Echoes of Artistry
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "From a Child's Tears"NaPoWriMo 2017
15 total reviews
Comment from Pantygynt
I was brought up on Little Bridget and her trip to fairy land that carries similarities with the Thomas the Rymer folk tale. As for your poem, I felt that the thing about it that really lifted it was the wealth of internal and cross rhyme. I presume that was something beyond the requirements of the form.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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I was brought up on Little Bridget and her trip to fairy land that carries similarities with the Thomas the Rymer folk tale. As for your poem, I felt that the thing about it that really lifted it was the wealth of internal and cross rhyme. I presume that was something beyond the requirements of the form.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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Hi Pantygynt:
I am delighted that you know of Little Bridget. I've not heard her story, other than that line in the one poem being a reference. You are correct, the internal and cross rhymes were not a requirement, but the lines just seemed to be begging for that as I was writing. Thank you for the wonderful review.
Kim
Comment from BeasPeas
I can see that you do a lot of research for your work, Kim. It pays off in beautifully written poems. I like this one that has a bit of nostalgia in the image, as in the old time fairy tale kid's books. Marilyn
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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I can see that you do a lot of research for your work, Kim. It pays off in beautifully written poems. I like this one that has a bit of nostalgia in the image, as in the old time fairy tale kid's books. Marilyn
Comment Written 17-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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Hi Marilyn:
I've enjoyed the reading I've done for this book of poems. I equally enjoy sharing what I've read in my author's notes. It helps with the inspiration during the month, too. I never know what whim I'm going to follow until I get there. Thanks for the wonderful comments.
Kim
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So true, Kim. Love your comment--never know where it's going until I get there. Perfect description.
Comment from honeytree
The art work is very
precious for these words
a small child would love
to fly but can't but a small
child can see a butterfly flying
in the sky and the birds.
Annie
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2017
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The art work is very
precious for these words
a small child would love
to fly but can't but a small
child can see a butterfly flying
in the sky and the birds.
Annie
Comment Written 16-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2017
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Hi Annie,
I'm happy that you enjoyed my fanciful poem about a fairy being born. I truly appreciate this exceptional rating and review.
Kim
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Kim,
I enjoyed your poem for your book project. First to the notes--they are great, full of great info, & add a lot of general info to the inspiration of your poem without EXPLAINING your poem. Readers can figure that for themselves. Good job.
Now to the poem--what an awesome image.
Whene'er you spy a tear in little child's eye,
allay their fears with this lullaby on tears.[good cross rhyme fears/tears]
If they cry, and then they see a butterfly cry/butterfly--more cross rhymes
as Death has come, then their loved one reappears
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for their kiss holds magic bliss Death won't defy;kiss/bliss rhymes & alliteration of 'd'
thus they should kiss the butterfly who appears,
then dry their tears, with no need to be forlorn; 'n' alliteration
for that's the instant, by love, a fairy's born. 'f' alliteration
I enjoyed detailing this. It helps me see what a great writer can/does write. Thanks for sharing a wonderful, sweet poem. Jan
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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Kim,
I enjoyed your poem for your book project. First to the notes--they are great, full of great info, & add a lot of general info to the inspiration of your poem without EXPLAINING your poem. Readers can figure that for themselves. Good job.
Now to the poem--what an awesome image.
Whene'er you spy a tear in little child's eye,
allay their fears with this lullaby on tears.[good cross rhyme fears/tears]
If they cry, and then they see a butterfly cry/butterfly--more cross rhymes
as Death has come, then their loved one reappears
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for their kiss holds magic bliss Death won't defy;kiss/bliss rhymes & alliteration of 'd'
thus they should kiss the butterfly who appears,
then dry their tears, with no need to be forlorn; 'n' alliteration
for that's the instant, by love, a fairy's born. 'f' alliteration
I enjoyed detailing this. It helps me see what a great writer can/does write. Thanks for sharing a wonderful, sweet poem. Jan
Comment Written 15-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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Hi Jan!
Thank you for this amazing review! I love how you broke it all down and analyzed each line. Please tell me I gave you a nomination this month, because I'm all out now :( (I think I did, but will put this review in my memory, just in case I haven't) I always appreciate your comments on my writing. This style of poem didn't ask for the cross rhymes, but to me, the eleven syllable lines really made that something I wanted to include. It is a fun style to write. Jan, I truly appreciate your friendship and the time to you take to read and review my work.
Happy Easter!
Kim
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Kim, you did nominate me. Jan
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I thought so :) I've just been doing so much reviewing, I wanted to be sure.
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
Nicely done and a fun new form to read and learn about. I am always fond of interior rhyme and yours were delightful. Such an old fashioned feeling to it made it sweet and nostalgic at the same time. - Wendy
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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Nicely done and a fun new form to read and learn about. I am always fond of interior rhyme and yours were delightful. Such an old fashioned feeling to it made it sweet and nostalgic at the same time. - Wendy
Comment Written 15-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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Hi Wendy,
That old fashioned feeling is exactly what I intended. I enjoyed this style. Thank you for all the lovely comments and the time you took to read and review.
Kim
Comment from CD Richards
This post made me think of the scene at the end of Patch Adams, after his fiance is killed by a psychotic patient. You probably recall it, if not, it's on Youtube. You can just type in "Patch Adams butterfly".
Very nice work, Kim. The 1st line has 12 syllables, but the rest are spot on. Thanks for sharing.
Craig
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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This post made me think of the scene at the end of Patch Adams, after his fiance is killed by a psychotic patient. You probably recall it, if not, it's on Youtube. You can just type in "Patch Adams butterfly".
Very nice work, Kim. The 1st line has 12 syllables, but the rest are spot on. Thanks for sharing.
Craig
Comment Written 15-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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Hi Craig,
Thanks for taking the time to read and review. No, the first line has 11 syllables. I even verified it with www.howmanysyllables.com. Where you thinking child is 2 syllables?
I appreciate the lovely comments :) I like that Patch Adams movie.
Kim
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Hi Kim,
No, I know child is only one. Maybe it either originally said "in a little child's eye", or else I mistakenly read it that way about 4 times expecting that's what it would say :)
Comment from Rlegel99
Poem about a piece of artwork with a poem as inspiration. This poem flows well. Enjoyed reading about your inspiration for the piece. As always, thanks for sharing this piece of poetry.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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Poem about a piece of artwork with a poem as inspiration. This poem flows well. Enjoyed reading about your inspiration for the piece. As always, thanks for sharing this piece of poetry.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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Hi Rlegel:
Thanks for taking the time to read and review. I appreciate your comments.
Kim
Comment from lyenochka
Kim, I love how you always introduce me to new forms and new information with each post. Thank you. The picture is delightful and although I'm not sure about the kiss and the tears and butterfly and fairy's birth, it's a well done poem.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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Kim, I love how you always introduce me to new forms and new information with each post. Thank you. The picture is delightful and although I'm not sure about the kiss and the tears and butterfly and fairy's birth, it's a well done poem.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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Hi lyenochka:
Pure fiction, ie tears, kiss, butterflies, and fairies... but perhaps enough to dry a child's tears and make them smile. :) Thank you for your wonderful comments. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review.
Kim
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Hi Kim. This is a beautiful, sweet and tender poem! Now I know how fairies are born. :) This is the first time that I have seen this particular form. You did a great job with your Octava Real poem. "by love" the addition of these two words speaks volumes. Luv it!
Connie
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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Hi Kim. This is a beautiful, sweet and tender poem! Now I know how fairies are born. :) This is the first time that I have seen this particular form. You did a great job with your Octava Real poem. "by love" the addition of these two words speaks volumes. Luv it!
Connie
Comment Written 15-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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Hi Connie!
I decided I really like this Octava Real style. Once I got past trying to make all of the lines 10 syllables instead of the 11 intended, it went well. I'm happy that you enjoyed my fairy tale in this poem. The artwork was an inspiring find! Thank you for the wonderful comments.
Kim
Comment from Teri7
This is the first time I have ever read and reviewed this type of poetry. You used very good descriptive wording and great imagery from the artwork and your words. Blessings and Happy Easter! Teri
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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This is the first time I have ever read and reviewed this type of poetry. You used very good descriptive wording and great imagery from the artwork and your words. Blessings and Happy Easter! Teri
Comment Written 15-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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Hi Teri,
Thanks for taking the time to read and review. It was the first I had ever come across this style, so I had to try it, I like it! I appreciate all of your kind comments.
Happy Easter!
Kim
