A little brown case
dribble flash fiction9 total reviews
Comment from Unspoken94
Wouldn't your last sentence end in a question mark?
Just checking.
This is an excellent piece of "drabble." I've been
reading several and what I love about yours is the
feeling of nostalgia. We can all relate to it. -Bill
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2017
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Wouldn't your last sentence end in a question mark?
Just checking.
This is an excellent piece of "drabble." I've been
reading several and what I love about yours is the
feeling of nostalgia. We can all relate to it. -Bill
Comment Written 12-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2017
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Thanks for your encouraging review. you are right about the question mark, Mary
Comment from Joan E.
I have only read a few Drabble Flash Fiction pieces and I like the way you communicated nostalgia in yours. Your appeal to our sense of smell is very effective. Thank you for added the vintage photograph as well. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2017
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I have only read a few Drabble Flash Fiction pieces and I like the way you communicated nostalgia in yours. Your appeal to our sense of smell is very effective. Thank you for added the vintage photograph as well. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 11-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2017
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Thanks Joan I am glad you enjoyed my Drabble piece, I enjoyed your comments. Mary
Comment from Teri7
This is a very good short story you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery with the art work. It is so neat to hear or smell something and it brings back old memories. Great job. Teri
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
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This is a very good short story you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery with the art work. It is so neat to hear or smell something and it brings back old memories. Great job. Teri
Comment Written 10-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
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Thanks Teri for your great review It is much appreciated, Mary
Comment from Thomas Bowling
A very good entry. You should do well with this. It's hard to win a contest, but not at the least impossible. There are a lot of talented writers. It's fun to beat them.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
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A very good entry. You should do well with this. It's hard to win a contest, but not at the least impossible. There are a lot of talented writers. It's fun to beat them.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
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Thanks Tom,, for your encouraging review, I changed the photo, Mary
Comment from patcelaw
There are certain smells from our childhood which we fondly remember. I can remember the wonderful smell of freshly baked bread and to this day just the thought of that smell can make my water. patricia
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
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There are certain smells from our childhood which we fondly remember. I can remember the wonderful smell of freshly baked bread and to this day just the thought of that smell can make my water. patricia
Comment Written 10-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
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Thanks Patricia for your review. Mary
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I remember those little brown cases, I had one not sure if it was brand new though. Nice memories of days gone by with your drabble flash fiction Mary.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
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I remember those little brown cases, I had one not sure if it was brand new though. Nice memories of days gone by with your drabble flash fiction Mary.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 10-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
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Thanks Valda for your excellent review and comments. Mary
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Getting the right school bag is important for young girls, even today. Backpacks must be the right color, the right brand, etc., for the girl to fit in with others, even in high school. Your mother was smart to realize how important it was for you to have a new one of your own. :)
I think you could have found a much nicer picture in Google images.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
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Getting the right school bag is important for young girls, even today. Backpacks must be the right color, the right brand, etc., for the girl to fit in with others, even in high school. Your mother was smart to realize how important it was for you to have a new one of your own. :)
I think you could have found a much nicer picture in Google images.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
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hI phyllis I agree with you but it is very difficult to find jpg, they all appear to be jpej and is not accepted in fanstory, I may change it Thanks so much for your honest review.
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I use jpeg for fanstory. You can also change the letters to jpg if it doesn't work, since it's the same file type.
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Here is a pic from google images that might work. THere are many others, especially if you look in cartoons.
REmember, JPEG is JPG, and both work for me on FS. If JPEG doesn't, just remove the E from its title.
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
'A Little Brown Case'- the title is interesting.
This is a good read you've written.
It grabs the reader's attention.
Good choice of artwork: Lovely image.- It blends in well with the story.
Thanks for sharing this.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
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'A Little Brown Case'- the title is interesting.
This is a good read you've written.
It grabs the reader's attention.
Good choice of artwork: Lovely image.- It blends in well with the story.
Thanks for sharing this.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-
Comment Written 10-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
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Thanks Nicole for your excellent review I actually changed the artwork. Mary
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written dribble flash fiction. I remember those little suitcases well and we played school every school holiday, the oldest was the teacher and the younger ones where the pupils. Lol.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
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A very well-written dribble flash fiction. I remember those little suitcases well and we played school every school holiday, the oldest was the teacher and the younger ones where the pupils. Lol.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
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Thanks Sandra for your review. Mary
