Thoughts at the Iwo Jima Memorial
I thought... What was it like for the Marines at Iwo Jima?3 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
Excellent choice--sonnet for this landmark. Well written and rhymed. This is one of the most memorable locations and events in history, I think. I can imagine how frightened the men but have been, but they performed their duty admirably.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Excellent choice--sonnet for this landmark. Well written and rhymed. This is one of the most memorable locations and events in history, I think. I can imagine how frightened the men but have been, but they performed their duty admirably.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Thanks for the read. I share your thoughts.
Comment from Natalie Walker
This is an excellent poem for this prompt. It captures the intensity of this historical event and creates a powerful image. The form is an interesting choice for this theme, but it works. There are no flaws in the rhyme scheme.
The only typo I noticed was in the description, I think "a" should be at.
Other than that, I have no suggestions. Nice work.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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This is an excellent poem for this prompt. It captures the intensity of this historical event and creates a powerful image. The form is an interesting choice for this theme, but it works. There are no flaws in the rhyme scheme.
The only typo I noticed was in the description, I think "a" should be at.
Other than that, I have no suggestions. Nice work.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Thanks for the read and the catch.
Comment from RodG
This is a marvelous tribute to all the Americans who fought at Iwo Jima, and the six flag raisers specifically. I especially liked these lines:
"They knew with every step they hovered in death's shadow."
Your closing couplet.
I do get a big confused in stanza 4. Who marched forward, the six flag raisers or the Americans storming the beaches?
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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This is a marvelous tribute to all the Americans who fought at Iwo Jima, and the six flag raisers specifically. I especially liked these lines:
"They knew with every step they hovered in death's shadow."
Your closing couplet.
I do get a big confused in stanza 4. Who marched forward, the six flag raisers or the Americans storming the beaches?
Comment Written 08-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2017
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Thanks for the read I will look over and try to clarify.
