You Don't Know Me
Trying to make them understand37 total reviews
Comment from Kerry Foley
That was Quite cute, I loved it. Poor little girl, It breaks my heart to see young ones feel left out in any way, for something not their fault. It rhymed beautifully.
Good Luck. ~Kerry~
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That was Quite cute, I loved it. Poor little girl, It breaks my heart to see young ones feel left out in any way, for something not their fault. It rhymed beautifully.
Good Luck. ~Kerry~
Comment Written 30-Mar-2017
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
This is well written it shows that some children are picked on because of what they look like but they don't let it get them down all they need is a chance in life I enjoyed good luck regards Jill
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This is well written it shows that some children are picked on because of what they look like but they don't let it get them down all they need is a chance in life I enjoyed good luck regards Jill
Comment Written 30-Mar-2017
Comment from Flossie1
Very poignant. I find many children and young adults are, by nature, selfish and short sighted. As was I and now I watch my daughter make assumptions and react without thought and I have to stop and understand her small world and position of privilege. Then do my best to educate her.
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Very poignant. I find many children and young adults are, by nature, selfish and short sighted. As was I and now I watch my daughter make assumptions and react without thought and I have to stop and understand her small world and position of privilege. Then do my best to educate her.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2017
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a poem which teaches several lessons. That bullying is bad and that even the poor can be seen as rich if they have a happy home. The speaker is a strong person who sees that giving of oneself is important even if you don't have a lot to begin with.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing.
dragonpoet
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This is a poem which teaches several lessons. That bullying is bad and that even the poor can be seen as rich if they have a happy home. The speaker is a strong person who sees that giving of oneself is important even if you don't have a lot to begin with.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 30-Mar-2017
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I love the way you've told this story of this child, though they don't have much money in other ways she's a winner. Nicely told and a good moral to this story too, good luck in the contest,
cheers
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I love the way you've told this story of this child, though they don't have much money in other ways she's a winner. Nicely told and a good moral to this story too, good luck in the contest,
cheers
Comment Written 30-Mar-2017
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello author, A poem for all times. Sadly, some things in this world never change, and child hunger is one of them. I especially liked:
"Just walk a mile in my shoes...
I'm not different from you!
You just got lucky; caught some breaks,
And now here's what I'll do.
(Amen.)
Also:
And trust me, once you see my truth,
You'll see me as a winner."
(Hopefully. In today's generation, some think/feel that its "cool" to be mean.)
Wonderful artwork choice. Silky rhyming. A pleasure to read. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
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Hello author, A poem for all times. Sadly, some things in this world never change, and child hunger is one of them. I especially liked:
"Just walk a mile in my shoes...
I'm not different from you!
You just got lucky; caught some breaks,
And now here's what I'll do.
(Amen.)
Also:
And trust me, once you see my truth,
You'll see me as a winner."
(Hopefully. In today's generation, some think/feel that its "cool" to be mean.)
Wonderful artwork choice. Silky rhyming. A pleasure to read. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 30-Mar-2017
Comment from Thal1959
Reads very smoothly, and about a subject easy to understand. Of course, there may be a Freudian slip - "You guys come home with me sometime. We'll share what all we do!" Oh, what some girls will do to get the boys in the house! lol.
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Reads very smoothly, and about a subject easy to understand. Of course, there may be a Freudian slip - "You guys come home with me sometime. We'll share what all we do!" Oh, what some girls will do to get the boys in the house! lol.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2017
Comment from c_lucas
Being steep in poverty does not make one poor if they still have the heart to try to improve themselves. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
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Being steep in poverty does not make one poor if they still have the heart to try to improve themselves. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2017
Comment from doggymad
This takes me back to my own childhood. We weren't poor but my mother dressed us with clothes from another lifetime. Because we were different.
We had values and family life instead.
Wonderful write of the richness of spirit that the poorer people have build into their very core
hugs
Freda
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This takes me back to my own childhood. We weren't poor but my mother dressed us with clothes from another lifetime. Because we were different.
We had values and family life instead.
Wonderful write of the richness of spirit that the poorer people have build into their very core
hugs
Freda
Comment Written 29-Mar-2017
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
This is such a positive poem about the have and have nots and what a sincere and wonderful write it was.
How true it is .....it's not what you have, it's how you are that matters.
Have a great evening
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This is such a positive poem about the have and have nots and what a sincere and wonderful write it was.
How true it is .....it's not what you have, it's how you are that matters.
Have a great evening
Comment Written 29-Mar-2017