2017 JAPANESE POETRY
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "haibun (king of nothing)"A collection of Japanese poetry
26 total reviews
Comment from Grasshopper2
Gypsy Blue Rose,
This is a poignant and contemporary snapshot of one of our societal failings. I think it interesting that he made eye contact and seemed to hold some dignity about himself. You captured this on paper in fine style. Your photo looks like a good friend of mine.
Take care,
Michael
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Gypsy Blue Rose,
This is a poignant and contemporary snapshot of one of our societal failings. I think it interesting that he made eye contact and seemed to hold some dignity about himself. You captured this on paper in fine style. Your photo looks like a good friend of mine.
Take care,
Michael
Comment Written 14-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Hello, my friend,
Thank you, sweetie pie, I really appreciate your review.
Namaste,
Gypsy Haijin Sensei
Haiku Instructor and published author
member of the Haiku Society of America
Comment from l.raven
Gypsy, I know he will love this...you never know what position in life people on the street once had...sigh...very well written ....Queen of Haiku...and what a picture...love ya you..Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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Gypsy, I know he will love this...you never know what position in life people on the street once had...sigh...very well written ....Queen of Haiku...and what a picture...love ya you..Linda xxoo
Comment Written 10-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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Thank you very much, my sweet friend, I am grateful for your excellent review and kind words.You are the bomb! luv ya
namaste
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you are always sooooo welcome...xxoo love ya
Comment from winnona
a well-written poem. in a way this sums all of us up. All of us think we are so important and in reality in some ways we are, but, as a whole ,we are all really kings of nothing. The artwork completed the piece well.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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a well-written poem. in a way this sums all of us up. All of us think we are so important and in reality in some ways we are, but, as a whole ,we are all really kings of nothing. The artwork completed the piece well.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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Thank you very much, my friend, I am grateful for your excellent review and kind words.
namaste
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for highlighting a growing societal problem in your haibun. I admired your use of the misapprehension of the "king's cape" and your choices of "nowhere" and "nothing" for emphasis. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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Thank you for highlighting a growing societal problem in your haibun. I admired your use of the misapprehension of the "king's cape" and your choices of "nowhere" and "nothing" for emphasis. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 09-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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Thank you very much, my sweet friend, I am grateful for your excellent review, six stars, and kind words. Big hugs, sweetie pie.
namaste
Comment from ciliverde
This is amazing, Gypsy. I love that you saw a king wearing a cape at first, shimmering in the heat, with that ethereal quality. As you see him move closer and notice that it's a blanket, not a cape, the picture changes vastly. I'd say he's King of Nothing (as opposed to nothing).
What is the significance of Sumner? Did you mean Summer, in the final haiku section?
Oh, I love that you bowed to each other - nice touch.
Carol
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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This is amazing, Gypsy. I love that you saw a king wearing a cape at first, shimmering in the heat, with that ethereal quality. As you see him move closer and notice that it's a blanket, not a cape, the picture changes vastly. I'd say he's King of Nothing (as opposed to nothing).
What is the significance of Sumner? Did you mean Summer, in the final haiku section?
Oh, I love that you bowed to each other - nice touch.
Carol
Comment Written 09-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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I made a mistake, it is summer. I changed it. Thank you for letting me know :)
thank you for the excellent review and helpful feedback :) my friend
namaste
Comment from Kerry Foley
That was terrific Ms. Gypsy. It was quit funny as well. I laughed when your king turned out to be a homeless man with a blanket. The Haiku was great. I didn't know If you intended to spell sumner or is it a typo. Just thought I'd let you know.
That is the second time I heard the phrase "King of Nothing" it was really fitting.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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That was terrific Ms. Gypsy. It was quit funny as well. I laughed when your king turned out to be a homeless man with a blanket. The Haiku was great. I didn't know If you intended to spell sumner or is it a typo. Just thought I'd let you know.
That is the second time I heard the phrase "King of Nothing" it was really fitting.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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thank you for the excellent review and helpful feedback :) my friend
namaste
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Your very welcome.
Comment from BOO ghost
king of nothing must be a nick name for you know who. yeah, love Metallica and I di not really know that there was a name for poetry and prose mixed together. Enjoyed the music and the prose/haiku combination. Now you can be Cinderella. BOO-tastic!
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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king of nothing must be a nick name for you know who. yeah, love Metallica and I di not really know that there was a name for poetry and prose mixed together. Enjoyed the music and the prose/haiku combination. Now you can be Cinderella. BOO-tastic!
Comment Written 09-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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thank you for the excellent review and helpful feedback :) my friend
namaste
Comment from judiverse
This is wonderful. I like how the man who appears to be a king turns out to be a homeless man with a blanket wrapped around him. Excellent description of the season, and the mutual bow is a nice touch. Shows how even a random encounter can be meaningful. Your Haiku is great, too. It involves the feeling created by the appearance of the homeless man. King of nothing is an excellent description. judi
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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This is wonderful. I like how the man who appears to be a king turns out to be a homeless man with a blanket wrapped around him. Excellent description of the season, and the mutual bow is a nice touch. Shows how even a random encounter can be meaningful. Your Haiku is great, too. It involves the feeling created by the appearance of the homeless man. King of nothing is an excellent description. judi
Comment Written 09-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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thank you for the excellent review and helpful feedback :) my friend
namaste
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You're very welcome. judi
Comment from Douglas Paul
I think this is outstanding, my friend. A great observation about your experience. You described the situation very well in the prose and the haiku is a wonderful insight into the situation. Very well done
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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I think this is outstanding, my friend. A great observation about your experience. You described the situation very well in the prose and the haiku is a wonderful insight into the situation. Very well done
Comment Written 09-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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thank you for the excellent review and helpful feedback :) my friend super thanks for the fantastic six stars!
namaste
Comment from Ulla
Hola Guapa, como estas? This is a wonderful haibun, and I live the title/satori. King of nothing. Beautiful observation of time. I wish I had a six. Un abrazo de tu amiga Ulla:)))
ps I'm delighted that I have had a haiku elected for the book.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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Hola Guapa, como estas? This is a wonderful haibun, and I live the title/satori. King of nothing. Beautiful observation of time. I wish I had a six. Un abrazo de tu amiga Ulla:)))
ps I'm delighted that I have had a haiku elected for the book.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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hola bonita, estoy bien, ojala que tu tambien,
thank you for the excellent review and helpful feedback :) my friend
namaste