Fever
A tropical memory12 total reviews
Comment from frierajac
Reminds me of the Summerset Maugham story, "Rain" . I can remember bits of
his stories at times. That was my favorite. Mostly about rubber plantations.
You may have read these? The detail is fascinating. It brings me up to date with the Maugham stories
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2017
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Reminds me of the Summerset Maugham story, "Rain" . I can remember bits of
his stories at times. That was my favorite. Mostly about rubber plantations.
You may have read these? The detail is fascinating. It brings me up to date with the Maugham stories
Comment Written 30-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2017
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Very many thanks for your review, frierajac. I appreciate your comments. Yes, I've read quite a few of Somerset Maugham's stories. They were of particular interest as my parents lived in the Far East for fifteen years and I spent quite a bit of my childhood in Singapore off and on. Tony
Comment from pome lover
I bet that's a memory you'd just as soon forget, but you told it realistically and put the reader in the picture with your descriptions. Sounds horrific and am sure it was.
With the fever you had and delirium, it's a wonder you remembered it at all.
Nicely told. good luck in the contest.
pome lover
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2017
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I bet that's a memory you'd just as soon forget, but you told it realistically and put the reader in the picture with your descriptions. Sounds horrific and am sure it was.
With the fever you had and delirium, it's a wonder you remembered it at all.
Nicely told. good luck in the contest.
pome lover
Comment Written 28-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2017
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Many thanks for your review of this. You are right, this did knock me about for a while.
I appreciate your good luck wishes. I've just seen that the story was given an Honorable Mention - which is good enough for me!
Comment from strandregs
TFAWCUS
Tony Fawcus, ex-RAF Navigator and Junior School teacher, now living on South Australia's Fleurieu Peninsula where he runs a hobby farm and B&B.
He is an accomplished novelist and is currently at the #11 spot on the rankings.
He is an accomplished poet and is currently at the #31 spot on the rankings.
The Seal of Quality committee has rewarded him with 1 seals. He is also an active reviewer and is holding the #48 spot on the top ranked reviewer list.
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A tropical memoryby tfawcus
I remember a certain climb on a certain hill, where shadows fell like slain men upon the undergrowth
used to fly on herculeses from sharm el sheik to Lod and vice versa.
ah the blue waters.
I love your metaphoric elusidations .
it went to the top.
good luck. :-)) Z.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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TFAWCUS
Tony Fawcus, ex-RAF Navigator and Junior School teacher, now living on South Australia's Fleurieu Peninsula where he runs a hobby farm and B&B.
He is an accomplished novelist and is currently at the #11 spot on the rankings.
He is an accomplished poet and is currently at the #31 spot on the rankings.
The Seal of Quality committee has rewarded him with 1 seals. He is also an active reviewer and is holding the #48 spot on the top ranked reviewer list.
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A tropical memoryby tfawcus
I remember a certain climb on a certain hill, where shadows fell like slain men upon the undergrowth
used to fly on herculeses from sharm el sheik to Lod and vice versa.
ah the blue waters.
I love your metaphoric elusidations .
it went to the top.
good luck. :-)) Z.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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A bit of a boneshaker! I've never been to Israel, but used to fly around the Mediterranean quite regularly- mainly to Malta and Cyprus. Half a century ago!
Comment from nuthead
This reads like poetry! Perhaps your intentions were a prose poem? The alliteration and similar sounds are beautiful to read.
"Sun seeped
tangled / dangle
mists of my suspended memory
Pine Tree Hill, and shiver still"
Gorgeous writing.
"more than a month to this break in the cool of the Cameron Highlands, a hundred miles north of Kuala Lumpur"
That line is pure poetry. Does this come natural to you? Or do you purposefully search for words to make this magic happen?
Dengue fever sounds like a dreadful illness, and how rude for it to hit during your long awaited leave time.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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This reads like poetry! Perhaps your intentions were a prose poem? The alliteration and similar sounds are beautiful to read.
"Sun seeped
tangled / dangle
mists of my suspended memory
Pine Tree Hill, and shiver still"
Gorgeous writing.
"more than a month to this break in the cool of the Cameron Highlands, a hundred miles north of Kuala Lumpur"
That line is pure poetry. Does this come natural to you? Or do you purposefully search for words to make this magic happen?
Dengue fever sounds like a dreadful illness, and how rude for it to hit during your long awaited leave time.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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Many thanks for your very kind review of "Fever" last week, Shirley, and lovely comments about the poetic nature of the first paragraph. Much appreciated. Tony
Comment from IndianaIrish
You are so good with descriptive narrative, Tony. You easily supply the reader with all the details needed to feel a part of your story. I enjoyed reading, but so sorry you had such a horrendous experience. Excellent tale and best wishes in the contest.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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You are so good with descriptive narrative, Tony. You easily supply the reader with all the details needed to feel a part of your story. I enjoyed reading, but so sorry you had such a horrendous experience. Excellent tale and best wishes in the contest.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment Written 20-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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Many thanks for your very kind review of "Fever" last week, Karyn, and good luck wishes for the contest. Much appreciated. Tony
Comment from lyenochka
Oh my! What a memory! So sorry you had dengue fever. Loved your description of the climb uphill (shadows like slain men) and the very colorful car! What a terrible way to spend a vacation!
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
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Oh my! What a memory! So sorry you had dengue fever. Loved your description of the climb uphill (shadows like slain men) and the very colorful car! What a terrible way to spend a vacation!
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
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I've been posting too much recently and having difficulty clearing the backlog of my reviews. I do appreciate your taking the time to read and respond to this one - especially as I didn't promote it. All the best, Tony
Comment from BeasPeas
This is an interesting 'I Remember' entry. Dengue fever is quite something. I never had it as when I flew for Pan Am, we had shots on top of shots for travel. However, friends did get Dengue which was not a good experience for them. Your story is well written and interesting. Much luck in the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
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This is an interesting 'I Remember' entry. Dengue fever is quite something. I never had it as when I flew for Pan Am, we had shots on top of shots for travel. However, friends did get Dengue which was not a good experience for them. Your story is well written and interesting. Much luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
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I've been posting too much recently and having difficulty clearing the backlog of my reviews. I do appreciate your taking the time to read and respond to this one - especially as I didn't promote it. All the best, Tony
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I agree, Tony. We all get backlogged here on this site. A challenge to keep up sometimes. :) Marilyn
Comment from Pantygynt
Well you got to see the Camerons which is more than I did, neither did i succumb to the Dengue I am pleased to relate. I did manage Penang and a very ineresting reailway journey up there from Singapore. Flew back with a proper airlaine. Lol. The first paragragraph of your tale is fine descriptive writing. Brought the Ulu back alive in my memory.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
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Well you got to see the Camerons which is more than I did, neither did i succumb to the Dengue I am pleased to relate. I did manage Penang and a very ineresting reailway journey up there from Singapore. Flew back with a proper airlaine. Lol. The first paragragraph of your tale is fine descriptive writing. Brought the Ulu back alive in my memory.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
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I've been posting too much recently and having difficulty clearing the backlog of my reviews. I once made the journey up to Penang by rail - a real touch of old Empire days! BR could have learnt a thing or two!
Comment from w.j.debi
I am glad you survived the journey to the hospital. It sounds like your survival may have been iffy. The guard was not a nice guy.
Excellent narrative and descriptions. Good luck in the contest with this well written snippet.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
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I am glad you survived the journey to the hospital. It sounds like your survival may have been iffy. The guard was not a nice guy.
Excellent narrative and descriptions. Good luck in the contest with this well written snippet.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
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I've been posting too much recently and having difficulty clearing the backlog of my reviews. I do appreciate your taking the time to read and respond to this one - especially as I didn't promote it. All the best, Tony
Comment from Mark Valentine
Right from the start, the writing in this one is superb ("shadows fell like slain men upon the undergrowth of giant ferns"). Sounds like something from Joseph Conrad. We've all experienced fevers, but when the context is an exotic country and an all-too-short military leave, the drama is intensified. A great contest entry.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
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Right from the start, the writing in this one is superb ("shadows fell like slain men upon the undergrowth of giant ferns"). Sounds like something from Joseph Conrad. We've all experienced fevers, but when the context is an exotic country and an all-too-short military leave, the drama is intensified. A great contest entry.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
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I've been posting too much recently and having difficulty clearing the backlog of my reviews. I do appreciate your taking the time to read and respond to this one - especially as I didn't promote it. Joseph Conrad - now there's a complimentary comparison! All the best, Tony