Senryu (ice cream castles)
I dream ice cream!72 total reviews
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello Sis Cat, I can see why your senryu was a contest winner.
Great alliteration:
cream castles chill
children's
(just fantastic)
Your poem is filled with joyful imagery and leaves the reader with the feeling of ahh. Well done. Congratuations on a well-deserved win. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2017
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Hello Sis Cat, I can see why your senryu was a contest winner.
Great alliteration:
cream castles chill
children's
(just fantastic)
Your poem is filled with joyful imagery and leaves the reader with the feeling of ahh. Well done. Congratuations on a well-deserved win. LateBloomer
Comment Written 12-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2017
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Thank you, LateBloomer, for your generous, six star review and congratulations on my award-winning poem. I am glad you found it fantastic!
Comment from rama devi
Congrats on winning the contest, dear friend. I'd missed this one (perhaps it was a blind contest...?) Good tone and imagery. Good presentation. Good form. NIce internal rhyme (though I am unsure if traditional senryu really permits rhymes or not...i still like it!) nice alliteration of C and consonance of L and M and S
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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Congrats on winning the contest, dear friend. I'd missed this one (perhaps it was a blind contest...?) Good tone and imagery. Good presentation. Good form. NIce internal rhyme (though I am unsure if traditional senryu really permits rhymes or not...i still like it!) nice alliteration of C and consonance of L and M and S
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 07-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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Oh, thank you, Rama, for your review of my senryu. It was a blind contest which is why you were not notified. Thanks again.
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:-)))
Comment from Mark Schardine
Even when the temperature drops well below freezing, and we should think of hot food, we dream of ice cream, frozen yogurt, or gelato.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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Even when the temperature drops well below freezing, and we should think of hot food, we dream of ice cream, frozen yogurt, or gelato.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Mark, for giving my award-winning Senryu its last review before the certificate expired. We had hail in the lower elevations and snow in the upper throughout the Bay Area today and I would still eat ice cream, frozen yogurt, or gelato. Thanks.
Comment from kathleenspalding
Excellent senryu makes me want a bowl :-D. Poem flows well and creates a strong mental image using very few words. Good use of alliteration. I don't see anything that needs to be changed.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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Excellent senryu makes me want a bowl :-D. Poem flows well and creates a strong mental image using very few words. Good use of alliteration. I don't see anything that needs to be changed.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Kathleen, for your review. I am quite thrilled that this senryu won the contest. Thank you for your support.
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Congratulations!!! And, you're welcome.
Comment from Grasshopper2
Andre,
Hello classmate. I am excited about the tanka class and elated you are taking the class, too. I have taken both haiku classes Gypsy teaches and jumpede at the opportunity to learn tanka. As Ed Sullivan said, "It's a reeely beeg show!" Oh, yeah, your poem. Ye-haw and tabasco! Congratulations on winning the Write a Senryu Contest. Your's is a fun read and tweakede my three the gray cells of whimsy.
Michael
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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Andre,
Hello classmate. I am excited about the tanka class and elated you are taking the class, too. I have taken both haiku classes Gypsy teaches and jumpede at the opportunity to learn tanka. As Ed Sullivan said, "It's a reeely beeg show!" Oh, yeah, your poem. Ye-haw and tabasco! Congratulations on winning the Write a Senryu Contest. Your's is a fun read and tweakede my three the gray cells of whimsy.
Michael
Comment Written 05-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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Oh, thank you, Michael, for your review and for congratulating me on my senryu contest win. I look forward to working with you in class.
Comment from Poetic Friend
SIs Cat,
I can see why this senyru won the contest. Who does like reading a poem about ice cream? In fact, after reading this poem, I am craving ice cream. I can imagine children dreaming about ice cream as I read this poem. I LOVE the last line, which was very clever to use Shakespeare's work.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2017
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SIs Cat,
I can see why this senyru won the contest. Who does like reading a poem about ice cream? In fact, after reading this poem, I am craving ice cream. I can imagine children dreaming about ice cream as I read this poem. I LOVE the last line, which was very clever to use Shakespeare's work.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2017
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Oh, thank you, Poetic Friend, for your review and your congrats in the contest. yes, ice cream has a universal appeal. I am also glad that you LOVE my nod to Shakespeare.
Comment from janalma
This is so sweet (pun intended, lol) I have trouble keeping ice cream in the freezer--my grandkids are ice cream fiends. Thanks a lot for doing this to me when I'm trying to be good and not eat all that delicious stuff. Lol. Tasty senryu.
And, by the way, congrats on your win.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2017
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This is so sweet (pun intended, lol) I have trouble keeping ice cream in the freezer--my grandkids are ice cream fiends. Thanks a lot for doing this to me when I'm trying to be good and not eat all that delicious stuff. Lol. Tasty senryu.
And, by the way, congrats on your win.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2017
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Thank you, janalma, for your review of my tasty senryu. I am thrilled and chilled that it won the contest. Thanks for the congrats.
Comment from angel123
I like your meaningful poem and I enjoyed reading it. It flows well with good use of alliteration of words cream, castles, chill and your artwork choice goes well with your thoughts.
angel123
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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I like your meaningful poem and I enjoyed reading it. It flows well with good use of alliteration of words cream, castles, chill and your artwork choice goes well with your thoughts.
angel123
Comment Written 05-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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Oh, thank you, angel123, for your generous review of my senryu which won the contest. I am glad you liked and enjoyed the meaning of my poem.
Comment from nuthead
Sweet poem. I love the visual of an ice cream castle chilling the tongues of young and old. Enjoyed the pairing of chill / thrill and cream / dream rhymes.
Senyru, syllable count: 5-7-5
ice cream castles chill
children's tongues and thrill old souls--
midsummer night's dream
Well done! Enjoyed reading this poem.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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Sweet poem. I love the visual of an ice cream castle chilling the tongues of young and old. Enjoyed the pairing of chill / thrill and cream / dream rhymes.
Senyru, syllable count: 5-7-5
ice cream castles chill
children's tongues and thrill old souls--
midsummer night's dream
Well done! Enjoyed reading this poem.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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Oh thank you, sjharshenin, for your review. I have just won the senryu contest with this poem. I am thrilled and chilled. Thank you very much for your review.
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Congratulations! :)
Comment from l.raven
to only be young again...dreams of Christmas morning...dreams of Easter morning...dreams of ice cream castles...sigh...love your poem...and love the picture...Linda xxxoo
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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to only be young again...dreams of Christmas morning...dreams of Easter morning...dreams of ice cream castles...sigh...love your poem...and love the picture...Linda xxxoo
Comment Written 04-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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Oh, thank you, Linda, for your review. I am glad this made you reflect upon your childhood memories.
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your so welcome Andre...always...love xxoo
