The Life of a Soldier
soldiers lives after leaving the military19 total reviews
Comment from ceramic
Little of a creative nature in this poem but it describes very well the life of a soldier and particularly the often difficult time after returning home.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2017
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Little of a creative nature in this poem but it describes very well the life of a soldier and particularly the often difficult time after returning home.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2017
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Thanks so much for your review. I live with, care for and cry with a Vietnam and Gulf war veteran who is total disabled. I had to fight for years to get him the help and care he needed. Everyday is a challenge, but my heart goes out to the many who did not have that someone to fight for them on their behalf. They deserve so much more for. Blessings my friend....Portia
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with the prompt. I agree the US gov't should be ashamed at how they treat all Vets who keep us free. Your poem expresses that to me. Good job on the rhymes & smooth flow of lines.
Thank you for sharing & caring. Best wishes in the contest. Jan
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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You did a great job with the prompt. I agree the US gov't should be ashamed at how they treat all Vets who keep us free. Your poem expresses that to me. Good job on the rhymes & smooth flow of lines.
Thank you for sharing & caring. Best wishes in the contest. Jan
Comment Written 30-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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Thank you for you very kind review.....
Comment from dovemarie
I felt very sad on reading your poem. My son was in the military, the last I heard several years ago. I do not know where he is, and I do not get to see him, but I hope he won't have to go through what was depicted in your writing. The rhyme was good, also the style of writing. Dove
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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I felt very sad on reading your poem. My son was in the military, the last I heard several years ago. I do not know where he is, and I do not get to see him, but I hope he won't have to go through what was depicted in your writing. The rhyme was good, also the style of writing. Dove
Comment Written 30-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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Dove,
I am so sorry to hear that you do not know where your son might be. There is a passion in my heart for these brave souls. I will lift your son up in prayer and pray is safe. I am sorry this poem made you sad, I pray God grant you peace and to know the whereabouts of you son.......Blessings..............
Comment from Cindy Warren
Yes, the soldiers can come home in quite a mess, both physically and mentally. The ones I've had experience with were WW2 vets. Many of their stories were pretty hairy. They didn't know about PTSD. It was called shell-shock back then. They all deserve much better are than what they get.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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Yes, the soldiers can come home in quite a mess, both physically and mentally. The ones I've had experience with were WW2 vets. Many of their stories were pretty hairy. They didn't know about PTSD. It was called shell-shock back then. They all deserve much better are than what they get.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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Cindy,
You are right our vets deserve much better than what they get. Thanks so much for your review........
Comment from Mustang Patty
Thank you for this moving tribute to our veterans. Too many return home to be disenfranchised by the very country they fought to protect. The writing flows well, though some of the rhymes are a bit off. For example, zero and heroes, threat and vets.
A nit: 'Being a homeless vets (vet),'
~patty~
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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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Thank you for this moving tribute to our veterans. Too many return home to be disenfranchised by the very country they fought to protect. The writing flows well, though some of the rhymes are a bit off. For example, zero and heroes, threat and vets.
A nit: 'Being a homeless vets (vet),'
~patty~
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Comment Written 30-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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Patty,
Thanks so much for your review....
Comment from oliver818
It's true, you raise a good point here. Your message is a good one and is clear in this poem. People who go through the hell of war need to be looked after. Thanks for sharing and have a great day
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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It's true, you raise a good point here. Your message is a good one and is clear in this poem. People who go through the hell of war need to be looked after. Thanks for sharing and have a great day
Comment Written 30-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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Oliver,
Thanks so much for your review.....
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I so agree! They fight for us and suffer for us and lay down their lives for us, there is no other job with such an honour and no other job with such a high price to pay when things go wrong, I love your beautiful words and it is a great tribute to all soldiers around the world, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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I so agree! They fight for us and suffer for us and lay down their lives for us, there is no other job with such an honour and no other job with such a high price to pay when things go wrong, I love your beautiful words and it is a great tribute to all soldiers around the world, love Dolly x
Comment Written 30-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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Dolly,
Thanks so much for your review and very kind comments. Blessings......
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Poet advices nation should care for the vets and expresses a generalized view about the heroic roles and isolated or distressed life after their military services.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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Poet advices nation should care for the vets and expresses a generalized view about the heroic roles and isolated or distressed life after their military services.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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Thanks so much for your review......
Comment from Sis Cat
A strong poem that pays tribute to our soldiers not just for what they do on the battlefield for us, but for what we must do for them when they return:
"Being a homeless vets, is ~ground zero~
A fate undeserving for brave heroes"
Indeed. You end your powerful poem with these words:
"Being a homeless vets, is ~ground zero~
A fate undeserving for brave heroes."
Thank you for sharing and even more for caring. I wish you success in the contest.
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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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A strong poem that pays tribute to our soldiers not just for what they do on the battlefield for us, but for what we must do for them when they return:
"Being a homeless vets, is ~ground zero~
A fate undeserving for brave heroes"
Indeed. You end your powerful poem with these words:
"Being a homeless vets, is ~ground zero~
A fate undeserving for brave heroes."
Thank you for sharing and even more for caring. I wish you success in the contest.
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Comment Written 29-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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Sis Cat,
Thanks so much for your review, very kind comments and best wishes. Blessings........
