
A very realistic poem on actual behind the scene struggles. I really like 'Travels predestined to a dream site may route, choosing paved lanes this course way directs to scheme' verse. Beautiful words. Great style. Bravo!
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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A very realistic poem on actual behind the scene struggles. I really like 'Travels predestined to a dream site may route, choosing paved lanes this course way directs to scheme' verse. Beautiful words. Great style. Bravo!
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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I'm glad certain aspects in this write were appealing to your interests, thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from Bill Schott
I am just going to have to take your money and leave the analysis up to others. I read some of the reviews from your initial posting and found that those who actually read it were at a loss. Those who said it was great, I'm afraid, likely never read it.
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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I am just going to have to take your money and leave the analysis up to others. I read some of the reviews from your initial posting and found that those who actually read it were at a loss. Those who said it was great, I'm afraid, likely never read it.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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I do a lot of revisions even upon this one you reviewed, appreciating your touching comment: and generous rate.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
aa, that happy times are coming with smart investments - Worker his finances in banks like a child again desiring to play, found this path shear worries finding joy mild, falling tears obtained I'm wild.
Plan removal of faults increasing funds come short, making no error abort costs losing gain I end work, welcoming job retirement in resort. - Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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aa, that happy times are coming with smart investments - Worker his finances in banks like a child again desiring to play, found this path shear worries finding joy mild, falling tears obtained I'm wild.
Plan removal of faults increasing funds come short, making no error abort costs losing gain I end work, welcoming job retirement in resort. - Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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Thank you for your generous rate, appreciating your warm thoughts. Best to you, too.
Comment from Enoima Okon
"My dream came short, obtaining a plan value, replacing harsh dent to abort" TPAC this lines are very deep. It entails resistance and strong will. It's my take home words, thanks for sharing this great piece.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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"My dream came short, obtaining a plan value, replacing harsh dent to abort" TPAC this lines are very deep. It entails resistance and strong will. It's my take home words, thanks for sharing this great piece.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Glad aspects in this read were helpful, inspiring your interests with potential new refreshing hopes. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching sentiments prevailing this read
Comment from samandlancelot
TPac,
You had a dream and you went after it, but it fell short. Instead of bringing you to despair, you saw it as a rest. I like the child in net holdings. Is that the reason you needed to abort your plan? It's a good reason.
There are a lot of places to pause in your poem, but you don't lead the reader to make those pauses with punctuation. I usually want to be led, but I enjoyed finding my way through necessary pauses independently.
I enjoyed your poem.
Patricia
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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TPac,
You had a dream and you went after it, but it fell short. Instead of bringing you to despair, you saw it as a rest. I like the child in net holdings. Is that the reason you needed to abort your plan? It's a good reason.
There are a lot of places to pause in your poem, but you don't lead the reader to make those pauses with punctuation. I usually want to be led, but I enjoyed finding my way through necessary pauses independently.
I enjoyed your poem.
Patricia
Comment Written 27-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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I have my issues prevailing all my writes, learning proper conveyance through trial and error unfortunately. Glad certain factors captured your interests dispute those flaws. Thanking you for your generous rate and important next step in my advancement.
Comment from Jeffrey Ford
I think that you wrote a great and amazing poem about self improvement. It is very well written. "I like where you wrote Job eventually a finish factual I beside, reside final fate finances ends to close the daily stride, end friendship aims to fulfill this planned goal." This is so inspirational and true. Great work!
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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I think that you wrote a great and amazing poem about self improvement. It is very well written. "I like where you wrote Job eventually a finish factual I beside, reside final fate finances ends to close the daily stride, end friendship aims to fulfill this planned goal." This is so inspirational and true. Great work!
Comment Written 26-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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I'm glad a feature in this particular write held you captured, aligning separate minds in an emerged thinking, thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed views.
Comment from SLMorrical
I like this and the way it flowed. It was easy to follow, and I can see why it was recognized. The symbolism in this is amazing. My interpretation is that someone retired and are looking back and measuring if goals where meet and making sure they have enough resources to the end of their life. If that is not what you had in mind, well we all read things differently. This very well done. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2018
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I like this and the way it flowed. It was easy to follow, and I can see why it was recognized. The symbolism in this is amazing. My interpretation is that someone retired and are looking back and measuring if goals where meet and making sure they have enough resources to the end of their life. If that is not what you had in mind, well we all read things differently. This very well done. Keep writing.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2018
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You are perfectly correct in your defining of this write. Not certain about the high rate you gave it but pleased aspects contained was appealing. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching remarks.
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Comment from Earl Corp
Your presentation with the graphics looked nice. Let me clarify, I'm not a poetry guy and am probably the last person you'd want reviewing your work. That being said, the poem didn't speak to me as some do. However, it is plain to see you were passionate about this and it showed in your writing.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2018
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Your presentation with the graphics looked nice. Let me clarify, I'm not a poetry guy and am probably the last person you'd want reviewing your work. That being said, the poem didn't speak to me as some do. However, it is plain to see you were passionate about this and it showed in your writing.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2018
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Apparently I'm not poetic in my written ecpressions but as stated did love the values presented in this write. Thanking you for your generous rate and warm sentiments about this effort.
Comment from Lance Polin
All right: there is something really impressive about the complexity of this poem. It is constantly shifting directions and is somewhat dizzying in the breaking down of coherent language you have applied. If there is any problem as I see it is that that same complicated style can give way to a pause, a hesitation in the reader that causes them to lose the rhythm and maybe start all over again. I happen to like this piece a lot. I give four stars not for quality, but because this one issue consumes a stanza in the middle. Obviously you can adjust this easily. Just look it over a bit more again.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2018
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All right: there is something really impressive about the complexity of this poem. It is constantly shifting directions and is somewhat dizzying in the breaking down of coherent language you have applied. If there is any problem as I see it is that that same complicated style can give way to a pause, a hesitation in the reader that causes them to lose the rhythm and maybe start all over again. I happen to like this piece a lot. I give four stars not for quality, but because this one issue consumes a stanza in the middle. Obviously you can adjust this easily. Just look it over a bit more again.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2018
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I do have problems in my expressed writes which throw my reader. Its reviews such as yours which help strengthen my efforts. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed response.
